Issue36 [越洋农场]pewcg8未限时(头晕写完)

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第八次小组作业：ISSUE36. "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
一个人是否伟大是由后人评定的而非他同时代的人。
（时间先后，属于历史类问题）

题目分析：
写之前想到的可能要用的说法：
１．        晚辈（monkeycola提醒的）junior descendant  the younger generation 甚至可以说one’s children(不过这里强调的是亲情关系上的晚辈)
２．        同时代的人：除了题目所说的contemporaries还有：people of one’s time  sb. be contemporary with sb.  表达同时代的可以说coeval
３．        伟大人物除了用greatness表示还可以说a man of note
４．        ＂成就＂的说法：achievement　　 accomplishments　　 success　　 honor

Brainstorming:由于同时代的人们思维的局限性，许多伟大的科学发现和人文，艺术成就是无法被同时代人物所发现的，甚至许多是被当时人物所批评的，有的时候，越是伟大，你的思想就越没办法被同时代人所接受，比如爱因斯坦（我不会举这个例子，举的人太多了，我会换种方式提到他），我们甚至有的时候可以提出这样的结论，越是疯狂，越是伟大？？？扯远了，但是，许多人物也是被当代人在评价的，比如霍金，比如曼德拉，比如以色列前总理拉宾（这个同时代应该不局限于人物的有生只年），因为他们做出的科学或者其他方面成绩在一些方面是可见的或者说是可以被认识的．当然，我们不能排除这样的可能性，就是有些在当代被人们认可或者崇拜的成就或许在多年之后被发现它并不那么显著等等．这些都是无法预见的，就像我们无法预见科学发展的极限和未来．在这个复杂的社会，我们越来越难评价人的成就，也许后辈们会有一个更为公正的评价．当代人的评价就是能够更帖合当代的实际，更注重伟人贡献的现实意义，并带有适度的前瞻性；而后人的评价可能会站在更深远和广阔的角度来看待问题，对伟人的评价会更加全面．

提纲：
观点：平衡观点．在这个复杂的社会，我们越来越难评价人的成就，当代和后辈都有资格评价一个人是否伟大．
正文段１：社会复杂，定义一个人是否伟大有很多不同的标准（算是建立一个论述的背景）
正文段２：当代人的评价，由于和伟人同时代，许多甚至和他熟识，这方便我们洞察他的内心和动机，同时，身处同时代，更能体会到做出成就的过程，期间的艰辛，也就更能从人文关怀的角度做出评价．
正文段３：后辈的评价，更加的全面，从更高的角度看待问题，注重伟人贡献的深远意义，更能屏弃时代和个人局限，做出公正的评价．
正文段４：许多时候，重大的贡献可能会被当代忽视，甚至攻击，后代才能为这些人平反，但是有的时候，对当代有意义的平凡的贡献又可能被后代遗忘．
结论：当代人的评价就是能够更帖合当代的实际，更注重伟人贡献的现实意义，并带有适度的前瞻性；而后人的评价可能会站在更深远和广阔的角度来看待问题，对伟人的评价会更加全面．这算是一个总结性的论述．

正文：
TOPIC: ISSUE36 - "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
WORDS: 549          TIME: 0:58:51          DATE: 2006-7-26

As our society becomes more complicated, it seems quite difficult for us to evaluate the accomplishments of great people of our time. This coincides with the feeling that it is as hard to judge the achievements of people of our preceding generations. In other words, deciding the greatness of contemporaries has no advantage over determining the greatness of our seniors.

The reason which can explain these two feelings is clear is as following. Since our society are developing into a diverse one, in which all kinds of ideas are mixed, it is impossible to find a criterion suitable enough and accepted by all the people to assess these great human-beings in preceding times as well as ours. Some people describe people whose invention can change the way people live in the future as  a man of note, while some other people rank first in the eyes of people who believe influencing people's ways of thinking to be the most important character of great man. The comparison between these two standards is not strange. There is also debate on whether the accomplishments should be judged by his or her contemporaries or by their descendants. Due to the respective standards they take, these phenomenons seem possible to take place.

Firstly, assessments of contemporaries are based on the standards of their time and sometimes confined to the scope of theirs. People of our generation can never foresee the future of Einstein's glorious theory of relativity, not to mention his contemporaries. Only standing up on great man's shoulders can we better evaluate the greatness of important breakthrough in science, economics and other fields, which people of Einstein’s time can not succeed in doing. As we all know, Einstein's principle was in the center of a heat debate of his contemporaries, having no giant's shoulder to stand on, these people surely can never seen that far. But after about 30years, with the development of science and society, people nowadays are able to find a wilder scope to judge his achievements, or in other words, a new standard. We can now look at his theory on a more holistic plane. We can also remove personal prejudice from our criterion which is somewhat impossible in his time. Most importantly, our evaluation will be based on long term effect. All of these just come together to show that our judgment will be more objective.

Meanwhile, we can not ignore those comments from these great men's contemporaries as their ways of assessing will be more detailed. Since these people live at the same time with those men of note, they can better understand the difficulties those great men face therefore can appreciate those celebrities' originalities and perseverances. Some people were even these great men's friends or families, and in this situation, they have the most pervasive voice. They can tell us how these great men think and how they come up with those initiative ideas. Their words help a lot in determining the greatness of these men.

History is replete with examples of unfair assessments of great men and their achievements as well as examples of neglecting of accomplishments of great men in earlier times. Therefore, it is better to combine these two kinds of evaluations together and make a more full-scaled judgment of a man of note.

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As our society becomes more complicated, it seems quite difficult for us to evaluate the accomplishments of great people of our time. This coincides with the feeling that it is as hard to judge the achievements of people of our preceding generations. In other words, deciding the greatness of contemporaries has no advantage over determining the greatness of our seniors.

The reason which can explain these two feelings is clear is as following. （好像有点语法问题呀 The reason which can explain these two feelings is as following.）Since our society are developing into a diverse one, in which all kinds of ideas are mixed (新东方的老师说，能不用which尽量不用；改为Since all kinds of ideas are mixed in such a more and more diverse society如何?), it is impossible to find a criterion suitable enough（是不是应该加上个for） and accepted by all the people to assess these great human-beings in preceding times as well as ours. Some people describe people whose invention can change the way people live in the future as  a man of note（建议把第一个people去掉）, while some other people rank first in the eyes of people （是不是可以改成those。个人认为用people次数太多了）who believe influencing people's ways of thinking to be the most important character of great man. The comparison between these two standards is not strange. There is also debate on whether the accomplishments should be judged by his or her contemporaries or by their descendants. Due to the respective standards they take, these phenomenons （Typo要小心哦）seem possible to take place.

Firstly, assessments of contemporaries are based on the standards of their time and sometimes confined to the scope of theirs. People of our generation can never foresee the future of Einstein's glorious theory of relativity, not to mention his contemporaries. Only standing up on great man's shoulders can we better evaluate the greatness of important breakthrough in science, economics and other fields, which people of Einstein’s time can not succeed in doing.(建议改一下，有点拗口；which would not be available for the coevals of Einstein.) As we all know, Einstein's principle was in the center of a heat debate of his contemporaries, having no giant's shoulder to stand on, these people surely can never seen that far. But after about 30years, with the development of science and society, people nowadays are able to find a wilder scope to judge his achievements, or in other words, a new standard(是不是可以放到scope后面). We can now look at his theory on a more holistic plane. We can also remove personal prejudice from our criterion which is somewhat impossible in his time. Most importantly, our evaluation will be based on long term effect. All of these just come together to show that our judgment will be more objective.

Meanwhile, we can not ignore those comments from these great men's contemporaries as their ways of assessing will be more detailed. Since these people live at the same time with those men of note, they can better understand the difficulties those great men face （建议加上“，and”）  therefore can appreciate those celebrities' originalities and perseverances （perseverance不可数名词）. Some people were even these great men's friends or families, and in this situation, they have the most pervasive voice. They can tell us how these great men think and how they come up with those initiative ideas. Their words help a lot in determining the greatness of these men. （是不是应该加一个段落总结句？）

History is replete with examples of unfair assessments of great men and their achievements as well as examples of neglecting of accomplishments of great men in earlier times. Therefore, it is better to combine these two kinds of evaluations together and make a more full-scaled judgment of a man of note.


关于文章idea跟结构：
1．        个人比较欣赏Pewcg8的idea和逻辑。
2．        文章开始先建立一个论述背景，这种写法不错，但是蜗牛认为它在整篇文章中所占的笔墨是否多了一点，感觉到了para3才正式进入自己的论述。所以，蜗牛认为在结构上是不是应该有所调整。
关于语言：
1．        后几个para论述的都还不错，except that： A.有些句子的结构还可以改进，比如说在能不用从句的地方尽量不用，用分词来代替。B. 词语的使用上可以多一些变化， 如people，contemporaries等。
2．        Typo 和小的语法错误也要注意一点哦
                           
                                      ------------By Alfred