我的同步写作第一期作文

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138. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to be a member of a group than to be the leader of a group. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People always face the circumstance: when joining in a group, which is better, to be the leader or only to be a member. Everyone has his own choice which depends on his own experience, ability and personality. As far as I am concerned, I prefer to be a leader. There are numerous reasons can justify my point. And I would in here illuminate a few of the most important ones.

In the first place, being the leader of a group, you must face lots of problems, not only planning developing strategy and organizing activities, but also dealing with abrupt circumstances. By solving these things, you are able to improve your ability and gain others’ respect.

In the second place, being the leader of a group, you may serve people in and out of the group in a more active way. Take our association of protecting environment for example. Being a member, all you can do is to put on your proposals and execute the decisions. However, being the leader, you have the right of making decisions. By organizing various activities, you will be the key role of fulfilling your group’s goal to protect the environment. In other words, your hard work is more valuable to the whole group.

What’s more, it is helpful of your experience to leading a group to your job-hunting. Our society is so competitive that every step forward is important. Not only because may the companies consider you a capable person, but also because your ability to conquer difficulties indeed improves by the process of leading a group.

People who prefer to be a member may favor the off-responsibility, but, in my view, the faults may be hard to afford, they can also make a person more and more responsible to his actions.

From all discussion above, we can find more advantages to be the leader of a group. So, I believe that you won’t be a giant if you don’t pass through hardness.

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138. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to be a member of a group than to be the leader of a group. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People always face the circumstance: when joining in a group, which is better, to be the leader or only to be a member. Everyone has his own choice which depends on his own experience, ability and personality. As far as I am concerned,这句已经被用烂了，换一句别的, I prefer to be a leader. There are numerous reasons can justify my point. And I would in here illuminate a few of the most important ones.

In the first place, being the leader of a group, you must face lots of problems, not only planning developing，是否有重复的意思？ strategy and organizing activities, but also dealing with abrupt circumstances. By solving these things, you are able to improve your ability and gain others’ respect.

In the second place, being the leader of a group, you may serve people in and out of the group in a more active way. Take our association of protecting environment for example. Being a member, all you can do is to put on your proposals and execute the decisions. However, being the leader, you have the right of making decisions. By organizing various activities, you will be the key role of fulfilling your group’s goal to protect the environment. In other words, your hard work is more valuable to the whole group.

What’s more, it is helpful of your experience to leading a group to your job-hunting. 这句的表达貌似有问题:oOur society is so competitive that every step forward is important. Not only because may？？？ the companies consider you a capable person, but also because your ability to conquer difficulties indeed improves by改为through the process of leading a group.

People who prefer to be a member may favor the off-responsibility, but, in my view, the faults may be hard to afford, they can also make a person more and more responsible to his actions.

From all discussion above, we can find more advantages to be the leader of a group. So, I believe that you won’t be a giant if you don’t pass through hardness.


整体还是很不错的，很流畅，但是有些地方的表达注意要清晰点
还有就是倒数第2段
个人还是觉得不能一味地说A好，对于B，我觉得在文章中还是需要小小地列一下他的好处，文章看起来才思维缜密，客观而不绝对化

鉴于是第一个上缴作文同主题的，手痒眼痒忍不住动了一下:p

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看得手痒 我也写我也写 现在马上写
前辈帮忙改改好不好:)

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原帖由 扁舟子001 于 2006-7-28 13:11 发表

万分感谢~~

这篇文章是很难写
尤其是中间的一些说法的斟酌，
其实已经尽可能的写得快了
但还是超时了：（

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原帖由 扁舟子001 于 2006-7-28 13:11 发表

再btw，最后一句话实在是我能想到的最好的结尾了，总是不太愿意再罗罗嗦嗦的把前面的观点重新罗列一遍，而且，一般写到这个时候就差不多该到时间了：P

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原帖由 yanhuangbaby 于 2006-7-27 17:47 发表
138. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to be a member of a group than to be the leader of a group. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Peo ...

首先，十分感谢给我的砖头~~

针对你的意见俺讨论和修改了一下结尾：

主要是我实在没觉得be a member有什么好处好讲的，又不想把它扯到personality上去，因为一扯就得写好长，否则说不清楚：（
不然，把倒数第二段改成这样如何？
I must admit that as a member of a group, you can get some experience as well and needn’t worry about committing any fault in making decision. But just as a coin has two sides, off-responsibility also means less challenge. People who take on more suffering from error will become more responsible to his actions.
然后最后一段加上：
Whether be a leader also has something to do with one’s personality. But generally speaking, we can gain more benefits from the leadership. So, I believe that you won’t be a giant if you don’t pass through hardness.

这样是不是更好一些呢？