issue43 【越洋农场站队】手感尽失，欢迎来凌辱

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TOPIC: ISSUE43 - "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."
WORDS: 540          TIME: 0:44:29          DATE: 2006-7-27

没有手感………… 写的很烂

In this contemporary society, there are increasing needs for an effective leader in almost every realms especially in politic, for the sake of greater goals and more confident life than we have now. But what is the most significant characteristic an effective leader should own? Different people may offer their respective ideas such as "hard working", "hornorst (integrity)". In my point of view,  higher ethical and moral standards than average will weight more than other characteristics for a leader to be effective.

First and foremost, keep a highest ethical and moral standards will make a leader make decisions more uninterested, which means he/she will not be influenced by some forces of his own subjective ideas but just for the majority of public's interests. We could imagine that a leader will suffer a lot of pressure around, like his party, when he mush make a decision such as sign a bill or just said something because his/her power and influence of the public will lead results from which some party or forces could get interests. If the decision or ideas form the leader can not stand for the majority of public, how could we expect efficient the leader will brought? So the highest ethical and moral standards will make sure the leader make a better decision and became the basis lead to the effective way.

Another reason why I advocate a effective leader should own highest ethical and moral standards is that only could a leader  consider almost every aspects of problems he/she faced, his/her final decision will be a useful and effective one, if not, the decision will, of course, have some flaws. It is very difficult to consider every aspects of a problem, but a leader who lead a lot people do have the responsibility to have that done. The only way to achieve that is make his/her ethical and moral standards higher and higher, then could he/she understand almost every classes' ideas in the public so the leader could not ignore some aspects of the problems. If not, the leader's own imagine or subjective ideas may overweight than the objective fact but he/she do not realize. Although it may take more time but consider what will happen when flaws turn up-------solve the problems again. So highest ethical and moral standards will let the leader solve the problems without flaws and also save the time.

May be some people hold that opinion the ability is the only thing that means to a effective leader. But just consider if a leader own higher ability but lower ethical and moral standards, what will happen? May be he/she will solve his/her own problems most efficient, or may become a dangerous leader--------just as the Hitler. So the highest ethical and moral standards may overweight than the ability for a effective leader.

All in all, if all the factors I just discussed could be considered, we could safely reach the point that the highest ethical and moral standards really means to a effective leader. But it will make the leader’s work more efficient if we could also pay attention to the leader’s ability, after all, we public need his/her provident view to lead us on the way we fighting for our goals.

[ 本帖最后由 WWWXXX2 于 2006-7-27 17:49 编辑 ]

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In this contemporary society, there are increasing needs for an effective leader in almost every realms especially in politic, for the sake of greater goals and more confident life (为什么confident life与政治有关？）than we have now. But what is the most significant characteristic an effective leader should own? Different people may offer their respective ideas such as "hard working", "hornorst (integrity)". In my point of view,  higher ethical and moral standards than average will weight more than other characteristics for a leader to be effective.（直接说higher ethical and moral standards is the most important virtue,这样会明确一点）

First and foremost, keep(keeping) a（去掉，因为后面的standards用复数） highest ethical and moral standards will make a leader make decisions more uninterested(尽量简洁一点和不要在相近的地方重复用词 will lead to more uninterested decisions), which means he/she will not(这里讲得太绝对） be influenced by some forces of （有点罗嗦，去掉some forces of）his own subjective ideas but just for the majority of public's interests. We could imagine that a leader will suffer a lot of pressure around, like his party, when he mush（拼错单词，或者可以去掉must） make a decision such as sign(signing) a bill or just said something(不够specific,有点模糊） because his/her power and influence of the public will lead results from which some party or forces could get interests.（跟前面有点语义重复） If the decision or ideas form the leader can not stand for the majority of public, how could we expect efficient(efficiency) the leader will brought(bring)?(改为how the expected efficiency comes会不会好一点？) So the highest ethical and moral standards will make sure the leader make a better decision and became the basis lead to the effective way.(有点罗嗦，可改为will ensure better decisions and more effective administration)

Another reason why I advocate a(an) effective leader should own highest ethical and moral standards is that only could a leader  consider almost every aspects of problems he/she faced, his/her final decision will be a useful and effective one(这里句型好像不太对，应该是：前面用正常语序，后面采用倒装的吧）, if not, the decision will, of course, have some flaws. It is very difficult to consider every aspects of a problem, but a leader who lead a lot people do have the responsibility to have that done. The only way to achieve that is make his/her ethical and moral standards higher and higher（不知道改为is upgrading the ethical mand moral standards会不会好一点）, then could he/she understand almost every classes' ideas in the public so the leader could not ignore some aspects of the problems. If not, the leader's own imagine(imagination) or subjective ideas may overweight than(outweigh,去掉than） the objective fact but he/she do not realize（without self-realization). Although it may take more time but consider what will happen when flaws turn up-------solve the problems again. So highest ethical and moral standards will let the leader solve the problems without flaws and also save the time.(这里讲得太绝对了吧）

May be some people hold that opinion（Some might think that) the(去掉the) ability is the only thing that means to a(an) effective leader. But just consider if a leader own(owns) higher ability but lower ethical and moral standards, what will happen? May be he/she will solve his/her own problems most efficient(efficiently), or may become a dangerous leader--------just as the(去掉the) Hitler. So the highest ethical and moral standards may overweight than (outweigh)the ability for a(an) effective leader.

All in all, if all the factors I just discussed could be considered, we could safely reach the point that the highest ethical and moral standards really means to a(an) effective leader. But it will make the leader’s work more efficient if we could also pay attention to the leader’s ability, after all, we public need his/her provident view to lead us on the way we fighting(fight) for our goals.


观点还可以。
1.第三段，highest ethical standards似乎和considerate leader没有十分必要的因果关系。最好能加上apart from excellent analytical skills and an overall horizon。要首先排除掉这两个原因，才能继续论证。
2.语言有一点点罗嗦，有可能是时间匆忙的缘故吧。不过he/she这种表达太多了，可不可以用one来代替？

第一次改别人的issue, 不知道提得对不对
也欢迎回拍，多提意见~~~~

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[ 本帖最后由 bearhj 于 2006-7-28 12:51 编辑 ]

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In this contemporary society, there are increasing needs for an effective leader in almost every realms especially in politic, for the sake of greater goals and a more confident life than we have now. But what is the most significant characteristic an effective leader should own? Different people may offer their respective ideas such as "hard working", "hornorst (integrity)". In my point of view,  higher ethical and moral standards than average will weight more than other characteristics for a leader to be effective.

First and foremost, keep a keeping highest ethical and moral standards will make a leader make decisions more uninterested objectively, which means he/she will not be influenced by some forces force 想表达什么？ of his own subjective ideas but just for the majority of public's public interests. We could imagine that a leader will suffer a lot of pressure around, like his party, when he mush make a decision such as sign signing a bill or just said something because his/her power and influence of the public will lead results from lead ,results from? 说实话，不怎么明白你说啥呢这是 which some party or forces could get interests. If the decision or ideas form the leader can not stand for the majority of public, how could we expect efficient the leader will brought bring? So the highest ethical and moral standards will make sure the leader make a better decision and became the basis lead to the effective way.
说理似乎有点空洞，没有具体的解释清楚
Another reason why I advocate a effective leader should own highest ethical and moral standards is that only could a leader  consider almost every aspects of problems he/she faced, his/her final decision pl. will be a useful and effective one, if not, the decision will, of course, have some flaws.这么绝对呀 It is very difficult to consider every aspects of a problem, but a leader who lead a lot people do have the responsibility to have that done. The only way to achieve that is make his/her ethical and moral standards higher and higher, then could he/she understand almost every classes' hierarchy’s ideas in the public so the leader could not ignore some aspects of the problems. If not, the leader's own imagine or subjective ideas may overweight than the objective fact but he/she do not realize. Although it may take more time but consider what will happen when flaws turn up-------solve the problems again. So highest ethical and moral standards will let the leader solve the problems without flaws and also save the time.
大哥，咱让事实说话行不行啊？May be some people hold that opinion the ability is the only thing that means to a an effective leader. But just consider if a leader own higher ability but lower ethical and moral standards, what will happen? May be he/she will solve his/her own problems most efficient, or may become a dangerous leader--------just as the Hitler. Hilter怎么了？specific! So the highest ethical and moral standards may overweight than the ability for a effective leader.

All in all, if all the factors I just discussed could be considered, we could safely reach the point that the highest ethical and moral standards really means to a effective leader. But it will make the leader’s work more efficient if we could also pay attention to the leader’s ability, after all, we public need his/her provident view to lead us on the way we fighting for our goals.

LZ够可以，540个字没有一个具体的实例呀，这样不太合适吧？
再是问题讨论的没有深入，就是几个表面问题上打转，感觉特别是B1，2，说得是同样的问题吧？
深度和广度都需要挖掘

JJ心情不好，批得狠的话DD包涵，还是很羡慕你44分钟写这么多字的

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晕倒，现在才看到……谢谢大家5555

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不是我不想举例，我只是想增强论证的比例，结果缺少了例子确实生涩，看来反效果啊

关于论点绝对的问题是有，不过鉴于不是写argument，所以不能有模棱两可的论点，这是老师的原话……^_^
总之谢谢同志们，听取意见，努力改进

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