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ISSUE167. "It is impossible for an effective political leader to tell the truth all the time. Complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician."
对于一个英明的政治领导者来说，总是坦白是不可能的。彻底的诚实对于一个政治家来说是无用的美德。
（领导者问题）
题目分析：
１．关键词：
（１）effective：Producing a strong impression or response; striking:
深刻印象的，惊人的：产生一种深刻印象或反应的；显著的
（２）useful，这个词是个关键，什么是virtue for a politician,什么是useful virtue，需要一个清楚的定义．
２．Brainstorming:
(1)Free writing:
政治家的最终目的不是为了达到个人的名利和地位，而是为社会和公众服务．人们应该转变观念，政治家不是那个发表演说的演说者，不是那个制定法律的人，不是那个一呼百应的英雄，也不是那个发号施令的领导．政治家存在的目的是为选举他的人提供服务，为社会的发展服务．政治家告知真相，那是政治家的义务．也许许多时候，告知真相会引起公众的恐慌，经济的下滑，有的时候甚至引起政府的信任危机，但是真正effective的政治家，不是隐瞒这些真相来解决这些问题，而是说他们能够正确的处理告知真相所带来的负面影响．
（２）Looping：
        ＂政治家的最终目的是为社会和公众服务＂
没有人类社会的进步和发展，就没有政治家这个名称，政治家的存在是社会发展赋予的使命，政治家的任务是为社会和公众服务，因为首先政治家来源于社会中，他是有其他的公民选举出来的，离开了公众，政治家就失去了依托，因此，政治家首先服务于人民．其次，政治家是大家选举出来从事政治活动的，他们负责代表民众的意见，他们同时引导民众的意见，更有效的促进社会发展．因此，政治家也是为社会发展服务的．
        ＂许多时候，告知真相会引起公众的恐慌，经济的下滑，有的时候甚至引起政府的信任危机＂
重大的危机事件引起公众恐慌，造成不利影响．（其他的想不出来什么了．．．．．．）
        ＂他们能够正确的处理告知真相所带来的负面影响＂
effective的政治家，可以在危机面前迅速行动，依靠他们的有利的行动，来减轻公众的恐慌，而不是说依靠隐瞒真相来消除恐慌．政治家最需要的是应对所有的事情的能力，不是逃避真相的能力．
（３）Clustering-提纲：
观点：采取完全的反对：政治家的政治责任要求他们，必须对公众和社会负责，而隐瞒一些事实对于政治家来说并不是负责任的表现．
正文段１：政治家的最终目的是为社会和公众服务，所以，告知真相是政治家的责任和义务！
正文段２：虽然告知真相有时候能引起负面的影响，但大多数情况下，告知真相可以保证政治的透明，保证民众的支持．
正文段３：真正effective的政治家能够正确的处理告知真相所带来的负面影响．
结论：因此，想要成为一个真正的政治家，必须有足够的勇气面对现实，并且有能力解决问题．

正文：
TOPIC: ISSUE167 - "It is impossible for an effective political leader to tell the truth all the time. Complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician."
WORDS: 510          TIME: 0:46:22          DATE: 2006-8-2

Honesty is certainly an indispensable virtue for every common person, not to mention those politicians. Actually, the character of a successful political leader goes beyond only being honest. Selected by and serving for the public, effective leaders have to be responsible for both themselves and the society.

People used to recognize politicians as rulers or supervisors, who can monitor them and give out command. But in fact, a politician is not a legislator who makes laws that have to be obeyed without exception, not an elocutionist who makes exciting speeches without effective action, nor is he or she a hero who can save the world in danger, rather, a politician is the very person who has to serve the public and be responsible for social development. It is the politician's obligation and responsibility to tell the truth in any case. When a politician refuse to make other people know what they should know, it is impossible for the very one to be trusted, and a politician without the belief from the public is just like a boat without water around, a tall tree without leaves on. It is hardly for a politician to be effective without credit from the public.

Although telling the truth will sometimes be troublesome and make it more difficult for a politician to deal with, it is significant for keeping a healthy system of politics and government. Admittedly, an honest politician sometimes has to deal with the panic aroused from a terrorist attack, the depression evoked by a bankrupt company, and the distrust created by a political scandal, all of these negative effects have to be considered and dealt with. It seems then unwise for a politician to immerse into those troubles. But if a political leader hides all these truth behind and someday this duplicity is revealed by other people, then the political leader will never be trusted and people will begin to doubt the whole government and therefore result in a more serious problem. In most cases, being honest will make a more even-handed and effective political system and government.

To be a real effective politician, then seems quite difficult. On one hand, honesty is an essential requirement; on the other, the ability to deal with those negative effects becomes a priority. Fast reaction, decisive resolution and holistic consideration are all needed. For example, when a scandal in politics comes out, an effective politician announces it to the public rather than hides it, he announces every details of it rather than gives a piece of blurry information and he deals with it immediately and effectively rather than wait until the public becomes to complain about and criticize the government. Only in these ways can he better remove those negative effects of telling the truth. In short, an effective leader faces the truth rather than evade it.

In sum, it is essential to be honest and brave enough if one wants to be an effective politician. Also, an effective politician not only tells the truth, but also deals with it in time and in effect.

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Honesty is certainly an indispensable virtue for every common person, not to mention those politicians [不妨加个who从句来说明一下为什么politician更需要，who serve the people?...]. Actually, the character of a successful political leader goes beyond only being honest[only being可以去掉]. Selected by and serving for the public, effective leaders have to be responsible[直接点出honest吧。不然比你要写的TS概念要大了] for both themselves and the society.

People used to recognize politicians as rulers or supervisors, who can monitor them and give out command. [TS在第一句没有点出来，在下句点出来了，可以调换下顺序。]But in fact, a politician is not a legislator who makes laws that have to be obeyed without exception, not an elocutionist who makes exciting speeches without effective action, nor is he or she a hero who can save the world in danger, rather, [把nor换掉，和前面一样也用not，nor这样用，ms有问题。保留意见]a politician is the very person who has to serve the public and be responsible for social development. It is the politician's obligation and responsibility to tell the truth in any case. When a politician refuse to make other people know what they should know, it is impossible for the very one to be trusted[for the very one？不解~~], and a politician without the belief[support，belief是信仰吧~~] from the public is just like a boat without water around[around不是很确切，单从这句英文里感觉不出来水能载舟，亦能覆舟的感觉。不过我也提不出来更好的，我查查], a tall tree without leaves on[如果前面这句有比较好的英文，这句就可以不要了]. It is hardly for a politician to be effective without credit from the public.[最后一句总结语气上显的弱了，前面加个Therefore，之类的会好一点。]
[这段的TS和你写的内容不符。你写的是要在任何情况下都要透露情况，而对领导人的错误认识正是为了要证明透露情况才提出来的吧。如果我没有理解错误的话。我之前说的调换顺序可能不起作用。补充一句TS吧。]

Although telling the truth will sometimes be troublesome and make[making] it more difficult for a politician to deal with, it is significant for keeping a healthy system of politics and government[你如何定义healthy？透露所有的情况就是healthy?如果不是的话，我觉的需要说明一下，因为这个healthy出现的有点突然。]. Admittedly, an honest politician sometimes has to deal with the panic aroused from[by？正好和后面对应] a terrorist attack, the depression evoked by a bankrupt company, and the distrust created by a political scandal,[前面已经是完整的句子了，改分号] all of these negative effects have to be considered and dealt with. It seems then unwise for a politician to immerse [himself/herself] into those troubles. But if a political leader hides all these truth behind and someday this duplicity is revealed by other people, then the political leader will never be trusted and people will begin to doubt the whole government and therefore result in a more serious problem.[用了三个and~~~,而且这句话感觉上有点和B1相重复噢] In most cases, being honest will make[achieve？] a more even-handed and effective political system and government.

To be a real effective politician, then seems quite difficult[主语is missing]. On one hand, honesty is an essential requirement; on the other, the ability to deal with those negative effects becomes a priority. Fast reaction, decisive resolution and holistic consideration are all needed[Good]. For example, when a scandal in politics comes out, an effective politician announces it to the public rather than hides it, he announces every details of it rather than gives a piece of blurry information and he deals with it immediately and effectively rather than wait until the public becomes[begins] to complain about[about这个介词要么？不确定~~] and criticize the government. Only in these ways can he[/she] better remove those negative effects of telling the truth. In short, an effective leader [should] faces the truth rather than evade it.

In sum, it is essential to be honest and brave enough if one wants to be an effective politician. Also, an effective politician not only tells the truth, but also deals with it in time and in effect.

[挺好的了。语句很通顺。很多标出来的地方不少是因为我自己不明白的。赫赫。peter确定了告诉我一下。学习。。寒，不知道的东西太多了

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早就改好了。。破网上不来啊]

[ 本帖最后由 dicmi 于 2006-8-2 14:25 编辑 ]

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我的。
有空看看把：）issue17

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晕,这是我觉得自己写的不是很好的文章了,dicmi改的很好，指出的问题很对啊,可最后还骗我说写的好????
哈哈,我今天一会看看你的.