issue83 清凉夏日三组之四人帮8.12

rosy0928UID: 2191748

issue83 - "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
WORDS: 521          TIME: 0:44:48          DATE: 2006-8-6

Should the government to make great effort to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state? In my opinion, I agree with the speaker's view that we should preserve the remote areas for most of the cases.

A threshold reason why I hold the opinion is that it is an essential and necessary method to protect our environment. Protecting environment is a project which should be lasted from generation to generation. The remote areas are usually the most aboriginal areas which have valuable vegetation resource or other special physiognomy which is important for the local, the nation, even the world as a whole. Unconventionally developing them may makes the local people go into raptures at the mere mention of the profit these days, however, the serious impact on the future is unpredictable. For example, the tropical rain forest in Brazil is precious for us; however, many of them have been burnt to turn the land into farmland. If the government does not understand the ponderance of preserve the rain forest from now on, our offspring can only find the great forest in the history several years later.

In addition, even if those areas are too remote to be accessed by many people, it is also important to protect the wild animals from being disturbed of human being. We can easily infer that the few people who access into the remote areas must have the special purpose. It is the few poachers who damaged the living of some precious animals. The goa on the Tibet plateau is a representative example. Because of the intemperate poaching of the goas, the number of them have declined dramatically in the recently years and the host of the plateau is facing the danger of extinguishment for the unfriendly guests. Only if the government takes urgent measures to preserve the living lands of the precious animals, can we live peacefully with the thousands of animals in the world.

Admittedly, in some areas where the environment has been serious, we need to take other measures to realize the value of the land. For example, in the northwest of China, there is nothing but deserts. We can not leave it as deserts but to develop it and change it to the areas which are suitable for people to live in. We can exploit the abundant resource of oils under the deserts, we can also use the water of ice mountains to turn the deserts into oases. The most important method is to plant plenty of trees to better the environment. By the effort of human being, the remote and poor areas can show their value in another way. To some extent, this non-preservation will benefit the today's people and tomorrow's people as well.

In summary, from what have been discussed above, we can safely conclude that for the area which is worthy to be preserved, the government should devote a lot of energy and money to protect them, even if they are remote and accessible to only a few people. If the condition is too bad, we should adopt other methods to develop the advantages of the land.

linfan68UID: 2185216

Should the government to make great effort to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state? In my opinion, I agree with the speaker's view that we should preserve the remote areas for most of the cases.

A threshold[这个单词是每篇必用呀……而且都是这个位置] reason why I hold the opinion is that it[这里复述一下感觉好一些，不然这个it指代的太远了] is an essential and necessary method to protect our environment. Protecting environment is a project which should be lasted from generation to generation. The remote areas are usually the most aboriginal areas which have valuable vegetation resource or other special physiognomy[这个词怎么找到的……] which is important for the local, the nation, even the world as a whole. Unconventionally developing them may makes the local people go into raptures at the mere mention of the profit these days, however, the serious impact on the future is unpredictable. For example, the tropical rain forest in Brazil is precious for us; however, many of them have been burnt to turn the land into farmland. If the government does not understand the ponderance of preserve the rain forest from now on, our offspring can only find the great forest in the history several years later.

In addition, even if those areas are too remote to be accessed by many people, it is also important to protect the wild animals from being disturbed of human being. We can easily infer that the few people who access into the remote areas must have the special purpose[这里不太合适了，题目上说这个事情是为了说明那个地方是如此的不重要以至于几乎没有人去，提这个问题有点偏离中心了]. It is the few poachers who damaged the living of some precious animals. The goa on the Tibet plateau is a representative example. Because of the intemperate poaching of the goas, the number of them have declined dramatically in the recently years and the host of the plateau is facing the danger of extinguishment for the unfriendly guests. Only if the government takes urgent measures to preserve the living lands of the precious animals, can we live peacefully with the thousands of animals in the world. [不过例子还是不错的，前后改改就行了]

Admittedly, in some areas where the environment has been serious, we need to take other measures to realize the value of the land. [这里开头说的不太清楚，你的意思是说如果像沙漠这样的地方，开发比保护重要，但是直到段落的最后我才看出来。如果评卷人没我的耐心怎么办？一定要说清楚] For example, in the northwest of China, there is nothing but deserts. We can not leave it as deserts but to develop it and change it to the areas which are suitable for people to live in. We can exploit the abundant resource of oils under the deserts, we can also use the water of ice mountains to turn the deserts into oases. The most important method is to plant plenty of trees to better the environment. By the effort of human being, the remote and poor areas can show their value in another way. To some extent, this non-preservation will benefit the today's people and tomorrow's people as well. [直接把这句提前就行了]

In summary, from what have been discussed above, we can safely conclude that for the area which is worthy to be preserved, the government should devote a lot of energy and money to protect them, even if they are remote and accessible to only a few people. If the condition is too bad, we should adopt other methods to develop the advantages of the land.
[没有什么大问题了，不过中间的那段关于偷猎的论述有点偏，最后一段也看得有点心惊肉跳的，还好在最后我看懂了……不过还是要把观点在开始明确的摆出来才是]