argument51 076G myth 小组第二次作业

杏林有情天UID: 2247728

51The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
1.How long is “long”?
2.Preliminary results should be checked over and over again,then could be convincing .
3.Just samples of two groups of patients maybe are unrepresented ?random selection ?high radio?
4.The doctor who specializes in sports medicine should be more expert and specialist to deal with muscle strain .
5.40% of typically expected time possible as long as the patients average recuperation time in another group .
6.How the doctors treat the patients should on the basis of considering case-by –case condition  .
7.The arguer fails to prove that prevent healing quickly is related to the secondaty infections .
TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

WORDS: 392          TIME: 上午 12:29:32          DATE: 2006-10-20

The arguer cites doctors' suspect that secondary infections make a harmful effect on patients' healing after severe muscle strain, and preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients surferring from muscle strain, to prove that antibiotics treatment is an efficient way to heal from muscle strain.Although, as I observe,the fact that doctor's suspect and preliminary results of two groups of patients' researches lend no strong support to the conclusion that doctors should carry out antibiotics treatment to treat their patients bearing the pain from muscle strain.

We should consider the doctors' long suspect,clear how long is "long". Maybe we could count the time science doctors begin to concern this problem of healing after severe muscle strain recently. Lacking of experience and research , to ensure secondary infections is only one possibility to prevent patients suffering from muscle strain from healing.

And as we all know, the truth becoming convincing should through checking over and over again. So relaying on the preliminary results of comparied researches is doubtful to prove that antibioties treatment is efficient to treat patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain.

Moreover, Dr.Newland who specializes in sports medicine should be more expert and specialist than Dr.Alton who is a general physician to deal with the problem of muscle strain. Dr.Newland according to every patient's condition to establish treatment , choose that some patients take antibiotics and others need not. So if the average recuperation time really shorted,the distinction should be attributed to Dr.Newland's profession.Even though the World Health Organization claimed :"People do not stop misusing antibiotics,new "superbugs" that resist all drugs could take the world back to the time when minor infections killed."

Also we could doubt that which one is longer-40% typically expected time in group of average recuperation time in another group. Perhaps they are as long as same,resulting in throwing over the evidence of efficiency of antibiotics treatment in healing from muscle strain.

Furthermore, the arguer fails to consider other possiblities to heal the patients suffering from muscle strain. For example,advise them take appropriable exercise, so as to reveal the power of their muscle; and try other useful medicine advised by muscle strain experts.

In sum, the arguer show no convincing envindence to prove that only by antibiotics treatment could heal quickly the patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain. So as doctors, they should treat every patient on the basis of their own conditions, then carry out reasonable treatments,not only relay on antibiotics.

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The arguer cites doctors' suspect that secondary infections make a harmful effect on patients' healing after severe muscle strain, and preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients suffering from muscle strain, to prove that antibiotics treatment is an efficient way to heal from muscle strain. Although, as I observe, the fact that doctor's suspect and preliminary results of two groups of patients' researches lend no strong support to the conclusion that doctors should carry out antibiotics treatment to treat their patients bearing the pain from muscle strain.

We should consider the doctors' long suspect, clear how long is "long"[clear用在这里似乎不合适，用making clear或者knowing或许更好]. Maybe we could count the time science doctors[什么是science doctors? count the time好像也不对，至少应该是个能count的东西吧，比如次数什么的] begin to concern this problem of healing after severe muscle strain recently. Lacking of experience and research, to ensure secondary infections is [the]only one possibility to prevent patients suffering from muscle strain from healing.[可以把句式改为: the only one possibility that(…) is to ensure secondary strain.]我觉得这个long time问题不是很大，或者说根本就不是一个攻击点，我认为原文这里只是陈述一个事实，起铺垫作用。这句话并没有和后文构成推理。

And as we all know, the truth becoming convincing[这里很别扭] should through checking[be checked] over and over again. So relaying[relying!这个错误至少出现3次了] on the preliminary results of compared researches is doubtful to prove that antibiotics treatment is efficient to treat patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain.
同样的，这个preliminary也不是什么大问题。就如同我们在日常生活中常说的，这个事件初步说明了什么问题。这里用初步来作为限定词其实是一个比较严谨的说法。真正应该作为攻击点的，应该是实验本身。

Moreover, Dr.Newland who specializes in sports medicine should be more expert and specialist than Dr.Alton who is a general physician to deal with the problem of muscle strain. Dr.Newland according to every patient's condition to establish treatment[这句有些别扭], choose that some patients take antibiotics and others need not. So if the average recuperation time really shorted, the distinction should be attributed to Dr.Newland's profession. Even though the World Health Organization claimed :"People do not stop misusing antibiotics, new "superbugs" that resist all drugs could take the world back to the time when minor infections killed."


Also we could doubt that which one is longer-40% typically expected time in group of average recuperation time in another group. Perhaps they are as long as same, resulting in throwing over the evidence of efficiency of antibiotics treatment in healing from muscle strain.
这段不太明白在说什么，语言组织得比较生硬。而且，为什么要怀疑40%这个结论。文中说a组比通常快40%，b组没什么明显缩短，这个结论应该很明确，时间确实缩短了。

Furthermore, the arguer fails to consider other possibilities to heal the patients suffering from muscle strain. For example, advise them take appropriable exercise, so as to reveal the power of their muscle; and try other useful medicine advised by muscle strain experts.
这段可以再写深入一些。作者所提的关于用抗生素的提议是不合理的，因为还有一些其它的手段来作为治疗手段。但是应该把重点放在提议的不合理上，而不是其它的治疗手段上，这些只是作为支撑论点的论据。

In sum, the arguer shows no convincing evidence to prove that only by antibiotics treatment could heal quickly the patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain. So as doctors, they should treat every patient on the basis of their own conditions, then carry out reasonable treatments, not only relay on antibiotics.

主要的问题：
1．        还需要多练习练习寻找攻击点，比如前两个攻击点我觉得实在没有必要来攻击。
2．        语言还需要多加强。有些句子读起来比较生硬，难以明白是什么意思，感觉像是从中文直译过来，而且语序有问题。