issue51 polymerwufan{长征队}第二次作业

polymerwufanUID: 2219535

According to the speaker, it is more effective to develop a specificeducation system which can meet the individual needs and interests ofeach student. I concede the assertion when it comes to the fact thatthis type of education might inspire the student's interests andenthusiasm in learning. However, the speaker overestimates thesignificance of the variety in education and overlooks some negativeaffects which might be involved in it.

Admittedly, specific education system might inspire the student'sinterests and enthusiasm in learning. After all, the ultimate objectiveof education is not to inculcate as much as knowledge but to helpstudent develop a systematical method of critical thinking. And  commonexperience finds that students will think deeply and thoroughly, andshow an excellent performance in subjects in which they are interested,while as to subjects they dislike, perhaps they merely remember someknowledges or facts in order to pass the examination. Therefore,fewwould argue that enforcing students to learn some subjects they are notinterested in cannot go a long way for developing their criticalthinking. An apt illustration involves Einstein's learning experience.Despite the fact that he had poor performance in other subjects,Einstein finally became the greatest physical scientist in 20th century.

However, it is impossible to take into account every student's needs inteaching endeavor for reason that education is a systematical projectwhich requires regulations rather than randomness.Consider a studentwho is very interested in chemistry but dislikes mathematics.Perhaps heor she only acquires some ostensible information in chemistry but hasnot the ability to comprehend the complex mechanism in chemicalreaction because of his or her poor mathematics basis. After all, someelementary subjects are essential to the comprehension of profound andcomplicated ones.Hence, merely relegating the choice of subjects forlearning to students is not a reasonable suggestion, especially inprimary education stage when students have not been academically matureenough to take sound choices.

Furthermore, another reason why I disagree the speaker has to do withthe evaluating criteria in education. In spite of some oppositeopinions towards it, examination is the effective and practical meansto assess students’ academic level as well as teachers’ teachingcapability. Thus, we can easily find the limitation in the speaker. Ifeach student determines his or her curriculum only depending oninterests, it is not possible and practical for educationalinstitutions to take comprehensive and justifiable examinations orother evaluating means, let alone to evaluate the effects of theeducation. After all, the limited educational resources call forreasonable and justifiable allocation, if not, education might spellchaos and lead to an ineffective consequence.

To sum up, the speaker’s claim is correct to some extent with therespect to the inspiration of students’ learning interests andenthusiasm. Perhaps, the educational variety might be a soundcomplements to normal education system. Nevertheless, the nature ofeducation might prevent from realizing this type of education whichmerely depends on individual’s interests.

lilyquUID: 2214568

According to the speaker, it is more effective to develop a specific education system which can meet the individual needs and interests of each student. I concede the assertion when it comes to the fact that this type of education might inspire the student's interests and enthusiasm in learning. However, the speaker overestimates the significance of the variety in education and overlooks some negative affects [influence, affect的名词意思是情感] which might be involved in it.

Admittedly, specific education system might inspire the student's interests and enthusiasm in learning [与上段完全重复，换一种说法]. After all, the ultimate objective of education is not to inculcate as much as [换成more，as much as 是差不多的意思] knowledge but to help student develop a systematical method of critical thinking. And [不恰当，删去] common experience finds that students will think deeply and thoroughly, and show an excellent performance in subjects [for some subjects] in which they are interested, while as to subjects they dislike, perhaps they merely remember some knowledges [knowledge不可数] or facts [in fact] in order to pass the examination. Therefore, few would argue that enforcing students to learn [加上knowledge from] some subjects they are not interested in cannot go a long way [用is useless 是不是更合适] for developing their critical thinking. An apt illustration involves Einstein's learning experience. Despite the fact that he had poor performance in other subjects, Einstein finally became the greatest physical scientist in 20th century.

However, it is impossible to take into account every student's needs in teaching endeavor for reason that education is a systematical project which requires regulations rather than randomness. Consider [considering, 我不确定是否正确] a student who is very interested in chemistry but dislikes mathematics. Perhaps he or she only acquires some ostensible [superficial] information in chemistry but has not the ability to comprehend the complex mechanism in chemical reaction because of his or her poor mathematics basis. After all, some elementary subjects are essential to the comprehension of profound and complicated ones. Hence, merely relegating the choice of subjects for learning to students [freely choosing learning subjects to student] is not a reasonable suggestion, especially in primary education stage when students have not been academically mature enough [are not mature enough academically] to take sound choices.

Furthermore, another reason why I disagree [with] the speaker has to [is that we] do with the evaluating criteria in education. In spite of some opposite opinions towards it, examination is the effective and practical means to assess students’ academic level as well as teachers’ teaching capability. Thus, we can easily find the limitation in the speaker. If each student determines his or her curriculum only depending on interests, it is not possible and practical for educational institutions to take comprehensive and justifiable examinations or other evaluating means, let alone to evaluate the effects of the education. After all, the limited educational resources call for reasonable and justifiable allocation, if not, education might spell chaos and lead to an ineffective consequence.

To sum up, the speaker’s claim is correct to some extent with the respect to [with respect to表示关于] the inspiration of students’ learning interests and enthusiasm. Perhaps, the educational variety might a sound complements to normal education system. Nevertheless, the nature of education might prevent from realizing this type of education which merely depends on individual’s interests.

文中很多单词是连在一起的，看起来很费劲哦，
整体感觉写的不错


[ 本帖最后由 lilyqu 于 2006-12-6 11:15 编辑 ]

smailingfishUID: 2246243

占个座先
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wang_uniqueUID: 2271982

Argument 145(People who snore should eat less and exercise more than average people)
      
          This argument recommends that people who snore should eat less and exercise more than average people.To justify this recommendation,the speaker cites a new survey of people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who don’t snore.The speaker also point out that sleep apnea leaves people too tired to exercise owing to snoring .I find this argument logically unconvincing in the following aspects.
           To begin with,the speaker commits a fallacy of overgeneralization in assuming that peolp who snore should eat less and exercise more .As the evidence that speaker provides people who sanore are more likely gains weight than people who don’t snore is unwarranted ,It is entirely possible that some of them who snore can’t gain weight or less likely gain weight than people who don’t snore.For that matter,perhaps it is easy for them to lose weight..In a word ,without considering other possibilities for the snoring people ,the assumption is unconvicing as it stands.
          Secondly,even if the survey that indicates people who snore is more likely to gain weight than people who snore is persuasive .yet the evidence is too vague to indicate that people who snore should eat less and exercise more..Perhaps the snoring people can inhibit weight through treatment of eradicating snoring, or change the postures in bed.Failing to take into account the other possibilities that control the weight ,the speaker can’t convince us .
           Thirdly, the speaker commits a fallacy of begging the question in assuming that people who snore should eat less and exercise more than people who don’t snore.The speaker’assumption depends on the well-known fact that sleep apean can contribute to weaking briefly and further makes people too tired during the day to exercise.Lacking the evidence to support that unnotinced waking in
the night causes tiredness in the day,perhaps it is so brief that people can’t feel tired , Thus,the speaker can’t conclude that snoring pople should eat less and exercise more.On the other hand during the assumption ,the speaker reverses the causality between gaining weight and tireness- that is on the tireness leads to the gaining weight rather than the latter is attribute to the former..It mkes us vague to the logic of argument.
     In sum ,the argument is unconvincing as it stands .To strengthen it the spesker must show that the proportion of people who snore can gain weight .To better assess the argument I would need more information illustrating the relation between exercise diet as well as weight..Also I need the speaker pay attention to the causality .
ISSUE< 222=3>It is more important to allocate money for immediate.existing social problem than to spend it on long –term research that might help tuture generations.
  There is much debate over which is more important to allocate money between socail problem and long-term research .Some people maitain that it is necessary to allocate money for immediate problems in sense that they are directly related to us while others argue that long-term research should be placed enough emphasises on for the reason is that they can produce a lasting significance on the future.However,in my opinion, the distributiion of funds should changes r as the environment does.
  Undoubtedly, sometimes. it is sensible to deal with the immediate existing problems such as unemployment,drug abuse,AIDS and so forth .On the one sense these problems are neart to our lives and have a great effect on us.Anyone that ingores such problems would pay a coast. For example, during the 1970s in the UK the economy developed with high in flation and low growth,.Big private companies started to go bankrupt.Consequently, unemployment went up quickly from 1 million to 3.5million .Nevertheless prime minister Margaret took into account the high rate of unemployment without adding the welfare further carried on a new tax-“Poll Tax” which lead to Mrs Thatcher ‘downfall.To keep the high popularity the Conservative abandoned the new tax and elected a new leader –John Major .Thereby ,the immediate existing social problem should place at the first position .
  On the other sense ,the solution for immediate existing social problem seriously limits the horizon of government at all levels of development and causes unbalanced ,bad –rounded economy.Today it is easy for us to notice some countries at the first phase distributes a large amount of funds to promote the economy at the expense of environment as a result they paid a great coast. There is no denying that human beings weigh the long-term research if anything we would benefit from it.
  Moreoverlong-term research can influence on the futuregenration in many ways .It is known to us that no field can have a more lasting effect on the young generation than education ,In retropect America emphasizes the relation between education and citizenship as a means of transmiting democratic values ,creating equality of opportunity and preparing new generationof citizen to function in society.When the Soviet Union launched the first orbiting satellite ,American government concerned with the education by offering a grant to on science and mathematics so that until today America can’t fall behind the other counties as well as American students are in a more favourable position in the scientific and technological capabilities .Therefore, it is important to allocate money to the long-ternm research.
   Admittedly,under some circumstances concerns with long-ternm researches can contribute to losing present dominance in that noboddy can predict what happed in the future.I t is an unknown number.As for some researches that are out of date,we shoud’t invest money on it.
   In sum ,as far as I am concerned immediate problems and long-ternm researches are on the same level ,if properly handled they can reconcile with each other.

smailingfishUID: 2246243

According to the speaker, it is more effective to develop a specific education system which can meet the individual needs and interests of each student. I concede the assertion when it comes to the fact that this type of education might(下面的论点是肯定这一点的，所以我觉得最好用一个语气更加肯定一点的词更好一点，比如could?) inspire the student's interests and enthusiasm in learning. However, the speaker overestimates the significance of the variety in education and overlooks some negative affects which might be involved in it.

Admittedly, specific education system might inspire the student's interests and enthusiasm in learning. After all, the ultimate objective of education is not to inculcate as much as knowledge but to help student（students） develop a systematical method of critical thinking. And commonexperience finds that students will think deeply and thoroughly, and show an excellent performance in subjects in which they are interested, while as to subjects they dislike, perhaps they merely remember some knowledge or facts in order to pass the examination. Therefore, few would argue that enforcing(是不是用asking 或forcing?) students to learn some subjects they are not interested in cannot(按意思是不是用can?) go a long way for developing their critical thinking. An apt illustration involves Einstein's learning experience. Despite the fact that he had poor performance in other subjects, Einstein finally became the greatest physical scientist in 20th century.(是不是把例子说的再具体一点？不过我印象中，爱因斯坦不仅是物理天才也是数学天才，他好像初中时就独立证明了勾股定理，而且他小提琴也不错并且开过音乐会。Poor performance? 是不是两个小板凳的例子？不知道它的可信度)

However, it is impossible to take into account every student's needs in teaching endeavor for reason that education is a systematical project which requires regulations rather than randomness. Consider a student who is very interested in chemistry but dislikes mathematics. Perhaps he or she only acquires some ostensible information in chemistry but has (dose) not have the ability to comprehend the complex mechanism in chemical reaction because of his or her poor mathematics basis(skills怎么样？). After all, some elementary subjects are essential to the comprehension of profound and complicated ones. Hence, merely relegating the choice of subjects for learning to students is not a reasonable suggestion(这一句看不太明白), especially in primary education stage when students have not been academically mature(这个词用得有些夸张吧？reasonable怎么样？) enough to take sound(这个词用得不错) choices.

Furthermore, another reason why I disagree the speaker has (something)to do with the evaluating criteria in education. In spite of some opposite opinions towards it, examination is the (a) effective and practical means to assess students’ academic level as well as teachers’ teaching capability. Thus, we can easily find the limitation in the speaker. I feach(?) student determines his or her curriculum only depending on interests, it is not possible and(or) practical for educational institutions to take comprehensive and justifiable examinations or other evaluating means, let alone to evaluate the effects of the education. After all, the limited educational resources call for reasonable and justifiable allocation, if not, education might spell chaos and lead to an ineffective consequence.(这句很好噢)

To sum up, the speaker’s claim is correct to some extent with the respect to the inspiration of students’ learning interests and enthusiasm. Perhaps, the educational variety might be a sound complements to normal education system. Nevertheless, the nature of education might prevent from realizing this type of education which merely depends on individual’s interests.

polymerwufanUID: 2219535

感谢楼上的战友的意见，不过，我怎么一贴上去就有连在一起的词呢？

lilyquUID: 2214568

发现有连在一起的，在把帖子编辑一下