Issue50 【CSMY作文互改小组】第一次作业

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TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
WORDS: 400          TIME: 0:58:46          DATE: 2007-01-04
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观点：有保留的反对

1 首先，承认在某些应用学科这样做能提高教员的指导作用。
2 即使在应用学科领域，过分强调学术外的工作反而会影响教学。
3 在理论学科领域，参加学术世界外的工作不现实。
4 为了提高教学质量，还有许多其他的方式。

Article:
To improve the quality of instruction, is it a must for all college faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses? Although it may make sense in some field of academic world, I would say it is not true in most of conditions.

At the beginning, it should be admitted that in some discipline it does make sense for faculty to do so, especially concerning of applied ones. As an old saying goes:" Practice makes better." For majors such as economics, computer programming, architecture, the words is true. It can be imaged that if an architectural professor had a part-time-job on designing buildings outside the academic world contrasting to the same level one who is not, it is better for him or her to more skilledly guide students who studied on this course. Thus, in this sense, it is good for faculty to do so.

However, the over-spending time working outside the academic world could diminish the quality of instruction. There is an illustration from my experience: genome engineering course was taught by a famous professor of the department, but always, with a rare appearance of the professor, the class was given by his postgraduate students. For the absence reason, we were told that the professor was busy with other work in a laboratory of a local medicine corporation. Without the professor's effective guide, lots of classmates felt the instructional quality of this course was rather low. Therefore, overemphasis the requirement of spend time working outside can lower the quality of instruction.  

Moreover, many theoretical fields in college and university are difficult to get into use directly. For instance, the theoretical mathematics, scientific philosophy and so on are hard to get relevant outside world. It is not realistic for the faculty in such disciplines to get a part-time-job to help improving the quality of instruction.

Furthermore, in order to improve the quality of instruction, the time of faculty can be spent on other matters. For application majors, faculty could guide the students on relevant part-time-jobs, through this way the quality of instruction can be improved. For theoretical scientific majors, the better way is to spend more time inside the academic world of the course.     

In a few words, the approach spending time working outside the academic world for all faculty can hardly conducted, and therefore  with little value to improve the quality of instruction in college and university.     

staroceanUID: 2271193

To improve the quality of instruction, is it a must for all college faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses? Although it may make sense in some field of academic world, I would say it is not true (the case)in most of conditions.

At the beginning, it should be admitted that in some discipline it does make sense for faculty to do so, especially concerning of(去掉) applied ones. As an old saying goes:" Practice makes better." For majors such as economics, computer programming, architecture, the words is true. It can be imaged that if an architectural professor had a part-time-job on designing buildings outside the academic world contrasting to the same level one who is not, it is better for him or her to more skilledly（skillfully） guide students who studied on this course(啰嗦，去掉). Thus, in this sense, it is good for faculty to do so.

However, the over-spending time working outside the academic world could diminish the quality of instruction. There is an illustration from my experience: （my）genome engineering course was taught by a famous professor of the department, but always, with a rare appearance of the professor, the class was given by his postgraduate students. For the absence reason, we were told that the professor was busy with other work in a laboratory of a local medicine corporation. Without the professor's effective guide, lots of classmates felt the instructional quality of this course was rather low. Therefore, overemphasis the requirement of spend time working outside can lower the quality of instruction.  (例子不好，例子只能说明教授的失职，如果非要这么说，至少要加上，正是因为过分投入工作，导致了对于教学工作的疏忽，因此学生可能成了受害者。而且，如果要说工作可能影响教学，一定要用多个例子或者数据，或者理论来说明，这样一个personal experience不能代表general)

Moreover, many theoretical fields in college and university are difficult to get into use directly. For instance, the theoretical mathematics, scientific philosophy and so on are hard to get relevant outside world. It is not realistic for the faculty in such disciplines to get a part-time-job to help improving the quality of instruction. （角度不好，如果连教授都找不到工作，那学生学完干什么啊，一般来说想找工作还是找的找的。应该从一些理论课程没有必要参与工作这个角度来说。然后可以说，比如数学，没有必要非得在什么工作单位里算来算去。）

Furthermore, in order to improve the quality of instruction, the time of faculty can（should） be spent on other matters. For application majors, faculty could guide the students on relevant part-time-jobs,（为了申请专业，教师应该指导学生相关工作，没看懂这句话是要说什么） through this way the quality of instruction can be improved. For theoretical scientific majors, the better way is to spend more time inside the academic world of the course.     

In a few words, the approach spending time working outside the academic world for all faculty can hardly conducted, and therefore  with little value to improve the quality of instruction in college and university.

整体结构没有大的问题，每段的展开不够。

[ 本帖最后由 starocean 于 2007-1-11 23:29 编辑 ]

candyganUID: 201665

谢谢夜的建议！我会多多注重段落的展开论证的 。

[ 本帖最后由 candygan 于 2007-1-20 17:05 编辑 ]