Argument51 [认真作文互改小组f_ding 作业]求拍

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Argument51

In this argument, the arguer concludes that patients, diagnosed with muscle strain, would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. To support the argument, the arguer points out a hypothesis that doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. In addition, to substantiate that hypothesis, the arguer cites the results of a study of two groups of patients. At first glance, the argument seems convincing, however, careful examination reveals there are several flaws in it.

To begin with, the major problem with this argument is that there are several fallacies between the hypothesis and the conclusion. In the hypothesis, one point is that some patients may be kept from healing by secondary infections after severe muscle strain, while, in the conclusion, the arguer advocates that all patients with muscle strain should take antibiotic as part of their treatment. Obviously, the arguer neglects that the exact relationship between "some and all" and "severe muscle strain and muscle strain", hence, the conclusion drawn by the arguer is not actually based on the hypothesis.

In addition, the study, the arguer used to prove the hypothesis, is challengeable. To substantiate the hypothesis, the arguer cites the results of a study of two groups of patients. However, it should be noted that two doctors in these two groups do not share the same background, one specializing in sports medicine, while, the other being a general physician. Therefore, it is doubted that the results of the study can be fair, since two doctors from different specializations would carry out different treatment and give different suggestions to the patients in each group. In this situation, the recuperation time is not convincing and thus, the results cannot persuasively support the hypothesis.

Finally, we are not told in this argument the number of patients samples in each group. As is well-known to us that when samples are used to make a general claim, the samples should be numerous enough to be representative. However, in this argument, we are told nothing about the way the study was conducted and if samples are large enough to represent the general situation. Besides, the arguer gives no information on how severe the patients in each group suffer from muscle strain. Different conditions of samples in a study will undoubtedly undermine the validity of that study. As a consequence, the results of the study beg our questions.

In sum, the argument is not convincing and the decision should be reconsidered. To strengthen the argument, the causal relationship between the hypothesis and the conclusion should be established. To better evaluate the argument, the arguer should make valid to us the results of the study.

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In this argument, the arguer concludes that patients, diagnosed with muscle strain, would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. To support the argument, the arguer points out a hypothesis that doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. In addition, to substantiate that hypothesis, the arguer cites the results of a study of two groups of patients. At first glance, the argument seems convincing, however, careful examination reveals there are several flaws in it.

To begin with, the major problem with this argument is that there are several fallacies between the hypothesis and the conclusion. In the hypothesis, one point is that some patients may be kept from healing by secondary infections after severe muscle strain, while, in the conclusion, the arguer advocates that all patients with muscle strain should take antibiotic as part of their treatment. Obviously, the arguer neglects that the exact relationship between "some and all" and "severe muscle strain and muscle strain", hence, the conclusion drawn by the arguer is not actually based on the hypothesis.

In addition, the study, the arguer used to prove the hypothesis, is challengeable. To substantiate the hypothesis, the arguer cites the results of a study of two groups of patients. However, it should be noted that two doctors in these two groups do not share the same background, one specializing in sports medicine, while, the other being a general physician specializations would carry out different treatment and give different suggestions to the patients in each group. In this situation, the recuperation time is not convincing . Therefore, it is doubted that the results of the study can be fair, since two doctors from differentand thus, the results cannot persuasively support the hypothesis.

Finally, we are not told in this argument the number of patients samples in each group. As is well-known to us that when samples are used to make a general claim, the samples should be numerous enough to be representative. However, in this argument, we are told nothing about the way the study was conducted and if samples are large enough to represent the general situation. Besides, the arguer gives no information on how severe the patients in each group suffer from muscle strain. Different conditions of samples in a study will undoubtedly undermine the validity of that study. As a consequence, the results of the study beg our questions.

In sum, the argument is not convincing and the decision should be reconsidered. To strengthen the argument, the causal relationship between the hypothesis and the conclusion should be established. To better evaluate the argument, the arguer should make valid to us the results of the study

F_DING的语言很流畅, 但是好象对ARGUMENT重视不 够哦, 没有ISSUE写的好哈. 呵呵. 问题主要有两个:1. 逻辑的顺序不是很明确,其实你通篇都是在攻击RESULT上的错误，但直到最后才点出来.  2. ALTERNATIVE举的不够具体, 比如"exact relationship between "some and all" and "severe muscle strain and muscle strain", 完全可以具体话为对SOME有益,但对某些人可能有副作用,有些人对这个过敏 之类的. 我的一点意见哈,不对的地方要告诉我哦.
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thank you, wang

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To begin with, the major problem with this argument is that there are several fallacies（contradictions may be better） between the hypothesis and the conclusion.

语言没得说，我的目标。

para2 hypothesis和conclusion 的矛盾
para3 study的问题，不能support hypothesis
para4 继续攻击study

argument中的hypothesis是个问题，不过我认为对hypothesis照顾多了

加油！