Issue99 【Persistence 小组】第一次作业 处女作

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Don Quixote, the hero of a satirical chivalric romance by Miguel de Cervantes，firmly represents the idealism underlying almost every human being nature, which accounts for attempting things above what reason advises. Undeniably, we have an idealistic component and another realistic one, of which we cannot get rid. The speaker, however, emphasizes that the pragmatic approach is the only way to succeed and to guarantee survival. On balance, I would argue that while being practical is crucial in this real world full of competition, yet keeping a vision of the ideal will preclude us from straying down a road without any aim and much meaning.

It is true that practical thinking and behaving is essential so as to allow individuals to realize the regulations and hardships of the reality as well as to take advantage of the existing conditions. For instance, the people, who choose their careers merely based on their interests entirely regardless of the economic and other pragmatic concerns, are more likely to be reduced to poverty than those who take the financial compensation and job availability into account. It is because of the practical courses of action that we are inclined to adapt ourselves to the surroundings and thus become more competent and more successful in this era of rapid social and technological change.

However, ideals can endow us with aspiration and enthusiasm, which encourages us to stretch our wings and soar to dizzying new heights. When it comes to academics, researchers who are truly fascinated with the engaged field are more prone to acquire a meaningful and enjoyable career in which they stand to succeed and therefore have great economic benefit. Without ideals, people doing research just for a living would lack the motivation to think or work vigorously and perform in a mechanical manner. Accordingly, ideals can be referred to as the direction in pursuit of success.

Furthermore, a good balance can be achieved between pragmatism and idealism, the contrast of which does not necessarily follow that one who have ideals cannot weigh practical concerns. If Nelson Mandela had concerned themselves with short-term survival and immediate needs rather than with their conceptions of an ideal society, the Africa would still be British colonies. On the one hand we stem from reality territory, on the other hand we wish to watch the Utopian.

In short, the speaker’s threshold claim neglect that the idealism is of vast significance in the long-term success. Although simple and immediate options substituting for ideals are necessary for temporary survival, they will not give rise to the extraordinary and effective accomplishments.


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• Don Quixote, the hero of a satirical chivalric romance by Miguel de Cervantes，firmly represents the idealism underlying almost every human being nature, which accounts for attempting things above what reason advises. Undeniably, we have an idealistic component and another realistic one, of which we cannot get rid. The speaker, however, emphasizes that the pragmatic approach is the only way to succeed and to guarantee survival. On balance, I would argue that while being practical is crucial in this real world full of competition, yet keeping a vision of the ideal will preclude us from straying down a road without any aim and much meaning.(这段写的很好，开头引用堂.吉科德很引人入胜，就是中间的we have an idealistic component and another realistic one, of which we cannot get rid. 这句话有一点看不懂)
• It is true that practical thinking and behaving（behavior） is essential so as to allow（so as to allow 可否改成for） individuals to realize the regulations and hardships of the reality as well as to take advantage of the existing conditions(resources conditions多数情况指状态). For instance, the people（去掉the）, who choose their careers merely based on their interests entirely regardless of the economic and other pragmatic concerns, are more likely to be reduced to poverty than those who take the financial compensation and job availability into account. It is because of the practical courses of action that we are inclined to adapt ourselves to the surroundings and thus become more competent and more successful in this era of rapid social and technological change.（最后一句较长，可否去掉最开始的It is 而用逗号隔开）
• However, ideals can endow us with aspiration and enthusiasm, which encourages us to stretch our wings and soars to dizzying new heights.（PP的句子） When it comes to academics, researchers who are truly fascinated with the engaged field are more prone to acquire a meaningful and enjoyable career in which they stand to succeed and therefore have great economic benefit. Without ideals, people doing research just for a living would lack the motivation to think or work vigorously and perform in a mechanical manner. Accordingly, ideals can be referred to as the direction in pursuit of success.（整个段落都很顺，加入在political and business field 可以凑更多的字数）
• Furthermore, a good balance（歧义，意义不明确）can be achieved between pragmatism and idealism, the contrast of which does not necessarily follow that one who have ideals cannot weigh practical concerns. If Nelson Mandela had concerned themselves with short-term survival and immediate needs rather than with their conceptions of an ideal society, the Africa would still be British colonies. On the one hand we stem from reality territory; on the other hand we wish to watch the Utopian.
• In short, the speaker’s threshold claim neglects that the idealism is of vast significance in the long-term success. Although simple and immediate options substituting for ideals are necessary for temporary survival, they will not give rise to the extraordinary and effective accomplishments.
  
  全文总体很不错， 就是有一些标点和主谓一直的地方。 有些句子意思不是特别明确， 加油

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