Issue11【Persistence互动小组】第三次作业

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The speaker asserts that all nations should support to build a  global university designed to engage students in solving the world's most persistent social problems. I partly agree with it.  Though  a global university may be effective in in solving the persistent social problems around the world , the nations parpicipating should warn some potential risks.
A global university can educates young the way treat the social problems through humanity and philanthropy. No doubt that university is the place most elites come out from , and university is also a pronoun of a effective  method to educate excellent young with loft willing in the knowledge and skills which will serve the society better.The global university graduaters may have better capabilities than the ones fron common schools . They can help in troublesome problems like AIDS, the impoverishment in South African, and so forth. In this sense, the global university can be in a higher level which is superior to the common university in finance , resource, professors , labs and environment . In that kind of university , the students will gain more knowledge about the society and the world . The students who have a profound understand about the society would be more excellent in solving the social problems especially persistent ones than the ones whose understand to the world just stays at the textbooks which may become useless  when practiced in the society.
However, that kind of global university supported by all the nations has its flaws yet. As we know, whether  a university can runs normally depends on the money which most comes from the government and some sponsers. The global university possibaly needs the greater money from all the nations . If so , there will be no equations in the decision making process that the affluent nations who give much more money can hold a strong will ; on the contrary , the other nations may keep silence . The rich nations will allocate the global graduates to solve their own social persistent problems but ignore the poor countries persistent ones which are pressed for the solutions without which a disaster may bursts out and finally sands the world in chaos.
In my view , a global university is totally a helpful subject in social development ,  The students graduated from it can parpicipate in solving social problems in many forms , contribute to the whole world for human progress in the same destination. But all the nations should find a new way to keep the equation in using  its graduater without discrimantaion. If so , the persistent social problems will be solved in the same pace afer which we may live better lifes ,no wars, no pollutions, no race and color discrimination, no diseas, no corruption , which we can called aother Gloden Ages has come.

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e speaker asserts that all nations should support to build a global university designed to engage students in solving the world's most persistent social problems. I partly agree with it.  Though  a global university may be effective in solving the persistent social problems around the world , the nations parpicipating（participating） should(may) warn(bring warn和risk可以搭配吗) some potential risks.

     A global university can educates young the way (to) treat the social problems through humanity and philanthropy(通过人性？搭配不太合理). No doubt that university is the place most elites(elitists) come out from , and university is also a pronoun of a(an) effective  method to educate excellent young with loft(这是名词) willing in the knowledge and skills which(serve的主语应该是学生吧 will make them to serve) will serve the society better. The global university graduaters(graduates) may have better capabilities than the ones fron(from) common schools(这个这些学生可能更优秀没有得到文章的支持) . They can help in troublesome problems like AIDS, the impoverishment in South African, and so forth. In this sense, (contrasting with others)the global university can be in a higher level which is superior (to the common university去掉) in finance, resource, professors, labs and environment. In that(this) kind of university, the students will gain more knowledge about the society and the world(这句太泛) . The students who have a profound understand about the society would be (more excellent程度太强 excellent已经接近完美了) in solving the social problems especially persistent ones than the ones whose understand to the world just stays at the textbooks which may become useless  when practiced in the society(这句话太冗长了，).

However, that kind of global university supported by all the nations has its flaws yet. As we know, whether a university can runs normally depends on the money which most comes from the government and some sponsers(sponsors). The global university possibaly(possiibly) needs the (greater money搭配不合适) from all the nations . If so , there will be no equations in the decision making process that the affluent nations who give much more money can hold a strong will ; on the contrary , the other nations may keep silence . The rich nations will allocate the global graduates to solve their own social persistent problems but ignore the poor countries persistent ones which are pressed for the solutions without which a disaster may bursts out and finally sands(sends) the world in chaos(这段写的比较有说服力).

In my view , a global university is totally a helpful subject in social development ,  The students graduated from it can parpicipate(participate) in solving social problems in many forms , contribute to the whole world for human progress in the same destination(共同方向？same改为one ). But all the nations should find a new way to keep the equation in using  its graduater(graduates) without discrimantaion(discrimination). If so , the persistent social problems will be solved in the same pace afer (??) (which we may live better life ---- to make us live better ) ,no wars, no pollutions, no race and color discrimination, no diseas(disease), no corruption , which we can (called aother Gloden Ages has come---say another golden age coming).

整篇文章基本表达出了作者的意思，几个论点也比较清晰，但是在文章中支持的太少，第二段显得很冗长，并没有显示出很强的说服力，希望再把思路写的更清楚点。用词和搭配还可以更好。
另外，拼写错误多了点。
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