Issue17 【Persistence 小组】第五次作业

vinnieUID: 2104933

According to this statement, contrasting with obeying just laws, a more important thing for every individual in a society is to disobey and resist unjust laws. Although it seems right that everyone has responsibility to resist unjust laws, in my sight author’s view is too extreme. The action to resist unjust laws should be taken seriously. And obeying just laws for every member in the society should be put in the first place.

       First, law can’t be distinguished in just and unjust simply. Law is a free of passion and be used as means to control country. Some laws must reflect the advantage of rulers. For instance, in western society, the employer can earn surplus value from employee for free which is permitted in laws. But in some countries controlled by Communist Party, the following behavior is illegal. Can we just say the law in capitalistic country is unjust simply, of course not? This diverge is brought by the difference between capitalist and communism. From this, we can not just classify laws in just or unjust and ignore the law’s social background.

      Another I want to mention is that even a same law can be just or unjust in different countries. We can find many illustrations in our lives. When China enacted the law about family planning in 19th century, there were so many other countries against it as they thought it disobeyed human’s nature. But when we see back to it nowadays, we must say it is a just and brilliant law. If family planning was not executed, the situation in China can be quite horrible today. Sometimes that law is just or not is up to people’s different view. When we regard the law is just or not we should focus on the condition during that time.

     Furthermore, although the law is unjust, the behavior to resist unjust law may even be more harmful if it is not in a proper way. Sometimes the behavior comes into violence and terror. If the behavior itself disobeys the just law, how can we use it to amend these unjust laws? It is harmful for both country and citizens. About 10 years before, because of unsatisfying some laws made by government many students went to capital to give government their own advises. Instigated by some politicians, the violence conflicts happened between students and army. And many students died there. For country, it lost the students who would contribute themselves in developing it in the future. For parents, they were sad as they only have one child and the children should have a bright future. It was a tragedy. Resisting to unjust law is a two edged action and it can easily harm innocent people.

In sum, Resisting to unjust law needs a complex process. We should first confirm that it is unjust really, and then make reasonable action to resist it. On the other hand, the law which is just can protect us to have a normal daily life. In my opinion, although I don’t mean the law should be obeyed whatever it is just or not, we should pay more attention to obey these just laws as they make up of the basis of society.

liyane1130UID: 2233114

lz举的例子在政治上都很敏感， 恐怕不同的人会有不同的解释。关于剩余价值的例子，现在在中国企业家也合法的获取剩余价值（中国特色共产主义，呵呵）；计划生育在美国人眼中违反了人权（人权对他们可是头等大事）；六四的例子太过于敏感，而其不知道老美对这个事件的看法。个人观点，仅供参考！:)

小驴子UID: 2222683

Issue17 【Persistence 小组】第五次作业

According to this statement, contrasting with obeying just laws, a more important thing for every individual in a society is to disobey and resist unjust laws. Although it seems right that everyone has responsibility to resist unjust laws, in my sight author’s view is too extreme. The action to resist unjust laws should be taken seriously. And obeying just laws for every member in the society should be put in the first place.（开头语句通顺没有语法错误非常鲜明的给出了自己的观点比上一次看你的文章进步多了）

First, law can’t be distinguished in just and unjust simply. Law is a free of passion and be used as means to control country. Some laws must reflect the advantage of rulers. For instance, in western society, the employer can earn surplus value from employee for free which is permitted in laws. But in some countries controlled by Communist Party, the following behavior is illegal. Can we just say the law in capitalistic country is unjust simply, of course not? This diverge is brought by the difference between capitalist and communism. From this, we can not just classify laws in just or unjust and ignore the law’s social background.（这段话如果是中国老师评判文章看来你可以得高分了但是评判你文章得老米使用这个capitalist and communism例子实在是非常敏感建议换个例子使用在文法上没有大毛病语句还比较通顺第一段点名法律其实不能用公正与否来评判）

Another I want to mention（Another part that I want to mention 或者是直接Another part即可比较简略） is that even a same law can be just or unjust in different countries. We can find many illustrations in our lives. When China enacted the law about family planning in 19th century, there were so many other countries against it as they thought it disobeyed human’s nature. But when we see back to it nowadays, we must say it is a just and brilliant law. If family planning was not executed, the situation in China can be quite horrible today. Sometimes that law is just or not is up to people’s different view. When we regard the law is just or not we should focus on the condition during that time.（问题同上一段计划生育在今天得西方国家看来仍属于不人道行为但是对于中国来说这确实是让我们进步得方法例子是对得但还是比较敏感得话题）

Furthermore, although the law is unjust, the behavior to resist unjust law may even be more harmful if it is not in a proper way. Sometimes the behavior comes into violence and terror. If the behavior itself disobeys the just law, how can we use it to amend these unjust laws? It is harmful for both country and citizens.（此处得it 可以用一个宾语从句来替换会增加语句形式） About 10 years before, because of unsatisfying some laws made by government many students went to capital to give government their own advises. （advise建议用在此处可以如果是表达请愿得意思也可以用adjuration）Instigated by some politicians, the violence conflicts happened between students and army. And many students died there. For country, it lost the students who would contribute themselves in developing it in the future. For parents, they were sad as they only have one child and the children should have a bright future. It was a tragedy. Resisting to unjust law is a two edged action（用的好很新颖） and it can easily harm innocent people.（这断论证得很好前面两段有一个问题反复说得感觉但这段话确是更深得角度分析非常好而且支持句到位）

In sum, resisting to unjust law needs a complex process. We should first confirm that it is unjust really, and then make reasonable action to resist it. On the other hand, the law which is just can protect us to have a normal daily life. In my opinion, although I don’t mean the law should be obeyed whatever it is just or not, we should pay more attention to obey these just laws as they make up of the basis of society.

（末尾点题 首尾呼应得很好）

整篇文章相比上一篇issue有了很大得进步 语句非常通顺 立论到位
但是本文最大得弱点就是使用得例子实在是非常敏感得话题 如果判定人不能真正客观得来看你的卷子 你可能吃亏 以后可以多举一些别得例子尽量不要设计敏感得政治话题。