issue13 [076G飞跃小组]joyce8512自由作业

joyce8512UID: 2263806

TOPIC: ISSUE13 - "Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."
提纲：正负负。
1．  小语种是人类文化的宝贵遗产，对人类研究文化和历史很重要。
2．  小语种阻碍了各国的交流和合作。随着全球联系的日益密切，小语种走向灭绝是必然的。
3．  政府应该致力于解决其他更重要的问题，不必特意采取行动阻止小语种灭绝。
WORDS: 568         TIME: 0:50:00          DATE: 2007-3-3
光顾着赶时间了，结构和语言都很差。第一个一小时内完成的作品，呵呵~
原来想好要表达的东西因为想不到某些词而换用其他说法结果都产生意义偏差了。失败~
看来还是不能速度质量两者兼顾。
差文，请猛批！！！！！

Should government try to save the lesser-known languages in the world? The speaker claims that with fewer and fewer people speaking the minor languages, it is the government's responsibility act in order to prevent such languages from becoming extinct. From my perspective, it is true that lesser-known languages are great heritages from our forefathers which we should treasure; however, the distinction of the minor languages is the necessary result of the development of society that government should not pay excess attention to them.

Admittedly, minor languages are precious heritages for our society. They truly record the conditions of the old times--such as how people talked and sang--both of which reflect the lifestyle, the thoughts, and the entertainment of the groups who use them. Without the lesser-known languages, rarely can we understand what our forefathers did in their times, which is a great lost for people who research history and human beings. What is more, some art can only express by these minor languages. Take a certain Africa song as an example, once the language of the song disappears, the song will forgotten by people soon for the reason that nobody can comprehend the meaning of this lyric. Then the culture, not only the art but also other relevant history will extinct at last. Hence, our society will suffer a severe loss of cultural heritage if the lesser-known languages really disappear from the world someday because these languages are a indispensable part of our culture.

However, with the increasing communication and cooperation with countries, the minor languages are to some extent an obstacle of the development of world as a whole. As we know, English is the world official language at president--which is used by more and more people. Organizations and individuals all connect together through the same language-English. With the same language, countries can communicate with each other easily and then the cooperation of economical, political, and cultural increase as a result. For example, with the successful understanding and connection with other countries, the human gene research has started--which is to a large extent thanks to the mutual using of language. Just imagine, if one speaks a minor language, the other speaks another lesser-known language, how can the two people understand the meaning and plan of each other? And then people from different countries all work together to discuss or carry out the plan will be just a fantasy.

In addition, not all governments have the competence to take action and stop the minor languages from extinction. There are other problems exist in the world, like the environmental pollution, the sex discrimination, the unemployment of residents, and so on--all of which are urgent to be resolved. Since government has limited funds, it is more important to act to settle such problems which are already threatened the quality of people and the stabilization of the whole society.

All in all, in my point of view, although the lesser-known languages are helpful for us to better understand the life and culture of our ancestors; however, the fact that some of them will disappear in the future is the condition that cannot be changed. What the government should do is to pay attention and funds to more significant problems and build up a greater society for people's life in the future, which is far more crucial than take action to prevent the minor languages from extinction.

[ 本帖最后由 joyce8512 于 2007-3-3 10:13 编辑 ]

disyooUID: 2223964

论点一我觉得例子不是很学术 有些简单 但我觉得逻辑叙述挺好的 可以弥补这方面的缺失

论点二我觉得你更注重于强调一个统一的语言的好 而很少说这会导致小语言的灭绝 我觉得应该在平衡一些 说一下在基因工程也好的科学领域小语言带来的麻烦

论点三有点空了 而且我觉得有一些牵强 题目并没有说所有政府应该保护语言，而是“The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken”，应该着手这些国家的更主要矛盾来写 比如南非的贫富差距 艾滋病 等 这样～ 我说得有些含糊 大清早不太清醒 改作文顺顺思维……

lz  可能是时间关系吧 质量降下来了:loveliness:  第一次限时加油！

davidcaoUID: 2307241

Should government try to save the lesser-known languages in the world? The speaker claims that with fewer and fewer people speaking the minor languages, it is the government's responsibility ( to)act in order to prevent such languages from becoming extinct. From my perspective, it is true that lesser-known languages are great heritages from our forefathers which we should treasure; however, the distinction(extinction) of the minor languages is the necessary result of the development of society that government should not pay excess attention to them(这句话没能够看懂）.

Admittedly, minor languages are precious heritages for our society. They truly record the conditions of the old times--such as how people talked and sang--both of which reflect the lifestyle, the thoughts, and the entertainment of the groups who use them. Without the lesser-known languages, rarely can we understand what our forefathers did in their times, which is a great lost for people who research(study) history and human beings. What is more, some art can only be expressed by these minor languages. Take a certain Africa song as an example, once the language(lyrics) of the song disappears, the song will (be) forgotten by people(by people 不说也知道，说了显得多余） soon for the reason that nobody can comprehend the meaning of this lyric. Then the culture, not only the art but also other relevant history will extinct at last. Hence, our society will suffer a severe loss of cultural heritage if the lesser-known languages really disappear from the world someday because these languages are a indispensable part of our culture（你的从句一个接一个，有点confusing了，可能是我的理解能力有问题吧，发表一下意见哈）.

However, with the increasing communication and cooperation with countries, the minor languages are to some extent an obstacle of the development of world as a whole. As we know, English is the world official language at president(at present这个笔误很有意思啊）--which is used by more and more people. Organizations and individuals (are)all connect(ed) together through the same language-English. With the same language, countries can communicate with each other easily and then the cooperation of economical, political, and cultural increase as a result. For example, with the successful understanding and connection with other countries, the human gene research has started--which is to a large extent thanks to the （mutual using of language这个意思表达得不是那么清楚和地道）. Just imagine, if one speaks a minor language, the other speaks another lesser-known language, how can the two people understand the meaning and plan of each other? And then people from different countries all work together to discuss or carry out the plan will be just a fantasy.

In addition, not all governments have the competence to take action and stop the minor languages from extinction. There are other problems exist（ing) in the world, like the environmental pollution, the sex discrimination, the unemployment of residents, and so on--all of which are urgent to be resolved. Since government has limited funds, it is more important to (act to似乎有些多余) settle such problems which are(has) already threatened the quality of people（people's life) and the stabilization of the whole society.

All in all, in my point of view, although the lesser-known languages are helpful for us to better understand the life and culture of our ancestors; however, the fact that some of them will disappear in the future is the condition that cannot be changed. What the government should do is to pay attention and funds to (funds and pay attention to是不是更好理解些啊)more significant problems and build up a greater society for people's life in the future, which is far more crucial than take action to prevent the minor languages from extinction.
      我准备issue不久就考了，整体上对你文章的看法和disyoo差不多，看得出你写这篇文章确实有点仓促，笔误多了点，还是给你文章提了很多建议和改正，可能有不中肯和准确的地方。谅解:loveliness:   

joyce8512UID: 2263806

太感谢了~呵呵
我还给自己多限了5分钟呢，结果心里慌打字也慌，出来的东西跟不限时是完全没有可比性~
谢谢你们啦，这些错误都要改正改正！~:loveliness: :loveliness: