Argument38【~4而后生~小组】第二次作业,求拍啊

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Time:1:00:00    Word:439    Date: 2007- 3-6

The author strongly recommended the on taking Ichthaid daily, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil to prevent cold and lower absenteeism,　by the assumption that fish can be of great help to the people's health on the basis that residents nearby East Meria, who consume a lot of fish, seldom visit the doctor during a year long time for the treatment of cold. With no further evidence in illustrating this, the author drew a hastily groundless conclusion.

In the first place, the result of the report lacks credibility because no any further information was provided to establish a causal relationship between consumption of fish and catching cold. There might be some other reasons contributing to this that why the local residents are very healthy. Maybe the amiable living surroundings, moderate living pace, low pressures and stable temperature can also be the responsible factors in keeping the local people a healthy life. As the author failed to exclude all the other possible contributing factors, we can not be ensured that fish is a good food to preventing colds. So the assumption that eating fish is a good way for preventing catching cold is groundless and ridiculous.

In the second place, granted that eating fish would be helpful in preventing colds, the author failed to convince us that eating Ichthaid is equal to eating fish. As we only know Ichthaid is a kind of nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, we are given no other information on whether there are other ingredients in Ichthaid. So we can simply believe that eating Ichthaid is equal to eating fish oil. At the same time, the author failed to provide any further information on which parts of fish has a positive effect on local residents’ health. We can’t know weather it is the head of the fish or the liver are contributing to the prevention of colds.

Finally, granted that the Ichthais can be some help for preventing colds, the absenteeism in workplace and schools might still be of the same level after taking Ichthais. The author didn’t provide any further statistics to indicate only cold causing absenteeism. Losing the interests in study, cold weather, bad mood and work pressure can be some other neglected possibilities for the absenteeism in cold seasons.

Therefore the author should do a thoroughly survey before his conclusion  that eating Ichthais can help in reducing absenteeism in cold reason by the  assumption that eating fish will be a cold killer and the Ichthaid can substitute fish for the daily use. Otherwise it is incredible to agree with the author’s conclusion simply by his a series of groundless assumptions.

[ 本帖最后由 lastangel 于 2007-3-8 07:18 编辑 ]

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The author strongly recommended the on taking Ichthaid daily, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil to prevent cold and lower absenteeism,　by the assumption that fish can be of great help to the people's health on the basis that residents nearby East Meria, who consume a lot of fish, seldom visit the doctor during a year long time for the treatment of cold.（转述得不错哈！） With no further evidence in illustrating this, the author drew a hastily groundless conclusion. In the first place, the result of the report lacks credibility because no any further information was provided to establish a causal relationship between consumption of fish and catching cold. There might be some other reasons contributing to this that why the local residents are very healthy. Maybe the amiable living surroundings, moderate living pace, low pressures and stable temperature （非常具体，好！）can also be the responsible factors in keeping the local people a healthy life. As the author failed to exclude all the other possible contributing factors, we can not be ensured that fish is a good food to preventing colds. So the assumption that eating fish is a good way for preventing catching cold is groundless and ridiculous. In the second place, granted that eating fish would be helpful in preventing colds, the author failed to convince us that eating Ichthaid is equal to eating fish. As we only know Ichthaid is a kind of nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, we are given no other information on whether there are other ingredients in Ichthaid. So we can simply believe that eating Ichthaid is equal to eating fish oil（这个假设不太合理）. At the same time, the author failed to provide any further information（这个词组似乎用的有点多） on which parts of fish has（have？） a positive effect on local residents’ health. We can’t know weather（whether） it is the head of the fish or the liver are（is） contributing to the prevention of colds. Finally, granted that the Ichthais can be some help for preventing colds, （层层递进）the absenteeism in workplace and schools might still be of the same level after taking Ichthais. The author didn’t provide any further statistics to indicate only cold causing absenteeism. Losing the interests in study, cold weather, bad mood and work pressure can be some other neglected possibilities for the absenteeism in cold seasons. Therefore the author should do a thoroughly survey before his conclusion  that eating Ichthais can help in reducing absenteeism in cold reason（season?） by the  assumption that eating fish will be a cold killer and the Ichthaid can substitute fish for the daily use. Otherwise it is incredible to agree with the author’s conclusion simply by his a series of（his后面接这个词组我没见过） groundless assumptions.

感觉模版很不错。。注意细节。。。

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楼上把我要讲的都讲完了~晕,呵呵
除了一点拼写,基本没问题.
模版真是有利有弊啊...

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Theauthor strongly recommended the on taking Ichthaid daily, a nutritionalsupplement derived from fish oil to prevent cold and lower absenteeism,　bythe assumption that fish can be of great help to the people's health onthe basis that residents nearby East Meria, who consume a lot of fish,seldom visit the doctor during a year long time for the treatment ofcold.（转述得不错哈！） With no further evidence in illustrating this, the author drew a hastily groundless conclusion.

Inthe first place, the result of the report lacks credibility because noany further information was provided to establish a causal relationshipbetween consumption of fish and catching cold. There might be someother reasons contributing to this that why the local residents arevery healthy. Maybe the amiable living surroundings, moderate livingpace, low pressures and stable temperature （非常具体，好！）canalso be the responsible factors in keeping the local people a healthylife. As the author failed to exclude all the other possiblecontributing factors, we can not be ensured that fish is a good food topreventing colds. So the assumption that eating fish is a good way forpreventing catching cold is groundless and ridiculous.

Inthe second place, granted that eating fish would be helpful inpreventing colds, the author failed to convince us that eating Ichthaidis equal to eating fish. As we only know Ichthaid is a kind ofnutritional supplement derived from fish oil, we are given no otherinformation on whether there are other ingredients in Ichthaid. So wecan simply believe that eating Ichthaid is equal to eating fish oil（这个假设不太合理）. At the same time, the author failed to provide any further information（这个词组似乎用的有点多 换成study怎样？） on which parts of fish has（have？） a positive effect on local residents’ health. We can’t know weather（whether） it is the head of the fish or the liver are（is） contributing to the prevention of colds.

Finally, granted that the Ichthais can be some help for preventing colds, （层层递进）theabsenteeism in workplace and schools might still be of the same levelafter taking Ichthais. The author didn’t provide any further statisticsto indicate only cold causing absenteeism. Losing the interests(interest? interests是利益) instudy, cold weather, bad mood and work pressure can be some otherneglected possibilities (+reason?) for the absenteeism in cold seasons.

Thereforethe author should do a thoroughly survey before his conclusion  thateating Ichthais can help in reducing absenteeism in cold reason（season?）by the  assumption that eating fish will be a cold killer and theIchthaid can substitute fish for the daily use. Otherwise it isincredible to agree with the author’s conclusion simply by his a seriesof（his后面接这个词组我没见过） groundless assumptions.

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