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Issue144 同主题第九次,砖呢? [复制链接]

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题目:ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* whogives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings,etc.
Is it the artist provide something of lasting value to society instead of thecritic, as the statement asserts? If we define "lasting value" as onefraught with creative and unique value. I concede the statement that such valueis created not by those critics but rather by such artists. However, it isimpossible to deny that the critics contribute profoundly to it , to someextent.

Admittedly, the artist and his orher art work may benefits greatly from such critics‘ efforts. On the one hand,the critic help the audience understand those art works. Compared with the mostof people having not received education about art, those critics are morelikely to understand particular artist and appreciate his works of art. Withoutthis critic's expression and explanation of those art works, the populace failsto interpret and appreciate art works and pay more time on true invaluable artworks instead of bad ones. On the other hand, without high evaluation from thecritics, many of works of art are not received by market and consumers. As aresult, many artists are so poor that  they can not sustain theirdaily life by virtue of his art works, let alone devote all their lives tocreate more “lasting value” art works, what is worse, to gain a comfort level,such artist have to cater to others' need, especially receive supply fromgovernment rather than their own inner impulse. Thus their works of art wouldcease to have lasting value. A apt illustration of point involves the former Soviet Union. At that time, a lot of artists living in Soviet Union had to accept economic supports from thelocal government for some reasons, while their works had to follow the partyline in their work. Such works have been considered as no value, since theywere influenced considerably by the government’s attitude rather than theartist’ authoric emotion. If such artists were accepted and recommended bythose critics, their conditions of life and work would be improvedconsiderably. With no doubt, it is benefit for an artist to devote all his lifeto create new art works processing lasting value.

However, it is clear that thecritic is counterproductive to giving something of last value to society insome respect. After all, Critic's evaluation of those art works remains limitedor even a misguidance to  the masses. First, a critic just might hasinsight to some art works, but it does not mean that moral quality of a criticis as high as his experience of art works. Thus, when faced with a work of aparticular artist, his evaluation of art work is related with some personal andunjust viewpoints of artist inevitably. It is harmful to judge true valueof  art works. History is replete with examples of How some talentedartists such as Beethoven, Shakespeare, Van Gogh and so on, and their greatworks were always attacked by their contemporary critics, because of suchcritics’ certain terrible aspects of human nature. Secondly, even if a critic'smind is considered as lofty, the criticism of an art works has to be influencedby his narrow confine of old and established points and theories. A even moreremarkable example is Van Gogh, whose paintings have been sold at high pricenowadays. During his time, the style of his work was different from traditionalones. Thus, his works were not accepted by those contemporary critics who faithin the ancient ways of painting. Accordingly, those critics did not obscure thetrue value of his work until the modern critics change their minds deeply. Inconclusion, the critic is not always benefit to art works for its inner flaws.



In sum, I fundamentally agree with the speaker's statement that some lastingvalue of are work stem from artist, not the critic. Yet, the critic often haspositive and negative effection on the art works.


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发表于 2007-3-9 13:30:03 |只看该作者
占座 晚上来改:)

Is it the artist provide [provides] something of lasting value to society instead of the critic, as the statement asserts? If we define "lasting value" as one fraught with creative and unique value.[逗号,] I concede the statement that such valueis [values] created not by those critics but rather by such artists. However, it is impossible to deny that the critics contribute profoundly to it, to some extent.



Admittedly, the artist and his or her art work may benefits greatly from such critics‘ efforts. On the one hand, the critic help the audience understand those art works. Compared with the most of people having not received education about art, those critics are more likely to understand particular artist and appreciate his works of art. Without this critic's expression and explanation of those art works, the populace[有些绝对,最好加一个限定词,sometimes,may] fails to interpret and appreciate art works and pay more time on true invaluable artworks instead of bad ones. On the other hand, without high evaluation from the critics, many of works of art are not received [accepted or approved?] by market and consumers. As a result, many artists are so poor that they can not sustain their daily life by virtue of his art works, let alone devote all their lives to create more “lasting value” art works, what is worse, to gain a comfort level, such artist[artists复数] have to cater to others' need, especially receive supply from government rather than their own inner impulse.[么长的一句话看得好晕,我想可以在what is worse前面加上句号,断] Thus their works of art would cease to have lasting value. A [An] apt illustration of point involves the former Soviet Union. At that time, a lot of artists living in Soviet Union had to accept economic supports from the local government for some reasons, while their works had to follow the party line [the party line是什么意思?] in their work. Such works have been considered as no value, since they were influenced considerably by the government’s attitude rather than the artist’ authoric emotion. If such artists were accepted and recommended by those critics, their conditions of life and work would be improved considerably. [这句分析很奇怪啊,‘艺术家没有被评论家接受并推荐从而提高生活水平,就是他们按照政府态度创作的原因吗?’并没有对苏联艺术家的论据提供恰当的支持,如果说成是正是评论家没有尽到自己的职责去批判这一不尊重艺术的现象,才使得这种风气存在了很长时间,并对艺术文化造成了相当大的冲击?你说呢] With no doubt, it is benefit for an artist to devote all his life to create new artworks processing lasting value.由于B1的主体并没有突出艺术家的创作和对lasting value的正面作用,,因此,结尾在这样写就不好了



However, it is clear that the critic is counterproductive好词 to giving something of last value to society in some respect. After all, Critic's evaluation of those art works remains limited[加个逗号?] or even a misguidance to the masses. First, a critic just might has[have] insight to some art works, but it does not mean that moral quality of a criticis [critics] as high as his experience of art works. Thus, when faced with a work of a particular artist, his evaluation of art work is related with some personal and unjust viewpoints of artist inevitably. It is harmful to judge true value of art works. History is replete好词,赞一个 with examples of How[how] some talented artists such as Beethoven, Shakespeare, Van Gogh and so on, and their great works were always attacked by their contemporary critics, because of such critics’ certain terrible aspects of human nature. Secondly, even if a critic's mind is considered as lofty, the criticism of an art works has to be influenced by his narrow confine of old and established points and theories. A[An] even more remarkable example is Van Gogh, whose paintings have been sold at high price nowadays. During his time, the style of his work[指艺术作品的时候用works] was different from traditional ones. Thus, his works were not accepted by those contemporary critics who faith in the ancient ways[老的方式?用traditional怎么] of painting. Accordingly, those critics did not obscure[该说成揭示吧 reveal] the true value of his work until the modern critics change their minds deeply. In conclusion, the critic is not always benefit to art works for its inner flaws.看了开头段,以为这里要突出评论家的贡献了呢,可能是写着写着就想别的了吧。嗯,不过看作是对评论家的负评价的话,论证的还是挺好的哈



In sum, I fundamentally agree with the speaker's statement that some lasting value of are work stem from artist, not the critic. Yet, the critic often has positive and negative effection on the art works.

lz拼写错误极少啊,学习学习,不过是不是键盘的空格不好使呢,很多单词没加空格就连起来了
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1 似乎有点跑题,过多的强调了评论家了,可以改改
2个人意见,如果全文主体用2段论证,而且是一正一负,容易导致重点不突出,反而很难看出观点,论证难度会比较大吧
Lz的语言我是得学习的
铁甲依然在~



[ 本帖最后由 dennis1230 于 2007-3-9 20:27 编辑 ]

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