Issue57 【0706G－LOVEAW】第四次模考 by iq28

iq28UID: 2152875

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TOPIC: ISSUE57 - "The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience."
WORDS: 495          TIME: 0:39:01          DATE: 2007-3-11

There is no denying that books are the primary sources of knowledge since they came to the world. However, simply assert that books are superior to the direct experience in the knowledge gaining process seems a little presumptuous. Direct experience does play an indispensable role in broadening our horizon.

Admittedly, books, which are the summarization of the direct experience, actually are better at teaching us knowledge, for they are the concentration of the former generation's hardworking. For instance, the regulation of the movement of the planets in the solar system has been observed by Tycho and summarized by Kepler, and the whole research event costs about 20 years. Maybe nowadays astrologists can find the regulation in less than 20 years due to the development of the equipments, but obviously it is much wiser to refer to the books on which are recorded such information. If we blindly repeat the time and energy consuming process of experience regardless of the previous records of experience--that is books, it is a waste of time and money, and we will achieve half accomplishments with double effort.

However, that does not equal to that we should learn everything just from books. A threshold problem is that without the basic experience, we usually fail to profoundly understand the information contained in the books, or even cannot realize the significance of it. Those books are the concentration of the thoughts and understanding of the former experience learners, and they established their system of theory in the books after thousands times of experiences and rethink, which is a process of accumulation and progress. If we overlook the meaning of such preparing process, we are inevitably puzzled when we confront with such abstract books, just as it did in some soldiers who have just join the army when they try to read 'On the Theory of War' written by Clausewitz. Therefore, reading without practicing first may also weaken the effects of the knowledge gaining process.

Moreover, when we concern the ultimate goal of gaining knowledge, we will realize that we are willing to utilize the knowledge we gain from either books or from experience into practice. That is to say, our knowledge is at last seriously limited or even useless unless we put it into practice after learning, not to say rich and broad. In such sense, the experience is essential for the real understanding and use of knowledge. It is impossible for Zidane to become the worldwide star if he only studies hard on what the theory books of football without practicing on the playground. Merely in the cage of the abstract and theory, the knowledge can only produce bookworms but never serve for us.

In summary, books and experience are incompatible. Before we read books we should practice to certain extent first; and after learning the materials on books, we should again put them into the real world--that is to experience. In such cases, the knowledge is really fully utilized by us.

alex_leeUID: 2227596

TOPIC: ISSUE57 - "The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience."
WORDS: 495          TIME: 0:39:01          DATE: 2007-3-11

There is no denying that books are the primary sources of knowledge since they came to the world. However, simply assert that books are superior to the direct experience in the knowledge gaining process seems a little presumptuous. Direct experience does play an indispensable role in broadening our horizon.

Admittedly, books, which are the summarization of the direct experience, actually are better at teaching us knowledge, for they are the concentration of the former generation's hardworking. For instance, the regulation of the movement of the planets in the solar system has been observed by Tycho and summarized by Kepler, and the whole research event costs about 20 years. Maybe nowadays astrologists can find the regulation in less than 20 years due to the development of the equipments （what equipment?）, but obviously it is much wiser to refer to the books on which are recorded such information. If we blindly repeat the time and energy consuming process of experience regardless of the previous records of experience--that is books, it is a waste of time and money, and we will achieve half accomplishments with double effort. (有点疑问，题目中得depth of knowledge怎么在这一段体现？将你的例子改写成：通过看书，我们能够掌握行星运动规律，但是很少有人能从直接的经验终结出来，读书使我们学习他人的伟大思想。)

However, that does not equal to that we should learn everything just from books. （还是觉得没有回应depth of knowledge）A threshold problem is that without the basic experience, we usually fail to profoundly understand the information contained in the books, or even cannot realize the significance of it. Those books are the concentration of the thoughts and understanding of the former experience learners, and they established their system of theory in the books after thousands times of experiences and rethink, which is a process of accumulation and progress. If we overlook the meaning of such preparing process, we are inevitably puzzled when we confront with such abstract books, just as it did in some soldiers who have just join the army when they try to read 'On the Theory of War' written by Clausewitz (这个例子需要适当的阐述). Therefore, reading without practicing first may also weaken the effects of the knowledge gaining process. （你的TS是that does not equal to that we should learn everything just from books.但是我觉得你论证的是：只有先有一定的经验，才能领会书中的思想。）

Moreover, when we concern the ultimate goal of gaining knowledge, we will realize that we are willing to utilize the knowledge we gain from either books or from experience into practice. That is to say, our knowledge is at last seriously limited or even useless unless we put it into practice after learning, not to say rich and broad. In such sense, the experience is essential for the real understanding and use of knowledge. （experience? 还是应该说knowledge from experience?） It is impossible for Zidane to become the worldwide star if he only studies hard on what the theory books of football without practicing on the playground. Merely in the cage of the abstract and theory, the knowledge can only produce bookworms but never serve for us.

In summary, books and experience are incompatible. Before we read books we should practice to certain extent first; and after learning the materials on books, we should again put them into the real world--that is to experience. In such cases, the knowledge is really fully utilized by us.

LZ的论证很好，赞一个。
你以前改过我的文章，让我受益匪浅啊，呵呵。

但是我觉得这篇文章没有很好的回应题目，题目要探讨的是 the depth of knowledge from books or from direct experience,  但是你写的是：knowledge from books 和experience的关系，是不是有点偏题了。

个别例子没有展开，比如那个soldier的例子，和你ts的关系并不是那么明显的，还是应该多说两句。

恳请LZ有空的时候帮我看看我的两篇文章，呵呵，有点贪心啦，谢谢。
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zrrifleUID: 2228857

TOPIC: ISSUE57 - "The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience."
WORDS: 495          TIME: 0:39:01          DATE: 2007-3-11

There is no denying that books are the primary sources of knowledge since they came to the world. However, simply assert that books are superior to the direct experience in the knowledge gaining process seems a little presumptuous. Direct experience does play an indispensable role in broadening our horizon.

Admittedly, books, which are the summarization of the direct experience, actually are better at teaching us knowledge, for they are the concentration of the former generation's hardworking. For instance, the regulation of the movement of the planets in the solar system has been observed by Tycho and summarized by Kepler, and the whole research event costs about 20 years. Maybe nowadays astrologists can find the regulation in less than 20 years due to the development of the equipments, but obviously it is much wiser to refer to the books on which are recorded such information. If we blindly repeat the time and energy consuming process of experience regardless of the previous records of experience--that is books, it is a waste of time and money, and we will achieve half accomplishments with double effort.(第一段很清楚,不过最后一句,英文里真的有嘛呵呵)

However, that does not equal to that we should learn everything just from books.(个人觉得用can是不是更合语境) A threshold problem is that without the basic experience, we usually fail to profoundly understand the information contained in the books, or even cannot realize the significance of it. Those books are the concentration of the thoughts and understanding of the former experience learners, and they established their system of theory in the books after thousands times of experiences and rethink, which is a process of accumulation and progress. If we overlook the meaning of such preparing process, we are inevitably puzzled when we confront with such abstract books, just as it did in some soldiers who have just join the army when they try to read 'On the Theory of War' written by Clausewitz. Therefore, reading without practicing first may also weaken the effects of the knowledge gaining process.(我觉得这一段你没写完,要是我会接着写通过实验/实践帮助理解知识,你这里的PREPARE感觉太模糊了)

Moreover, when we concern the ultimate goal of gaining knowledge, we will realize that we are willing to utilize the knowledge we gain from either books or from experience into practice. That is to say, our knowledge is at last seriously limited or even useless unless we put it into practice after learning, not to say rich and broad. In such sense, the experience is essential for the real understanding and use of knowledge. It is impossible for Zidane to become the worldwide star if he only studies hard on what the theory books of football without practicing on the playground. Merely in the cage of the abstract and theory, the knowledge can only produce bookworms but never serve for us.

In summary, books and experience are incompatible. Before we read books we should practice to certain extent first; and after learning the materials on books, we should again put them into the real world--that is to experience. In such cases, the knowledge is really fully utilized by us.
我的感觉是第二和第三段没有完全拉开层次,你的意思是
2读书不是学习的全部/实践也帮助学习
3学习的目的是实践，而实践经验在实践中也很重要
但是2 3 段的例子并没有完全分开两段的区别，而且TS应该写的再清楚一点可能会显得更清楚，我想了半天，但是觉得要是我也觉得非常难说得很清楚。。。感觉粘在一起的

iq28UID: 2152875

谢谢
一个是微观的评论
一个是宏观的指出我对于深度和广度没有太多包含
第二个是我经常犯的毛病 虽然考场上如果能发现来得及修改 但是一旦发现不了就over了

谢谢

alex_leeUID: 2227596

Lz 加油，你肯定能考一个好分数的:)

iq28UID: 2152875

你指出的问题对我帮助很大 谢谢
考完回来可以有很多时间看看你们的作文了
加油