issue11 global university 写得很长，感觉很差，求拍，留链必回。

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稍微修改了一下

TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 668          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-3-9

As the great advancement of science and technology, the globalization makes our planet become smaller than ever before. People begin to find that no matter where they live, they face some similar social problems as people in other countries. In my point of view, despite of some disadvantages, the development of a global university will help our human to solve those mutual problems we face.

To begin with, the establishment of a global university will help us to solve those complex mutual problems without national boundaries. The great human intellectual achievements last century not only bring us    some conveniences but also create some serious problem, such as pollution and global warming. These problems threaten the survival of the whole human society. Nevertheless, the complex reasons behind these problems make the solution of them far beyond the ability of any single country. For instance, the reason behind the global warming is not a single country's mistake but roots in many different countries. On one hand, the developed countries consume large amount of energy to support their industries while emit quite a lot of exhaust gas that will make our planet warmer. On the other hand, to catch up with those developed countries in economical conditions, the poor countries would like to sacrifice their nature resource, such as destroying the rain forest, and subsequently break up the balance of the nature and accelerate the global warming.  No any single country can solve these problems because their complexity. Under this circumstance, the development of a global university undoubtedly will help us to find a solution because in such a university, we can use the resources from all the countries in the world and benefit from the cooperation of the preeminent scientist of different cultural background. Furthermore, in this university, we can hear from different countries involved in these problems and try to find a balance between them.  These will help us to find an applicable solution acceptable for most countries.

In addition, a global university will help to minimize the confrontation between different cultures. Some other mutual problems we face, such as wars, are partly caused by the misunderstanding between distinct cultures. The development of a global university and enrolling students around the world who are to function in their societies can help to eliminate the cultural misunderstanding and therefore decrease some confrontations. For instance, once upon a time, China and America thought each other as enemies. Besides some complex politician reasons, the confrontation between these two great nations are partly because of that the public in both China and America seldom have a chance to know who the others really are. Were they really the devils as the government depicted? After 1979, more and more Chinese went to American while more Americans visited China. Through the close observation of each other, the publics in both countries began to believe that the persons in the other country were as kindness as themselves. As increase of the understanding of each other, friendships between America and China are established. So, if a global university can be built, through the communication between the students with different culture background, understanding of each other will increase and confrontation might be minimized.

However, there are some intrinsic flaws in such a global university. The establishment of the university has to gain supports from the governments of different nations. It's quite possible that at last politician factors will influence the running of the university and violate the long-established tradition of freedom in universities. For instance, the more powerful countries might ask for more influences on the policies of this global university and ignore the requests from other smaller countries. Or the powerful countries might convey their own values in this university and in this case, the confrontation between different cultures will not be minimized but exaggerated. Therefore, the development of such a global university must be carefully treated and effective rules to guarantee the equal treats of different countries are crucial.

In summary, if carefully designed, the development of a global university will benefit the whole world through the communication from students with different background and the collaborations of scientists of distinct countries.

[ 本帖最后由 alex_lee 于 2007-3-10 08:37 编辑 ]

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As the great advancement of science and technology, the globalization makes our planet become smaller than ever before. People begin to find that no matter where they live, they face some similar social problems as people in other countries. In my point of view, despite of some disadvantages, the development of a global university will help our human to solve those mutual problems we face.

To begin with, the establishment of a global university will help us to solve those complex mutual problems without national boundaries. (ts太宽泛了.直接就是完全把topic的意思抄了一遍) The great human intellectual achievements last century not only bring us some conveniences but also create some serious problem, such as pollution and global warming. (这一句有点不知所云) These problems threaten the survival of the whole human society. (一直到这里都没有完全进入主题) Nevertheless, the complex reasons behind these problems make the solution of them far beyond the ability of any single country. For instance, the reason behind the global warming is not a single country's mistake but roots in many different countries. On one hand, the developed countries consume large amount of energy to support their industries while emit quite a lot of exhaust gas that will make our planet warmer. On the other hand, to catch up with those developed countries in economical conditions, the poor countries would like to sacrifice their nature resource, such as destroying the rain forest, and subsequently break up the balance of the nature and accelerate the global warming. No any single country can solve these problems because their complexity. (前面只是说了single不可以,还是没有涉及到全球合作会怎么好...sigh) Under this circumstance, the development of a global university undoubtedly will help us to find a solution because in such a university, we can use the resources from all the countries in the world and benefit from the cooperation of the preeminent scientist of different cultural background. Furthermore, in this university, we can hear from different countries involved in these problems and try to find a balance between them. (本段最核心的论证只有这么多,是不是有点少了?) These will help us to find an applicable solution acceptable for most countries.

In addition, a global university will help to minimize the confrontation between different cultures. (一种预防性质的手段) Some other mutual problems we face, such as wars, are partly caused by the misunderstanding between distinct cultures. The development of a global university and enrolling students around the world who are to function in their societies can help to eliminate the cultural misunderstanding and therefore decrease some confrontations. For instance, once upon a time, China and America thought each other as enemies. Besides some complex politician reasons, the confrontation between these two great nations are partly because of that the public in both China and America seldom have a chance to know who the others really are. Were they really the devils as the government depicted? After 1979, more and more Chinese went to American while more Americans visited China. Through the close observation of each other, the publics in both countries began to believe that the persons in the other country were as kindness as themselves. As increase of the understanding of each other, friendships between America and China are established. (这个例子跟global university没有太直接关系.如果要用下面应嘎把两者好好对比.) So, if a global university can be built, through the communication between the students with different culture background, understanding of each other will increase and confrontation might be minimized. (这段其实立意很好,不过论述的中间要多多和GU联系起来)

However, there are some intrinsic flaws in such a global university. The establishment of the university has to gain supports from the governments of different nations. It's quite possible that at last politician factors will influence the running of the university and violate the long-established tradition of freedom in universities. For instance, the more powerful countries might ask for more influences on the policies of this global university and ignore the requests from other smaller countries. Or the powerful countries might convey their own values in this university and in this case, the confrontation between different cultures will not be minimized but exaggerated. Therefore, the development of such a global university must be carefully treated and effective rules to guarantee the equal treats of different countries are crucial. (又说到了冲突不可避免,上一段刚刚说了可以增进了解从而预防冲突.矛盾了.如果你的文章是赞成题目观念的,不如把2和3body位置对换,两次转折,其中第二次的转折更深入一点,有冲突的同时也是增进了解的过程.效果可能会更好)

In summary, if carefully designed, the development of a global university will benefit the whole world through the communication from students with different background and the collaborations of scientists of distinct countries.

抱歉
后天就要考了
改得很仓促
考完回来再回报更多吧呵呵

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再次感谢你的改文,每次写I都觉得脑子里满是糨糊.
还有这位iq28兄弟好象是很NB的一个人哪,你们是一组?崇拜莫名!!

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iq 在坛子上很活跃的，水平很高，我从她的修改里收获不少。