生如夏花小组作业1,2

lisha726UID: 2282972

第二次作业：7月3日
口语部分：
Topic:describe a social or politics celebration events in your culture

For me, the celebration that gives me the most impressive is the return of HONG KONG to China. As we all know, HONG KONG is always a part of China, but it had been dominated by British for almost 100 years. Thanks to “one country, two systems”, HONG KONG has come back to her mother. I still remember July 1, 1997 when HONG KONG came back. At
that day, TV broadcasted the process of handover and we all saw that Chinese military went across the once broader
line and located in HONG KONG. After seeing this, we all jumped, applauded, said “HONG KONG back, HONG KONG
back”, and felt pride from heart. At that day, all Chinese celebrated the return.

独立写作部分：
Topic:
If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

For a company, profit is the primary point. Were I an employer, I would like to hire the former one experienced though at a higher salary.

To begin with, due to their work experience, they can do a job more efficiently. For instance, same work, it may take a
short time for experienced one to complete, but it may take a long time for inexperienced to do it just owe to the
unfamiliarity. Be efficient, that means doing more work in a relative short time span. In this sense, it would make more contribute to our company’s profit. In addition, being an employer, I don't need to spend more time to teach the
experienced one because the experienced workers could learn themselves using their experience. In this sense, hiring experienced one would be a good choice for me.

Furthermore, an experienced one has fewer work accident. Work accident is a main concern that we are trying to
prevent. The reason for this is simple. If a work accident happened, it may cost a lot of money to recover it and may
degrade our company’s reputation. Being experienced, they must know exactly how to operate a machine, how to use a tool and so forth. So the work accident probability for them would be very small.

Admittedly, the latter one has its own advantages. Because of their lower salary, it seems that they bring more profit
for company. It is likely that the total number of their salary takes up only a small portion of the total incoming. In this
sense, it does bring profit to our company. But one should think more carefully. Be inexperienced, that means the
efficiency would be low and the work accident probability would be high. Imagine, if you hired inexperienced one,
though the total number of salary you paid them is low, but the productivity in your company would be low and the
profit would be small. And if the work accident were high, then you would have to spend lots of money to deal with these accidents. If that were the case, your profit would become smaller.

To sum up, you should take into account the profit of the company when you would hire someone. Since the experienced one would bring more profit to our company, I would like to hire the experienced one though at a higher salary were I am an employer.

第一次作业：7月1日

独立写作部分：

Topic: It has recently been announced that a new restaurant maybe built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan. Why?

Whether or not to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood is not a simple thing. And I think there are many things to consider before implement this plan.

At first glance, it sounds a good plan to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood. Nowadays, people become preferring to eat outside and this new restaurant would provide a new choice for people, especially it having something special, which I mean some special tastes that others don’t have.
In addition, if the existing restaurants are not enough and people going there must be waiting for some time that maybe long, then the appearance of this new restaurant would abate this phenomenon in some sense. Maybe this new restaurant is a large one and it can contain a large number of people, in this sense the problem maybe solved.

But one may ask: in which place this new restaurant would be built? Notice: that is “built”, not “open”. That means you must change one place into another place. And the former place may be park, grassland, or playground for children and so forth. In this sense, changing anyone of the above would bring new problem and agitate someone’s discontent. For instance, a park is a place where people can relax, play, have picnic and so on. Changing a park into a restaurant, people would have no place to enjoying themselves, to relax, to play and something like that. You may ask: if people want to relax, a restaurant can also be considered as a relaxing place. But would relaxing in restaurant and relaxing in park bring the same feeling to people? The answer is not. The most important reason lying under this difference is the difference function between the two places. A restaurant’ aim is to provide an eating place for which profit is a key point, while a park is non-profit in some meaning whose main aim is to provide a chance for people to relax, to have a close touch with nature.

To sum up, whether or not to build a new restaurant should be considered carefully. If the new restaurant was to build in a vain land which in not in use now, then it may be a good plan to build a new restaurant due to it bringing a new choice for people.



口语部分：

Topic: Describe the most important decision that you made in your life

Describe the most important decision you have made in your life.

Well, as for me, I think the most important decision I have made is to participate in a physics class which is prepared for the physics contest. In high school, for physics, I didn’t have enough confidence to say that I was good at physics, but I can say that I was interested in physics. However, whether or not you are suitable for taking the physics contest doesn’t depend on interest, but ability. So at that time I am confused whether should I take part in it. If I took part in it, I am afraid I wouldn’t deal with the problem well and might fall behind. But if I gave up joining it, I think I must be regretful some time. After a careful thinking, I took part in it. Becoming a member of the class, I found it is not as difficult as you once thought and you can handle it well. From this decision, I learn that sometimes what you need is just a little confidence.

[ 本帖最后由 lisha726 于 2007-7-3 11:58 编辑 ]

ernest81888UID: 2247639

2. It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Whether or not to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood is not a simple thing. And （这里不需要AND）I think there are many things（太通俗了，用concerns) to consider before implement this plan.

(我现在也不知道开头该怎么写，不枉驾评论了）


At first glance, it sounds a good plan to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood. Nowadays, people become preferring to eat outside and this new restaurant would provide a new choice for people, especially it having something special, which I mean some special tastes that others don’t have.(怎么说呢，感觉意思出来了，但是表达上面有点问题，语法我也不是很精通，最后一句，如果我写的话---By providing us some special tastes, it helps us have much more chances to enjoy the decilious food from different country or district)

In addition, if the existing restaurants are not enough and people going there must be waiting for some time that maybe long, （As we konwn, the current capacity of restaurants in our neighborhood is not enought, for this case, sometimes people will spent much time in waiting for a seat.)then the appearance of this new restaurant would abate this phenomenon in some sense. Maybe this new restaurant is a large one and it can contain a large number of people, in this sense the problem maybe solved.

（忌！！这里我不得不说，题目已经说了 in your neighborhood,那肯定你已经对neighborhood非常了解了， 你这里不能用IF，懂我意思吗？）


But one may ask: in which place this new restaurant would be built? Notice: that is “built”, not “open”. That means you must change one place into another place. And the former place may be park, grassland, or playground for children and so forth. In this sense, changing anyone of the above would bring new problem and agitate someone’s discontent. For instance, a park is a place where people can relax, play, have picnic and so on. Changing a park into a restaurant, people would have no place to enjoying themselves, to relax, to play and something like that. You may ask: if people want to relax, a restaurant can also be considered as a relaxing place. But would relaxing in restaurant and relaxing in park bring the same feeling to people? The answer is not. The most important reason lying under this difference is the difference function between the two places. A restaurant’ aim is to provide an eating place for which profit is a key point, while a park is non-profit in some meaning whose main aim is to provide a chance for people to relax, to have a close touch with nature.

(这段我觉得有点钻牛脚尖了，然后我觉得写的较多，当然可能也是我的理解有问题，但是长度的确过长。）


To sum up, whether or not to build a new restaurant should be considered carefully. If the new restaurant was to build in a vain land which in not in use now, then it may be a good plan to build a new restaurant due to it bringing a new choice for people.

（结尾不错，总的来说感觉作者没有花心思上去写。态度决定一切！加油！！我当年那是被森林骂的狗血淋头，哈哈）







Describe the most important decision you have made in your life.

Well, as for me, I think the most important decision I have made is to participate in a physics class which is prepared for the physics contest. In high school, for physics, I didn’t have enough confidence to say that I was good at physics, but I can say that I was interested in physics. However, whether or not you are suitable for taking the physics contest doesn’t depend on interest, but ability. So at that time I am confused whether should I take part in it. If I took part in it, I am afraid I wouldn’t deal with the problem well and might fall behind. But if I gave up joining it, I think I must be regretful some time. After a careful thinking, I took part in it. Becoming a member of the class, I found it is not as difficult as you once thought and you can handle it well. From this decision, I learn that sometimes what you need is just a little confidence.

不错，我就提个建议吧，最好注意层次机构，口语是有摸版，所以与其自由发挥，不如按摸版来，抱歉我也是听说，不知道到底啥是摸版，有空在讨论，字数过多了，我估计你在45S里面讲不完。我口语暴烂，比你差多了。。5555

lisha726UID: 2282972

"题目已经说了 in your neighborhood,那肯定你已经对neighborhood非常了解了， 你这里不能用IF"

嗯，说的很有理。

那个口语确实太长了！但是当时写感觉没多少，一说的话真的45s是说不完的。。。

看来自己还得把作文再好好研究研究。。。。。。。

:handshake :)

银铃UID: 2349801

借鉴借鉴。。。学习学习。。

森林116UID: 2272614

At first glance, it sounds a good plan to build a new restaurant in my neighborhood. Nowadays, people become preferring to eat outside and this new restaurant would provide a new choice for people, especially it having something special, which I mean some special tastes that others don’t have. (第一段由两句话构成,个人觉得第二句可以提到前面说,,,一上来就是At first glance,,就算写argu也有点觉得突兀啊)

In addition(这个一般放在倒数第'二段说), if the existing restaurants are not enough and people going there must be waiting for some time that maybe long, then the appearance of this new restaurant would abate this phenomenon in some sense. Maybe this new restaurant is a large one and it can contain a large number of people, in this sense the problem maybe solved.(和小马的意见一样,IBT作文不是argu让你挑毛病的,你应当尽快的表达自己的观点并更多的从正面支持自己的观点)

But one may ask: in which place this new restaurant would be built? Notice: that is “built”, not “open”. (你考虑的实在太详细了,注意你的身份只是个住户,表达你的意见就行了,试想你家旁边盖酒店,你似乎更应该关心他们施工是否会把你吵着睡不着觉,开张后的吵闹和不、安全等其他因素,而不是替酒店老板考虑酒店盖在哪吧?) That means you must change one place into another place. And the former place may be park, grassland, or playground for children and so forth. In this sense, changing anyone of the above would bring new problem and agitate someone’s discontent. For instance, a park is a place where people can relax, play, have picnic and so on. Changing a park into a restaurant, people would have no place to enjoying themselves, to relax, to play and something like that. You may ask: if people want to relax, a restaurant can also be considered as a relaxing place. But would relaxing in restaurant and relaxing in park bring the same feeling to people? The answer is not. The most important reason lying under this difference is the difference function between the two places. A restaurant’ aim is to provide an eating place for which profit is a key point, while a park is non-profit in some meaning whose main aim is to provide a chance for people to relax, to have a close touch with nature. (后面的问题也是一样,这些问题不是在这个小小的IBT考试里考虑的,虽然你想的的确很细致)

To sum up, whether or not to build a new restaurant should be considered carefully.( 这个问题不是你应当考虑的,其实你只用把你的态度:到底愿不愿意有个酒店在你家附近?表明清楚就行了~)If the new restaurant was to build in a vain land which in not in use now, then it may be a good plan to build a new restaurant due to it bringing a new choice for people.

我想你可能是没有理解好托福作文吧,IBT作文不用考虑那么多,很简单,对于一件事情你的观点?支持还是反对?然后说明为什么支持还是反对就行了,他甚至不需要要像G作文那样要求严格的逻辑推理和严密的分析,,适当加点感情色彩也可以. 如果你是刚刚开始接触作文的话,建议你以后写作文前先列个提纲,,,梳理下思路, 想清楚自己要表达的观点是什么?是否恰当?怎么组织理由?很快就会有进步的!很多人一个月时间可以搞定AW,,,,,你搞定IBT也不会有问题的!!!加油!!!!

lisha726UID: 2282972

学习学习。

森林116UID: 2272614

第二次作业：7月3日
口语部分：
Topic:describe a social or politics celebration events in your culture

For me, the celebration that gives me the most impressive is the return of HONG KONG to China. (挖...题材好厉害~~) As we all know, HONG KONG is always a part of China, but it had been dominated by British for almost 100 years. Thanks to “one country, two systems”, HONG KONG has come back to her mother. I still remember July 1, 1997 when HONG KONG came back. At that day, TV broadcasted the process of handover and we all saw that Chinese military went across the once broader line and located in HONG KONG. After seeing this, we all jumped, applauded, said “HONG KONG back, HONG KONG back”, and felt pride from heart. At that day, all Chinese celebrated the return.(恩,很不错,不过这样一来你的语速要挑快了哦??还有,貌似最后一句还没完吧,,是不是差个总结的结尾?比如说回归在我们每人心中意义重大之类??)

独立写作部分：
Topic:
If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

For a company, profit is the primary point. Were I an employer, I would like to hire the former one experienced though at a higher salary. (很简练的开头,,,不错,观点明确)

To begin with, due to their work experience, they can do a job more efficiently. For instance, same work, it may take a
short time for experienced one to complete, but it may take a long time for inexperienced to do it just owe to the
unfamiliarity. Be efficient, that (being efficient) means doing more work in a relative short time span. In this sense, it would make more contribute to our company’s profit. In addition, being an employer, I don't need to spend more time to teach the
experienced one because the experienced workers could learn themselves using their experience. In this sense, hiring experienced one would be a good (用better或者prior) choice for me.

Furthermore, an experienced one has fewer work accident. Work accident is a main concern that we are trying to
prevent. The reason for this is simple. (这个单句太口语化,不要它) If a work accident happened, it may cost a lot of money to recover it and may
degrade our company’s reputation. Being experienced, they must know exactly how to operate a machine, how to use a tool and so forth. So the work accident probability for them would be very small.

Admittedly, the latter one (also) has its own advantages. Because of their lower salary, it seems that they bring more profit
for company. It is likely that the total number of their salary takes up only a small portion of the total incoming. In this
sense, it does bring profit to our company. But (前面是对前两段和首段的观点做出让步, 怎么这里又开始驳这个让步了呢?转折段是对你正面观点做反面的补充,这个段里面就不用再进行观点对立了吧,毕竟inexperienced one不如 experienced one你前面已经说的够详细了哦----仅为个人意见)  one should think more carefully. Be inexperienced, that means the efficiency would be low and the work accident probability would be high. Imagine, if you hired inexperienced one, though the total number of salary you paid them is low, but the productivity in your company would be low and the profit would be small. And if the work accident were high, then you would have to spend lots of money to deal with these accidents. If that were the case, your profit would become smaller.

To sum up, you should take into account the profit of the company when you would hire someone. Since the experienced one would bring more profit to our company, I would like to hire the experienced one though at a higher salary were I am an employer.9结尾不错)

恩,看来你上次的问题只是偶尔没定位准嘛~~不错不错,底子在那里复习就会很轻松的,,,写那么多要注意时间哦,,汗,看来我也要加紧写详细点了

ernest81888UID: 2247639

我说的吧，态度决定一切，这篇文章很不错。赞