Issue11 【0710G-小猪快跑小组】第1次作业 by guangxu

guangxu3559UID: 2311047

昨天作业已经交过一遍,由于当时不熟悉规则,是直接回帖,没有给出连接带给该作业的诸多不便,特重新提交一次.

Issue11

"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems"


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There is a saying that as the development of the globalization, the world is becoming more and more smaller, meanwhile more serious problems such as conflicts between countries, trade debates, culture invasion, etc, have got worse. So it is need for all nations to support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.

First, the globalization makes the communication and interaction betweens countries more easily and problems more complex, which can not be settled easily by one country. In the past, as the limit of technology, the contacts between countries are very rare and there is no need to concern other country's problems. However, it is inevitable that the benefit of one country is related to others now. The interaction between each country's cultures lessens the concept of nation which is caused by the advanced technology. The world's problems emerging now are more complex, which are common and related many countries' profits. For instance, the conflict between Israel and Palestinian has continued for many years. Until now, considering the profits of America and other countries, it is not a simple problem which can be delt with the only effort of these two countries. What's more, as the implement of reform and open policy, especially after entering into the WTO, China has faced many serious problems, such as trade conflicts with other countries, environment deterioration, tradition culture loss, etc. Only by cooperating with international societies, can these issues be settled easily.        

Second, the students from the global university have many proficiencies to solve these world's problems. The global university has the advantage to supply a platform for the students to be familiar with the international issues. They can master many countries' language and the character of their culture, which are indispensable tools to solve the world's problems. You can imagine the embarrass condition when one international official who knows nothing about Iraq are appointed to deal with the issues there. What's more, with the support of all nations the university can easily supply a simulated international society for the students to be familiar with and to practise handling the world's problems.
   
Admittedly, just by one country, some problems can be settled at last, but the costs of them are very high. Considering the rapid development of China, it is sure that the effective method to treat SARS can be gained sooner or later. However, this must be done with the effort of many intelligent specialists. So the cost will be incalculable. If taking the advice and cooperating with specialists from other countries especially from developed countries like America, Japan, Germany, this problem can be handled economically.

In conclusion, with regard to the complexity and extensiveness of the world's problems, a global university has the advantage to supply effective methods to solve them. So all nations should contribute to this world's strategy which relates to their own benefits.   

Issue 116的提纲:
As the development of advanced technology, we have a sense that the world is becomming more and mre less. Meanwhile, we can enjoy the convenience brought by it. So there is a saying that there is no doubt that every aspect of society-including education, politics, the arts, and the sciences-will benefit greatly from international influencies. However, I can not agree with this statement completely.

On one hand, the growth of global networks certainly benefits ue in many aspects. We can communicate with friends in other overseas easily.

On the other hand, some aspects of society are facing threats and damage brought by the growth of global networks. It is inevitable that each progress will bring some new problems. The growth should be responsible for the environment deterioration, species extinction, traditional culture loss, aggravation between rich and poor, etc.

In conclusion, considering the convenience and damage brought by the growth of global networks, we can not get a hasty generalization that it is no doubt we will benefit greatly from the growth in every aspects of society. Just by using this growth correctly can we get large profits from it.        

Issue 81的提纲:

Generally speaking, patriotic reverence for the history of a nation is a good attitude and it is highly advocated for the citizens of one country to possess. By using this strong mental tool, the country can be more solid. However, completely patriotic reverence sometimes can also bring some negative effects to the country. So only by correctly and reasonable reverenting for the history can we benefit from it mostly.

First, patriotic reverence bring more cohesion for the nation to deal with the obstacle on the developing road.

Second, the history of a nation which is often considered as a mirror can supply many useful and effective experience and advices for the development of the nation, which can heip it avoid repeating mistakes and going tortuous way.
Admittedly, patriotic reverence for the history can sometimes become a barrier to the development of the nation. Complete reverence for the history and neglecting the new current circumstance make the country depart from the normal way far and far.

In conclusion, considering the two effects of the patriotic reverence for the history, we can not easily say whether it does more to impede or to encourage progress. If we treat the history with a dialetical version and using it correctly, the reverence for the history can promote the progress of the nation greatly.                     

aashunUID: 2362747

There is a saying that as the development of the globalization, the world is becoming much smaller, meanwhile more serious problems such as conflicts between countries, trade debates, culture invasion, etc, are getting 注意前后时态一致 worse. So it is need for all nations to support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.你清楚的陈述了题目 此段的最后一个句子是statement 而不是opinion 此段没有明确提出你的个人观点 建议最后加上一句表达你的个人观点的小结句

First, the globalization makes the communication and interaction between countries more easily and problems more complex, 这句话给我的感觉很奇怪，有点矛盾，怎么既容易有复杂呢？ which can not be settled easily by merely one country. In the past, as the limit of technology, the communication between worldwide countries are so rare that there is no need to concern the problems of other countries. 这里改成一个强调句型 既增强了你的观点 又有了一个长句  Nowadays, however, it is inevitable that the benefit of one country is related to others. The interaction between each country's cultures weakens the concept of nation which is caused by the advanced technology 这里的定语从句修饰的是那个词 我没有看出来. The world's problems, which are common and related many countries' profits， emerging now are more complex. For instance, the conflict between Israel and Palestinian has been continuing for many years.巴以冲突还在持续啊 Until now, considering the profits of America and other countries, it is not a simple problem which can be solved with the only effort of these two countries. What's more, as the implement of reform and open policy, especially after entering into the WTO, China has faced many serious problems, such as trade conflicts with other countries, environment deterioration, tradition culture loss, etc. 这里的几个such as 个人觉得不好 因为你所陈述的这些问题 在中国入世前就是已经存在的 而非中国入世才有了这些问题 文章的陈述逻辑发生了改变 这是不对的 Only by cooperating with international societies, can these issues be settled easily.        

Second, the students from the global university have much proficiency to solve these world's problems. The global university has the advantage to supply a platform for the students to be familiar with the international issues. They can master many language of other countries and the character of their culture, 注意平行结构的使用 which are indispensable tools to solve the world's problems. You could imagine the embarrass condition when one international official who knows nothing about Iraq are appointed to deal with the issues there. What's more, with the support of all nations the university can easily supply a simulated international society for the students to be familiar with and to practise handling the world's problems. 应有还要加上一个总结句 说明这些学习机会对问题的重要作用
   
Admittedly, just by one country, some problems can be settled at last, but the costs of them are very high. Considering the rapid development of China, it is sure that the effective method to treat SARS can be gained sooner or later. However, this must be done with the effort of many intelligent specialists. So the cost will be incalculable. If taking the advice and cooperating with specialists from other countries especially from developed countries like America, Japan, Germany, this problem can be handled economically.
这个例子 我不推崇
首先sars本来就是一个全球问题 而不是中国一国的问题
其次 解药的研制本来就是各国合作的结果 只是中国的贡献最大 但是文

aashunUID: 2362747

There is a saying that as the development of the globalization, the world is becoming [much] smaller, meanwhile more serious problems such as conflicts between countries, trade debates, culture invasion, etc, [are getting] [注意前后时态一致] worse. So it is need for all nations to support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.[你清楚的陈述了题目 此段的最后一个句子是statement 而不是opinion 此段没有明确提出你的个人观点 建议最后加上一句表达你的个人观点的小结句]
First, the globalization makes the communication and interaction [between] countries more easily and problems more complex, [这句话给我的感觉很奇怪，有点矛盾，怎么既容易有复杂呢？] which can not be settled easily by [merely] one country. In the past, as the limit of technology, the [communication] between [worldwide] countries are [so] rare [that] there is no need to concern [the problems of other countries]. [这里改成一个强调句型 既增强了你的观点 又有了一个长句]  [Nowadays], however, it is inevitable that the benefit of one country is related to others. The interaction between each country's cultures [weakens] the concept of nation [which is caused by the advanced technology 这里的定语从句修饰的是那个词 我没有看出来]. The world's problems, which are common and related many countries' profits， [emerging now are more complex]. For instance, the conflict between Israel and Palestinian has [been continuing] for many years.[巴以冲突还在持续啊] Until now, considering the profits of America and other countries, it is not a simple problem which can be [solved] with the only effort of these two countries. What's more, as the implement of reform and open policy, especially after entering into the WTO, China has faced many serious problems, such as trade conflicts with other countries, environment deterioration, tradition culture loss, etc. [这里的几个such as 个人觉得不好 因为你所陈述的这些问题 在中国入世前就是已经存在的 而非中国入世才有了这些问题 文章的陈述逻辑发生了改变 这是不对的] Only by cooperating with international societies, can these issues be settled easily.        
Second, the students from the global university have [much] proficiency to solve these world's problems. The global university has the advantage to supply a platform for the students to be familiar with the international issues. They can master many [language of other countries] and the character of their culture, [注意平行结构的使用] which are indispensable tools to solve the world's problems. You [could] imagine the embarrass condition when one international official who knows nothing about Iraq are appointed to deal with the issues there. What's more, with the support of all nations the university can easily supply a simulated international society for the students to be familiar with and to practise handling the world's problems. [应有还要加上一个总结句 说明这些学习机会对问题的重要作用]
   
Admittedly, just by one country, some problems can be settled at last, but the costs of them are very high. Considering the rapid development of China, it is sure that the effective method to treat SARS can be gained sooner or later. However, this must be done with the effort of many intelligent specialists. So the cost will be incalculable. If taking the advice and cooperating with specialists from other countries especially from developed countries like America, Japan, Germany, this problem can be handled economically.
[这个例子 我不推崇
首先sars本来就是一个全球问题 而不是中国一国的问题
其次 解药的研制本来就是各国合作的结果 只是中国的贡献最大 但是文中你认为是中国自己耗费大量资源研制的解药 隐含要中国合作研制的意思 这个与事实就不符合 诚然例子的选择在一定程度上可以杜撰 但是sars这么大的事情 还是符合事实比较好
最后 个人觉得这个例子 没有起到你期望的让步的效果]
In conclusion, with regard to the complexity and extensiveness of the world's problems, a global university has the advantage to supply effective methods to solve them. So all nations should [carry out] this world's strategy which [is related] to their own benefits .

frecklewang1984UID: 2355474

frecklewang 的修改
Issue11

"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems"


There is a saying that as the development of the globalization, the world is becoming more and more smaller, meanwhile more serious problems such as conflicts between countries, trade debates, culture invasion, etc, have got worse. So it [is need改为needs]for all nations to support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.

First, the globalization makes the communication and interaction betweens countries more easily and problems more complex, which can not be settled easily by one country. In the past, as the limit of technology, the contacts between countries are very rare and there is no need to concern other country's problems. However, it is inevitable that the benefit of one country is related to others now[是不是接着上面的problem来写负面的会好点呢？]. The interaction between each country's cultures lessens the concept of nation which is caused by the advanced technology. The world's problems emerging now are more complex, which are common and related many countries' profits. For instance, the conflict between Israel and Palestinian has continued for many years. Until now, considering the profits of America and other countries, it is not a simple problem which can be [delt，是dealt么？] with the only effort of these two countries. What's more, as the implement of reform and open policy, especially after entering into the WTO, China has faced many serious problems, such as trade conflicts with other countries, environment deterioration, tradition culture loss, etc. Only by cooperating with international societies, can these issues be settled easily. [感觉很多的重复，增加句式的变换和同义替换会好些]      

Second, the students from the global university have many proficiencies to solve these world's problems. The global university has the advantage to supply a platform for the students to be familiar with the international issues. They can master many countries' language and the character of their culture, which are indispensable tools to solve the world's problems. You can imagine the embarrass condition when one international official who knows nothing about Iraq are appointed to deal with the issues there. What's more, with the support of all nations the university can easily supply a simulated international society for the students to be familiar with and to practise handling the world's problems. [可以多几个列举]
   
Admittedly, just by one country, some problems can be settled at last, but the costs of them are very high. Considering the rapid development of China, it is sure that the effective method to treat SARS can be gained sooner or later. However, this must be done with the effort of many intelligent specialists. So the cost will be incalculable. If taking the advice and cooperating with specialists from other countries especially from developed countries like America, Japan, Germany, this problem can be handled economically.[可以多列举几个方面。另外，全文都是赞成的观点，是不是说一下全球大学也有一些不好实施的地方会更客观呢]

In conclusion, with regard to the complexity and extensiveness of the world's problems, a global university has the advantage to supply effective methods to solve them. So all nations should contribute to this world's strategy which relates to their own benefits.   

非常不好意思，由于没有及时找到你的文章，白天没有时间修改你的文章，到现在才修改。
我比较水，虽然我很努力的在修改，但仍然没有楼上的分析的那么透彻，那么一针见血，请原谅。