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作文If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.1.想change污染问题2.reason 污染影响健康3.reason 经济利益4.reason 环境破坏5.让步,很多其他方便需要改变。总结。As(with) the society developed in our hometown in the latest decades, a great mass of problems occurs, such as population, medical treatment and education. But judging from my own experience, nothing is more crucial than to deal with the pollution problems.You cannot emphasize the importance of the pollution problems to our health too much. As everyone who lived (live) in my hometown knows, pollution damaged their health tremendously. Let's see some instance: the pollution of air makes old people and child catch cough, seriously become to pneumonia; the pollution of water and soil translate the delicious vegetables into prison(poisonous), so that people who eaten it will have stomach aches; what's more, people who always drink the polluted water may get hematonosis.例子很具体,不错 All of these facts can point out that pollution harms our healthy seriously and we must take step to tighten up pollution.The second reason for me to change the pollution problem in our hometown is that this problem has great influence to(on) the economy. There is no doubt that economy is the centre of development, it links with person's life level tightly. So pollution, which can make pigs and cows get sick, or keep the tourist out of our hometown, or let government pay a lot of money for tackle the problem, can deeply affect the economy of one area. This is also why I want to change it in my hometown.If the consideration about the healthy of human-beings and the economy is the product of practical pragmatism, the destruction of environment by pollution can be more far-reaching and have greater impact than the healthy and economy problems. The last but not least reason for me to change pollution is that pollution well?? damages our environment. On no account can we ignore the importance of environment, it affords us the air, the water, the earth, and everything we need to survive. Without environment, the whole human life will have no base. So we should spare no effort好短语 to protect our environment.感觉这一段和之前意思的有点重叠,可以提出新例子或具体一点Maybe someone will say, the education, the corruption and lots of things should also be changed. Of cause these things are also essential, but these are just not so closely related to the future of human beings. So we should get into the habit of controlling pollution, and do our utmost to achieve our goal in it. That is the reason why I want to change the situation of pollution.整体不错啊,lz太谦虚了。我每次也要写一个小时。汗。。。。例子和理由适当,语言也很清晰,但感觉句式可以多变一些,连接自然一些。才开始写嘛,大家一起进步,加油!口语
A foreign visitor has only one day to spend in your country. Where should this visitor go on that day? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Well, judging from own experience, personally, I'd rather like to suggest this foreigner to visit our hometown, the grassland in Inner Mongolia at spring.The most essential reason I give this suggestion is that the grassland in our hometown has very attractive view. The sky is blue, grass is green, and a lot of purple flowers blossom at that time.What's more, there's also many delicious food in the grassland. For example, roast-mutton, mile-tea, cheese, and so on. That’s yummy.At last, the person can also meet some beautiful grassland girls or boys. Maybe he or she will become the visitors’ bf or gf.
理由例子都不错,要使感觉太长了,可以把前面那些I give this suggestion等的去掉或缩减一些,还是不要影响例子充分的表达。 |
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