argument38 [0710G-summer小组]第四次作业 by name05

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argument38 [0710G-summer小组]第四次作业 by name05

TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."

提纲：
1、吃鱼与人们去医院少没有直接联系，可能气候或其他原因导致人们不感冒。并不是所有感冒的人都去医院；
2、即使有联系，适用于东部的方法也不一定就适用于西部；
3、即使吃鱼可以预防感冒，那Ichehaid也不一定能达到同样效果，他们是不同的东西；
4、即使上面提到的所有情况都已解决，那也不能把感冒和出勤率联系起来。

In this memo, the arguer recommend that the use of Ichehaid derived from fish oil would heal colds, the very reasons that responsible for the absenteeism. To support his recommendation, he cites a report which suggests that there is a relationship between the fewer colds of people and the higher consumption of fish in East Meria. He also assumes that colds are the most reason for the absence of school and work. At first glance, it suffers from several vulnerable logical flaws, not to mention more reflection.

The first problem with the argument is that it unfairly assumes that highly consumption of fish is the reason of fewer visit to doctor. On the one hand, we should consider whether the fewer colds are the result of warm and little changing of climate all year or not in the East. On the other hand, not all people who catch colds visit doctor; and what’s more, people visit doctor does not means they catches colds so fewer, because many people chose to stay at home to having a rest and take some pills when catch colds. Without these data, the author can not convince me that the study is credible to reveal a relationship between fish eating and fewer colds.

Even assuming the relationship does exists, whether the same strategy could be applied to the West is still a question. There might be variety of differences between the two areas, such as environment, climate, living habits and so forth, making the analogy highly suspected.

Even assuming eating fish can avoid catching colds, however, it is improperly to say that daily use of Ichthaid could cure colds as effective as fish eating, because no evidence was provided in this memo. Though eating fish could cure colds, it dose mean the fish oil has the same function and even could not guarantee the same effect of some components of fish oil as Ichthaid. For the reason is that it is an abstractive process from fish to fish oil and to Ichthaid, which we still don’t know if all components remains in Ichthaid. Thus this statement is unwarranted.

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out that even if all the factors mentioned above are solved, the author could still not say that reduce the chance of catching cold would undoubtedly reduce the absenteeism. Because he provides no evidence of how many people’s absenteeism are the results of colds, perhaps colds are only excuses of avoiding going to school as we all know.

In sum, the author’s analysis and advocations are insufficient. To make this memo more convincing, he should provide more information with regard to if fish eating dose could cure colds in the East; if environment, climate and people’s living habits are the same in both East and West of Meria; and, moreover, the function of Ichthaid.

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In this memo, the arguer recommend that the use of Ichehaid derived from fish oil would heal colds, the very reasons that responsible for the absenteeism. To support his recommendation, he cites a report which suggests that there is a relationship between the fewer colds of people and the higher consumption of fish in East Meria. He also assumes that colds are the most reason for the absence of school and work(注意主谓一致). At first glance, it suffers from several vulnerable logical flaws, not to mention more reflection(不好意思，我刚开始写argu也不太清楚，你确定reflection用得合适吗？或者这是特定表达？).

The first problem with the argument is that it unfairly assumes that highly(不可用副词) consumption of fish is the reason of fewer visit to doctor. On the one hand, we should consider whether the fewer colds are the result of warm and little changing of climate all year or not in the East(后半句需展开). On the other hand, not all people who catch colds visit doctor; and what’s more, people visit doctor does not means they seldom catch colds , because many people chose to stay at home to have a rest and take some pills when catch colds. Without these data, the author can not convince me that the study is credible to reveal a relationship between fish eating and fewer colds.

Even assuming the relationship does exists, whether the same strategy could be applied to the West is still a question. There might be a variety of differences between the two areas, such as environment, climate, living habits and so forth, making the analogy highly suspected.

Even assuming eating fish can avoid catching colds, however, it is improperly to say that daily use of Ichthaid could cure colds as effective as fish eating, because no evidence was provided in this memo. Though eating fish could cure colds, it dose mean the fish oil has the same function and even could not guarantee the same effect of some components of fish oil as Ichthaid. For the reason is that it is an abstractive process from fish to fish oil and to Ichthaid, which we still don’t know if all components remains in Ichthaid. Thus this statement is unwarranted.(注意avoid catching和cure意思不同)

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out that even if all the factors mentioned above are solved, the author could still not say that reduce the chance of catching cold would undoubtedly reduce the absenteeism. Because he provides no evidence of how many people’s absenteeism are the results of colds, perhaps colds are only excuses of avoiding going to school as we all know.

In sum, the author’s analysis and advocations are insufficient. To make this memo more convincing, he should provide more information with regard to if fish eating dose could cure colds in the East; if environment, climate and people’s living habits are the same in both East and West of Meria; and, moreover, the function of Ichthaid.
逻辑不错，重点都在，注意一下组织语言就好了

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In this memo, the arguer recommend that the use ofIchehaid derived from fish oil would heal colds, the very reasons thatresponsible for the absenteeism. To support his recommendation, hecites a report which suggests that there is a relationship between thefewer colds of people and the higher consumption of fish in East Meria.He also assumes that colds are the most reason for the absence ofschool and work(同意autobots). At first glance, it suffers from severalvulnerable logical flaws, not to mention morereflection(这个用法太特别了).

The first problem with the argument is that it unfairly assumes that highly(suspicious)consumption of fish is the reason of fewer visit to doctor. On the onehand, we should consider whether the fewer colds are the result of warmand little changing of climate all year or not in the East(需展开论证，给出weaken理由). Onthe other hand, not all people who catch colds visit doctor; and what’smore, people visit doctor does not means they seldom catch colds , because many people chose to stay at home to havea rest and take some pills when catch colds. Without these data, theauthor can not convince me that the study is credible to reveal arelationship between fish eating and fewer colds.

Even assuming the relationship does exists, whether thesame strategy could be applied to the West is still a question. Theremight be a variety of differences between thetwo areas, such as environment, climate, living habits and so forth,making the analogy highly suspected. (这段太单薄了点，需要详细展开，不要大列举）

Even assuming eating fish can avoid catching colds,however, it is improperly to say that daily use of Ichthaid could curecolds as effective as fish eating, because no evidence was provided inthis memo. Though eating fish could cure colds,it dose mean the fish oil has the same function and even could notguarantee the same effect of some components of fish oil as Ichthaid.For the reason is that it is an abstractive process from fish to fishoil and to Ichthaid, which we still don’t know if all componentsremains in Ichthaid. Thus this statement is unwarranted.(注意avoidcatching和cure意思不同)

Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out that evenif all the factors mentioned above are solved, the author could stillnot say that reduce the chance of catching cold would undoubtedlyreduce the absenteeism. Because he provides no evidence of how manypeople’s absenteeism are the results of colds, perhaps colds are onlyexcuses of avoiding going to school as we all know.（最好再详细一点）

In sum, the author’s analysis and advocations are insufficient. To makethis memo more convincing, he should provide more information withregard to if fish eating dose could cure colds in the East; ifenvironment, climate and people’s living habits are the same in bothEast and West of Meria; and, moreover, the function of Ichthaid.
逻辑错误都能找到，注意一下weaken就好了

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Issue185

提纲的三个观点都不错，展开好需要详细一点。

Is it true that scandals are usefulin calling our attention to important problems just like what thestatement suggests? I agree that in many cases scandals can reveallarger problems that are sometimes unavailable(available/useful) for public, whichbenefits to the development of politic, economic and society. However,we should not be blinded to the contributions of the greats. Moreover,what we should do is avoiding believing blindly and being care of theauthenticity of some scandals.

Admittedly, that some scandalsexpose some facts that cannot be seen in other ways for the speaker andreformers have to take responsibilities for their public affairs. Themost typical example is the Watergate scandal in which president Nixonattempts to overshadow even isolated the document from public, usinghis presidential power. But, in retrospect the scandal increase thelevel of scrutiny and accountability to which our officials are held,thereby working a significant and lasting benefit to our society. Alsotake Watergate as an example, it is because of the nation had weathered(这个词太GRE了，用expreienced吧)such a profound constitutional crisis that some constitutional billsare emended. Our society would be clear beneficiary of such reform.Another one is Enron Fails（应该叫Enron accounting fraud), the biggest business bankruptcy case inAmerica history, after which Wall Street took a series of measurementswhich aim at to protect the interests of investors and consummate theinstitution.

However, sometimes, the scandalsconfused us and overemphasize their faults rather than theircontribution fairly. Perhaps the paradigmatic modern example is the SexScandal(sexual scandal) of the former president, Bill Clinton, which risks his eightyear’s political leadership into shadow. During his presidency, hecancels the tariff wall and advocates free trade, which greatlyameliorated the trade condition. And what is more, he contributes a lotto the development internet by advocating the National InformationInfrastructure, which greatly accelerated the development of internet.All these mentioned are of great importance both to our nation andsociety than the undesirable scandal.

Another respectthat needs our attention is the credibility we should care of beforemaking any judgments and avoid believing blindly. Because the use ofscandal, as Machiavelli observed, is a dangerous game in that itsometime impair individual legitimate rights on which the democracy andliberty are based, thus, in turn, damage the entire society as well asour nation.(没有具体的例子和分析有点薄弱）

In conclusion,though the importance of scandals to either restrains these in power orbusiness behavior should be emphasized, we still should not be confusedby scandals and overlook the great contribution of celebrities.Moreover, we consider the authenticity of it in order to guarantee nopeople or entities is hurt.