Argument140 【0710G-小猪快跑小组】第3次作业 By Shalonbas

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ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at ElmCityUniversity.

"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave ElmCityUniversity for another college."

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The author of this argument suggests that Prof. Thomas deserve a salary raise along with the promotion to Department Chairperson. To support his conclusion, he claims that Prof. Thomas has demonstrated her teaching and research abilities, and fears that she will leave the university without such promotion. In my opinion, this argument has three logical flaws as below.

First of all, the reason for Prof. Thomas' promotion to Department Chairperson is groundless.  Though the author attempts to testify that Prof. Thomas is a good professor, he seems to ignore the fact that the duty of a Department Chairperson is not the same as an ordinary professor. To be a director of the department, Prof. Thomas has to demonstrate two kinds of capabilities. On one hand, in the academic respect, she must be among the top researchers of her area, which enables her to know not only some concrete ongoing projects but the trend of the research area. Only by understanding the current status and prospect of the area can she lead the whole department to the right direction. On the other hand, in the social respect, she must have excellent skills of communication, collaboration, and organization, with which she can make sure that the department is efficient and effective. Therefore, without providing such evidences, the author is too hasty to conclude that Prof. Thomas deserves to be promoted to Department Chairperson.

Secondly, the author's suggestion is based on an unfounded assumption that Prof. Thomas will leave the university if she does not receive the salary raise and the promotion. There is no evidence to show that fame and money are the top priorities for Prof. Thomas. It is possible that the motivation of her being a professor is that she enjoys the satisfaction of sharing knowledge with students, helping young people to make progress, and realizing her ideas in the research. Consequently, it might be more effective to give more funds to her laboratory, instead of the promotion and salary raise the author suggests.

Thirdly, the assertion that Prof. Thomas is worth of the current annul salary is not convincing. The fact that her classes are the largest of the university does not necessarily lead to her popularity. It is quite possible that she is the only professor in the university who concentrates on the botany, thus all the students have to attend her class if they want to learn botany. It might be helpful for the university to do a survey among the students who have attended her class before judging her popularity. In addition, the author claims that Prof. Thomas has demonstrated her research ability because the grants she has been received exceeds her salary in the last two years. However, considering the fact that she has served as a professor for seventeen years, it is not convincing to judge her research ability only by the recent grants, because perhaps the reason for her increasing grants is not due to her research ability, but based on the growing investment of the government and foundations. Therefore, without providing more information in details, whether Prof. Thomas deserves her current salary remains a question.

In sum, the author is too hasty to conclude that Prof. Thomas deserves her current salary, without an extensive investigation or a survey. More importantly, even if Prof. Thomas is an excellent professor, it does not mean that she can also do a great job as a Department Chair, for the author ignores the difference between those two posts. And there is no evidence to show that Prof. Thomas will leave the university if she receives no raise.

尝试着限时写了一下，结果没有写完，总共花了一个小时，汗。

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The author of this argument suggests that Prof. Thomas deserve a salary raise along with（加薪和提升是并列的关系吧？with可以，但是and是不是更表并列？） the promotion to Department Chairperson. To support his conclusion, he claims that Prof. Thomas has demonstrated her teaching and research abilities, and fears that she will leave the university without such promotion. In my opinion, this argument has three logical flaws as below.

First of all, the reason for Prof. Thomas' promotion to Department Chairperson is groundless.  Though the author attempts to testify that Prof. Thomas is a good professor, he seems to ignore the fact that（从句用的很熟练了，全简单词汇但是表达无懈可击） the duty of a Department Chairperson is not the same as an ordinary professor. To be a director of the department, Prof. Thomas has to demonstrate two kinds of capabilities. On one hand, in the academic respect, she must be among the top researchers of her area, which enables her to know not only some concrete ongoing projects but the trend of the research area. Only by understanding the current status and prospect of the area can she lead the whole department to the right direction. On the other hand, in the social respect, she must have excellent skills of communication, collaboration, and organization, with which she can make sure that the department, is efficient and effective. Therefore, without providing such evidences, the author is too hasty to conclude that Prof. Thomas deserves to be promoted to Department Chairperson.

提升无理：

1： 好教授不等于能当好主任。

2： 论好主任该具备哪些能力：一方面……另一方面（占据中间大部分，非常充分）

3： 句尾总结。

Secondly, the author's suggestion is based on an unfounded assumption that Prof. Thomas will leave the university if she does not receive the salary raise and the promotion. There is no evidence to show that fame and money are the top priorities for Prof. Thomas. It is possible that the motivation of her being a professor is that she enjoys the satisfaction of sharing knowledge with students, helping young people to make progress, and realizing her ideas in the research. Consequently, it might be more effective to give more funds to her laboratory, instead of the promotion and salary raise the author suggests.（第二段没有第一段写的能说服我，理由在于我觉得最后一句话有你的主观建议了~）Thirdly, the assertion that Prof. Thomas is worth of the current annul salary is not convincing. The fact that her classes are the largest of the university does not necessarily lead to her popularity. It is quite possible that she is the only professor in the university who concentrates on the botany, thus all the students have to attend her class if they want to learn botany. It might be helpful for the university to do a survey among the students who have attended her class before judging her popularity. In addition, the author claims that Prof. Thomas has demonstrated her research ability because the grants she has been received exceeds her salary in the last two years. However, considering the fact that she has served as a professor for seventeen years, it is not convincing to judge her research ability only by the recent grants, because perhaps the reason for her increasing grants is not due to her research ability, but based on the growing investment of the government and foundations. Therefore, without providing more information in details, whether Prof. Thomas deserves her current salary remains a question.In sum, the author is too hasty to conclude that Prof. Thomas deserves her current salary, without an extensive investigation or a survey. More importantly, even if Prof. Thomas is an excellent professor, it does not mean that she can also do a great job as a Department Chair, for the author ignores the difference between those two posts. And there is no evidence to show that Prof. Thomas will leave the university if she receives no raise.

我觉得你的阿狗基本没问题了，特别开头结尾，真是用心写的。很多人都说开头结尾不会占很重比分的，所以不如背个简单模板吧，到时候万一时间不够，保证完整也很重要呀

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