issue88 [0710G 戴三个表冲刺小组] 第2次作业

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   ISSUE88
   "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
    提纲：
    1.同意技术对社会习惯和和道德规范的影响，但反对其决定作用的说法。
    2.科学技术对社会习惯的影响，科技进步影响各个方面，社会习惯和道德规范也受到影
    响。 影响社会习惯例子：Postcard改用email，Mobile phone short message in holidays. 生动丰富，快捷，便宜。 影响道德规范例子:human clone,    internet  对传统的道德规范形成冲击，其约束力减弱,网络为人们说谎提供了方便 ,在网上没有人知道和你说话的是条狗。
    3.但技术并不是决定作用。
    前面的同样的技术对不同地方的道德产生了同样的挑战，但并没有形成同样的社会习惯 和道德规范。
    技术并不能一定影响。还有其他更重要的影响因素。如文化，历史，地理，气候，很难说哪个使决定性的，但技术不是决定性的。
    4.In sum。
   
The speaker asserted that technologies determine the social customs and ethics rather than only influence them. I concede that the influence of technologies is obvious. However it is only one factor among many others such as culture, history and climate and so forth, it is rarely a straightforward issue to simply draw the conclusion that it is technology that plays the decisive role.

Admittedly, the influence of technologies on social customs is so obvious that you need look no father than the things at hand. We no longer send postcard or letters to our friends and relative in holidays as our parents used to do. The email serves as a nice substitute for the letter. Furthermore, it is faster, more convenient, cheaper and provide more vivid content than the traditional letter. Besides email, the mobile phone short message also present a good way to send regards to friends, and it is even more convenient than email. Actually, the most recent twenties years has seen a great development in technology which influence nearly all the aspects of our life. Apart from the social customs, the traditional ethics is challenged by it. The most typical example immediately coming to mind is human clone which has sparked a hot debate around the world since the very first day when the technology of clone was declared. And another one is the ethics of real world is failed to work well in the virtual world which derived from the internet thanks to the great development of information technology. People find it is easer to lie in the digital world where all the members using anonymous name There are even a popular saying: “On the internet no one know if he is talking with a dog." In short, the development of technology forced us to mend and perfect our social customs and ethics.

However, I don't agree with the assertion that technology determines the social customs and ethics simply because of its influence. The same technology exert the same effect upon the different social customs and ethics, as in the example of human clone and internet on traditional ethics referred before, which the problems trouble nearly all the nations with different social customs and ethics, but we cannot easily say that the same technology result in the same social customs and ethics, which is obviously contradict with the facts that different country have different social customs though they are using the same technology.

Then we consider the influence of other factors. Fist, since the formation of a county's social customs and ethics is a long process, closely related to the economy development and social development, thus the contribution of history should not be ignored. We can always find the origin of the customs from the nation's history. Chinese eating rice dumpling on May 5th of lunar calendar is to memorize a great poet named Quyuan who lived nearly two thousands years ago. Second, the cultures of different nations render them different social customs. The customs of many Asian countries which customs are greatly influenced by the traditional Chinese culture and make them far different from the one of European countries which customs are influenced by the Western culture. Third, the effect of climate should also be considered. The residents of cold area and the ones who living in the hot area are highly likely to have the different customs in very detail respects though they living in one country and share the same history. Besides these factors, the religion, geography and other factors can always influence one nation's social customs and ethics greatly, they are more significant than technology in some circumstance.

In sum, technology's influence on social customs and ethics should never be ignored, especially now when the technology is playing a pivotal role in every field of our life, but it can not determine the customs and ethics.


[ 本帖最后由 pinuo 于 2007-7-27 19:36 编辑 ]

nifeiUID: 2340954

应该由我来改的对吧？

  ISSUE88
   "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
    提纲：
    1.同意技术对社会习惯和和道德规范的影响，但反对其决定作用的说法。
    2.科学技术对社会习惯的影响，科技进步影响各个方面，社会习惯和道德规范也受到影
    响。 影响社会习惯例子：Postcard改用email，Mobile phone short message in holidays. 生动丰富，快捷，便宜。 影响道德规范例子:human clone,    internet  对传统的道德规范形成冲击，其约束力减弱,网络为人们说谎提供了方便 ,在网上没有人知道和你说话的是条狗。
    3.但技术并不是决定作用。
    前面的同样的技术对不同地方的道德产生了同样的挑战，但并没有形成同样的社会习惯 和道德规范。
    技术并不能一定影响。还有其他更重要的影响因素。如文化，历史，地理，气候，很难说哪个使决定性的，但技术不是决定性的。
    4.In sum。
   
The speaker asserted thattechnologies determine the social customs and ethics rather than onlyinfluence them. I concede that the influence of technologies isobvious. However it is only one factor among many others such asculture, history and climate and so forth, 这里是不是要加个连词啊and 什么的？两个分句不能用逗号了事啊it is rarely astraightforward issue to simply draw the conclusion that it istechnology that plays the decisive role.

Admittedly, the influenceof technologies on social customs is so obvious that you need look nofather than the things at hand. 学习：）We no longer send postcard(s) or lettersto our friends and relative(s) in holidays as our parents used to do. Theemail serves as a nice substitute for the letter. Furthermore, it isfaster, more convenient, cheaper (要是我写的话我就把后面两个比较级换个位置，从音节上和字数上都从短到长)and provide(s) more vivid content thanthe traditional letter. Besides email, the mobile phone short messagealso present(s) a good way to send regards to friends, and it is even moreconvenient than email. Actually, the most recent twenties years hasseen a great development in technology which influence nearly all theaspects of our life. Apart from the social customs, the traditionalethics is challenged by it. The most typical example immediately comingto mind is human clone which has sparked a hot debate around the worldsince the very first day when the technology of clone was declared. Andanother one is the ethics of real world is failed to work well in thevirtual world which derived from the internet thanks to the greatdevelopment of information technology. (这句话有两个作为动词的is，不知道哪个是谓语动词，我认为红色的那个is failed 应该改成which fail)People find it is easer(easier?) to liein the digital world where all the members using(use 或者 are using) anonymous name(s). Thereare even a popular saying: “On the internet no one know if he istalking with a dog."(Internet这个例子好像不太支持你后面这句话里的perfect and mend哦，这个例子里面除了easier都没有什么正面描述，好像后面说这是正面影响也可以，负面也可以的？) In short, the development of technology forced usto mend and perfect our social customs and ethics.

However, I don't agree withthe assertion that technology determines the social customs and ethicssimply because of its influence. The same technology exert the sameeffect upon the(the去掉) different social customs and ethics,(相同的科技对不同的习惯和观念会产生相同的影响，真的是这样吗？) as in the example(s)of human clone and internet(大写，所有因特网都大写) on traditional ethics referred before,which the problems trouble (trouble的宾语是谁呢？如果是nations的话前面的which 就不知道是从句中的什么成分了，如果是which的话后面的nations又不知道是什么成分了，头痛ing...我理解的，which 指的是traditional ethics 对吧)nearly all the nations with different socialcustoms and ethics, but we cannot easily say that the same technologyresult in the same social customs and ethics, which is obviouslycontradict with the facts that different country(复数) have different socialcustoms though they are using the same technology.

Then we consider theinfluence of other factors. Fist(First), since the formation of a county'ssocial customs and ethics is a long process, closely related to theeconomy development and social development, thus the contribution ofhistory should not be ignored. We can always find the origin of thecustoms from the nation's history. Chinese eating rice dumpling on May5th of lunar calendar is to memorize a great poet named Quyuan(Qu Yuan) wholived nearly two thousands years ago. Second, the cultures of differentnations render them different social customs. The customs of many Asiancountries which(whose) customs are greatly influenced by the traditionalChinese culture and make them far different from the one of Europeancountries which(whose) customs are influenced by the Western culture. Third,the effect of climate should also be considered. The residents of coldarea and the ones who living(把who去掉，或者who are living) in the hot area are highly likely to havethe different customs in very detail respects though they living(live) in onecountry and share the same history. Besides these factors, thereligion, geography and other factors can always influence one nation'ssocial customs and ethics greatly,(要加一个连词) they are more significant thantechnology in some circumstance.

In sum, technology'sinfluence on social customs and ethics should never be ignored,especially now when the technology is playing a pivotal role in everyfield of our life, but it can not determine the customs and ethics.

还有几点 ：
1.题目说的是technologies, 作者通篇用的都是technology, 不知道好不好。
2.我觉得作者的词汇还是挺丰富的，有好多说法没有见过所以去google搜了一下，发现作者是对的，这样的表达我都收藏了，但是没有标出来。
3.我真的觉得lz的单三和复数用的挺随便的。。。
4.which 那几个从句，我的从句学的乱七八糟的，只有很可怜的一点从句知识，我觉得lz用的有问题，不过也说不定是我的问题，这个期待高人的到来哦。。
5.逻辑很清晰啊，观点明确，这一点向你学习啊，呵呵。

总体感觉还好，虽然我写的不好，我还是觉得lz的文章有可以改进的地方。

nifeiUID: 2340954

应该由我来改的对吧？

  ISSUE88
   "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
    提纲：
    1.同意技术对社会习惯和和道德规范的影响，但反对其决定作用的说法。
    2.科学技术对社会习惯的影响，科技进步影响各个方面，社会习惯和道德规范也受到影
    响。 影响社会习惯例子：Postcard改用email，Mobile phone short message in holidays. 生动丰富，快捷，便宜。 影响道德规范例子:human clone,    internet  对传统的道德规范形成冲击，其约束力减弱,网络为人们说谎提供了方便 ,在网上没有人知道和你说话的是条狗。
    3.但技术并不是决定作用。
    前面的同样的技术对不同地方的道德产生了同样的挑战，但并没有形成同样的社会习惯 和道德规范。
    技术并不能一定影响。还有其他更重要的影响因素。如文化，历史，地理，气候，很难说哪个使决定性的，但技术不是决定性的。
    4.In sum。
   
The speaker asserted thattechnologies determine the social customs and ethics rather than onlyinfluence them. I concede that the influence of technologies isobvious. However it is only one factor among many others such asculture, history and climate and so forth, 这里是不是要加个连词啊and 什么的？两个分句不能用逗号了事啊it is rarely astraightforward issue to simply draw the conclusion that it istechnology that plays the decisive role.

Admittedly, the influenceof technologies on social customs is so obvious that you need look nofather than the things at hand. 学习：）We no longer send postcard(s) or lettersto our friends and relative(s) in holidays as our parents used to do. Theemail serves as a nice substitute for the letter. Furthermore, it isfaster, more convenient, cheaper (要是我写的话我就把后面两个比较级换个位置，从音节上和字数上都从短到长)and provide(s) more vivid content thanthe traditional letter. Besides email, the mobile phone short messagealso present(s) a good way to send regards to friends, and it is even moreconvenient than email. Actually, the most recent twenties years hasseen a great development in technology which influence nearly all theaspects of our life. Apart from the social customs, the traditionalethics is challenged by it. The most typical example immediately comingto mind is human clone which has sparked a hot debate around the worldsince the very first day when the technology of clone was declared. Andanother one is the ethics of real world is failed to work well in thevirtual world which derived from the internet thanks to the greatdevelopment of information technology. (这句话有两个作为动词的is，不知道哪个是谓语动词，我认为红色的那个is failed 应该改成which fail)People find it is easer(easier?) to liein the digital world where all the members using(use 或者 are using) anonymous name(s). Thereare even a popular saying: “On the internet no one know if he istalking with a dog."(Internet这个例子好像不太支持你后面这句话里的perfect and mend哦，这个例子里面除了easier都没有什么正面描述，好像后面说这是正面影响也可以，负面也可以的？) In short, the development of technology forced usto mend and perfect our social customs and ethics.

However, I don't agree withthe assertion that technology determines the social customs and ethicssimply because of its influence. The same technology exert the sameeffect upon the(the去掉) different social customs and ethics,(相同的科技对不同的习惯和观念会产生相同的影响，真的是这样吗？) as in the example(s)of human clone and internet(大写，所有因特网都大写) on traditional ethics referred before,which the problems trouble (trouble的宾语是谁呢？如果是nations的话前面的which 就不知道是从句中的什么成分了，如果是which的话后面的nations又不知道是什么成分了，头痛ing...我理解的，which 指的是traditional ethics 对吧)nearly all the nations with different socialcustoms and ethics, but we cannot easily say that the same technologyresult in the same social customs and ethics, which is obviouslycontradict with the facts that different country(复数) have different socialcustoms though they are using the same technology.

Then we consider theinfluence of other factors. Fist(First), since the formation of a county'ssocial customs and ethics is a long process, closely related to theeconomy development and social development, thus the contribution ofhistory should not be ignored. We can always find the origin of thecustoms from the nation's history. Chinese eating rice dumpling on May5th of lunar calendar is to memorize a great poet named Quyuan(Qu Yuan) wholived nearly two thousands years ago. Second, the cultures of differentnations render them different social customs. The customs of many Asiancountries which(whose) customs are greatly influenced by the traditionalChinese culture and make them far different from the one of Europeancountries which(whose) customs are influenced by the Western culture. Third,the effect of climate should also be considered. The residents of coldarea and the ones who living(把who去掉，或者who are living) in the hot area are highly likely to havethe different customs in very detail respects though they living(live) in onecountry and share the same history. Besides these factors, thereligion, geography and other factors can always influence one nation'ssocial customs and ethics greatly,(要加一个连词) they are more significant thantechnology in some circumstance.

In sum, technology'sinfluence on social customs and ethics should never be ignored,especially now when the technology is playing a pivotal role in everyfield of our life, but it can not determine the customs and ethics.

还有几点 ：
1.题目说的是technologies, 作者通篇用的都是technology, 不知道好不好。
2.我觉得作者的词汇还是挺丰富的，有好多说法没有见过所以去google搜了一下，发现作者是对的，这样的表达我都收藏了，但是没有标出来。
3.我真的觉得lz的单三和复数用的挺随便的。。。
4.which 那几个从句，我的从句学的乱七八糟的，只有很可怜的一点从句知识，我觉得lz用的有问题，不过也说不定是我的问题，这个期待高人的到来哦。。
5.逻辑很清晰啊，观点明确，这一点向你学习啊，呵呵。

总体感觉还好，虽然我写的不好，我还是觉得lz的文章有可以改进的地方。

pinuoUID: 2328081

太谢谢nifei 的批改！指导性的意见先采纳了，尤其是3.和4.，谢谢，我会注意的，太信手了，从来没有注意过。文中的修改我后面改进来。

pinuoUID: 2328081

改了一下，主要是拼写错和结尾仓促，加了中国妇女裹脚的例子。

1.同意技术对社会习惯和和道德规范的影响，但反对其决定作用的说法。
    2.科学技术对社会习惯的影响，科技进步影响各个方面，社会习惯和道德规范也受到影
    响。
影响社会习惯现代的例子：Postcard改用email，Mobile phone short message in holidays. 生动丰富，快捷，便宜。
     技术影响习惯古代的例子。20th century, the industrialization which derived from Western nations, influenced the way of Chinese women’s life. Traditionally they are required to strap their feet up to make their feet as small as possible, thus it will be less convenient for them to leave their house to do some work rather than just be a housekeeper. It’s is the newly emerged work opportunities which resulted from the industrialization that present them a chance to deserve this negative custom, which actually serve as restraint on women’s feet as well as there freedom.
影响道德规范例子:human clone,    internet  对传统的道德规范形成冲击，其约束力减弱,网络为人们说谎提供了方便
在网上没有人知道你是条狗。

    3.但技术并不是决定作用。
    前面的同样的技术对不同地方的道德产生了同样的挑战，但并没有形成同样的社会习惯
    和道德规范。
    技术并不能一定影响。还有其他更重要的影响因素。
    如文化，历史，地理，气候，很难说哪个使决定性的，但技术不是决定性的。

The speaker asserted that technologies determine the social customs and ethics rather than only influence them. I concede that the influence of technologies is obvious. However it is only one factor among many others such as culture, history and climate and so forth, which combined to influence the social customs and ethics. And it is rarely a straightforward issue to simply draw the conclusion that it is technology that plays the decisive role.

Admittedly, the influence of technologies on social customs is so obvious that you need look no father than the things at hand. We no longer send postcard or letters to our friends and relative in holidays as our parents used to do. The email serves as a effective substitute for the letter because it is faster, cheaper, more convenient, and provide more vivid content than the traditional letter. Besides email, the mobile phone short message also present a good way to send regards to friends, and it is even more convenient than email. Actually, the most recent twenties years has seen a great development in technology which influence nearly all the aspects of our life include customs.  Perhaps the paradigmatic historic example is industrialization changed Chinese women’s costume which has last for two thousand years. Traditionally the Chinese women are required to strap their feet up to make their feet as small as possible, thus it will be less convenient for them to leave their house to do some work rather than just be a housekeeper. In 20th century, the industrialization which derived from Western nations thanks to the great development in technology influenced the way of Chinese people’s life. It’s is the newly emerged work opportunities which resulted from the industrialization that present them a chance to deserve this negative custom, which actually serve as restraint on women’s feet as well as there freedom. The two examples from history and current world both illustrated the social customs dramatically.

Apart from the social customs, the traditional ethics is challenged by it. The most typical example immediately coming to mind is human clone which has sparked a hot debate around the world since the very first day when the experiment was declared successfully conducted. And another one is the ethics of real world is failed to work well in the virtual world which derived from the internet thanks to the great development of information technology. People find it is easer to lie in the digital world where all the members using anonymous name There are even a popular saying: “On the internet no one know if he is talking with a dog." In short, the development of technology forced us to mend and perfect our social customs and ethics.

Nevertheless, it is too hasty to generalize that technology determines the social customs and ethics simply because of its influence. The same technology exert the same effect upon the different social customs and ethics, as in the example of human clone and internet on traditional ethics referred before, which the problems trouble nearly all the nations with different social customs and ethics, but we cannot easily say that the same technology result in the same social customs and ethics, which is obviously contradict with the facts that different country have different social customs though they are using the same technology.

Then we consider the influence of other factors. Fist, since the formation of a county's social customs and ethics is a long process, closely related to the economy development and social development, thus the contribution of history should not be ignored. We can always find the origin of the customs from the nation's history. Chinese eating rice dumpling on May 5th of lunar calendar is to memorize a great poet of nearly two thousands years ago, named Quyuan, who was respected by the people because of his poem and mostly his loyalty to the nation. Second, the cultures of different nations make them different social customs. The customs of many Asian countries which customs are greatly influenced by the traditional Chinese culture and make them far different from the one of European countries which customs are influenced by the Western culture. Third, the effect of climate should also be considered. The residents of cold area and the ones who living in the hot area are highly likely to have the different customs in very detail respects though they living in one country and share the same history. Besides these factors, the religion, geography and other factors can always influence one nation's social customs and ethics greatly, and they are more significant than technology in some circumstance.

In sum, technology's influence on social customs and ethics should never be ignored, especially in the current world in which the technology is playing a pivotal role in every field of our life, but it can not determine the customs and ethics. There are other factors – rather than technology—such as history, culture, climate, geography and the like, which contribute to the change of customs and ethics along with technology.