argument38 勇往直前12th作业bynbta03

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38The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."


In the memo, the arguer recommends the everyday use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, in order to stay away from colds and reduce absenteeism. At first glance the argument seems to be somehow appealing, while a careful examination would reveals that it suffers from several critical flaws.

In the first, the argument provides insufficient evidences to conclude that eating sufficient fish can prevent colds. The East Meria people's rare visiting doctor maybe is not the result of  eating a lot of fish. It is likely that people there take exercise frequently and lead a healthy life. They have a healthy diet with variety of nutrition, which could more likely keep them away from doctors. It is different between healthy body and rare seeing doctors. It is possible that people who get a cold have pills or just have a rest at home rather than go to see a doctor. Thus, the argument can not simply asserts that high fish consumption will leads to low occurrence  of cold without more evidences.

In the second, even if the eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds, which is , of course, an unwarranted assumption, it does not follow that the Ichthaid will do the same work as the fish. Ichthaid is a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, which does not equal to fish. Maybe the useful materials are lost during the process of extraction and then the Ichthaid would not perform as well as fish. The arguer would have to take such relevant factors into account or the conclusion would appeals misleading.

Finally, the arguer assumes that colds are the main reason for absenteeism without any evidence or data. Though people may be absent from school or work for cold, it is possible that emergent affairs or sudden accidents or even another kind of sickness will explain the same situation. Furthermore, some people even use colds as an excuse to be absent from their study or work. Without acquainting the real cause, it is unwise to attribute the main absence reason to colds.

In sum, the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the argument does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence to show that eating more fish will prevents colds. To better evaluate the argument, we need more information about the main reason for absence from school and work.

[ 本帖最后由 nbta03 于 2007-8-1 12:27 编辑 ]

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In the memo, the arguer recommends the everyday use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, in order to stay away from colds and reduce absenteeism. At first glance the argument seems to be somehow appealing, while a careful examination would reveals that it suffers from several critical flaws.

In the first, the argument provides insufficient evidences to conclude that eating sufficient fish can prevent colds. The East Meria people's rare visiting doctor maybe is not the result of  eating a lot of fish. It is likely that people there take exercise frequently and lead a healthy life. They have a healthy diet with variety of nutrition, which could more likely keep them away from doctors. It is different between healthy body and rare seeing doctors. It is possible that people who get a cold have pills or just have a rest at home rather than go to see a doctor. Thus, the argument can not simply asserts that high fish consumption will leads to low occurrence  of cold without more evidences.

In the second, even if the eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds, which is , of course, an unwarranted assumption,(这个，你的态度是啥子，which 后面的就不要了吧) it does not follow that the Ichthaid will do the same work as the fish（你这句感觉指代的不太明晰）. Ichthaid is a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, which does not equal to fish. Maybe the useful materials are lost during the process of extraction and then the Ichthaid would not perform as well as fish. （关键是凭什么证明鱼油的这玩意也可以防感冒，部分带整体）The arguer would have to take such relevant factors into account or the conclusion would appeals misleading.

Finally, the arguer assumes that colds are the main reason for absenteeism without any evidence or data. Though people may be absent from school or work for cold, it is possible that emergent affairs or sudden accidents or even another kind of sickness will explain the same situation. Furthermore, some people even use colds as an excuse to be absent from their study or work. Without acquainting the real cause, it is unwise to attribute the main absence reason to colds.

In sum, the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the argument does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence to show that eating more fish will prevents colds. To better evaluate the argument, we need more information about the main reason for absence from school and work.

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PudingUID：2364107

In the memo, the arguer recommends the everyday use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, in order to stay away from colds and reduce absenteeism. At first glance the argument seems to be somehow appealing, while a careful examination would reveals that it suffers from several critical flaws.

In the first, the argument provides insufficient evidences to conclude that eating sufficient fish can prevent colds. The East Meria people's rare visiting doctor maybe is not the result of  eating a lot of fish. It is likely that people there take exercise frequently and lead a healthy life. (要再加个连接词)They have a healthy diet with variety of nutrition, which could more likely keep them away from doctors. It is different between healthy body and rare seeing doctors. It is possible that people who get a cold have pills or just have a rest at home rather than go to see a doctor. Thus, the argument can not simply asserts that high fish consumption will leads to low occurrence  of cold without more evidences.

In the second, even if the eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds, which is , of course, an unwarranted assumption,(这个，你的态度是啥子，which 后面的就不要了吧) it does not follow that the Ichthaid will do the same work as the fish（你这句感觉指代的不太明晰）. Ichthaid is a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, which does not equal to fish. Maybe the useful materials are lost during the process of extraction and then the Ichthaid would not perform as well as fish. （关键是凭什么证明鱼油的这玩意也可以防感冒，部分带整体）The arguer would have to take such relevant factors into account or the conclusion would appeals misleading.应该这样写：首先质疑是不是和鱼油有关，即便和鱼油有关，也不一定和那玩意有关。

Finally, the arguer assumes that colds are the main reason for absenteeism without any evidence or data. Though people may be absent from school or work for cold, it is possible that emergent affairs or sudden accidents or even another kind of sickness will explain the same situation. Furthermore, some people even use colds as an excuse to be absent from their study or work. Without acquainting the real cause, it is unwise to attribute the main absence reason to colds.感冒不是唯一原因

In sum, the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the argument does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence to show that eating more fish will prevents colds. To better evaluate the argument, we need more information about the main reason for absence from school and work.

其他的还好