issue51 [SPRING小组] 第1次作业

luckimonkeyUID: 2408088

Topic:  issue-51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student”
WORD:557  TIME: 上午 07：30  DATE ：2007-10-23

  I disagree with the assertion because the writer ignores the fact that the goal of education is to not only facilitate the students with expertise of their future careers but also with the ability to tell the right from the wrong, distinguish truth from falsehood and cooperate with others.
  Education purely designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student tends to lead us to the dilemma that many students are well equipped with professional knowledge but could not survive in the society where many essential skills are needed just as I mentioned before. There used to be some excellent scientistsworking hard on their experiments and researches but failed to publish their discovries for lacking the essential skills to express ideas clearly and logically .Perhaps that is why the ETS adds the analytical writing to GRE Test and testify every student taking the exam despite of their different majors. So feeding the students with the knowledge and skills they are interested in can only be effective on the ground of the master of indispensable essential knowledge and skills.
  Moreover, we all know that an infant is not born with some particular interest; they develop a specific one after receiving an all-rounded but relatively simple education. For children at this age, it is ridiculous to give them the education covering their specific interests or needs. What the education should cover is some commonsense and basic skills which help them to know more about the wonderful world, communicate with others, build up some good habits and develop an interest benefiting both themselves and the society. Even for students in middle school or high school, who have obtained essential knowledge and ready to embark on the further study of expertise, education should still cover some life-long skills like cooperation as long as knowledge designed on the interests or needs.
    From all the discussion above, we can conclude that education only designed on individual needs and interests is not a feasible nor effective way to adopt. So is there a better way of education? The most famous teacher Confuse, living in the ancient china about 2000 years ago, had given us a clue for that. One of Confuse’s students, who was brave but petulant, asked him: “Whenever I come up with an idea should I put it into practice immediately?”  “No, you should ask your father and elder brothers for advice and think it over and over again before implement,” answered Confuse.  Another student who was modest and discreet but always reluctant to make a decision asked the same question.  “Yes, you should put it into practice right away,” Confuse answered. Different answers were given on the same question for different students,  Confuse provided different solutions to help his students develop a reasonable decision-making process based on their unique characters rather than blindly offering the relative knowledge about what they was about to do. The concept of education based on character is more comprehensive and effective than that designed for needs or interests. It sets higher requirements for teachers to look into individual students’ characters and then come up with unique solution to guide the students to find out what they are lack to survive or succeed in the society.

[ 本帖最后由 luckimonkey 于 2007-10-26 22:13 编辑 ]

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:) 22#Issue51 修改
　　I disagree with the assertion because the writer ignores the fact that the goal of education is to not onlyfacilitate the students with expertise of their future careers but also with the ability to tell the right from the wrong, distinguish truth from falsehood and cooperate with others.      Education purely designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student tends to lead us to the dilemma that many students are well equipped with professional knowledge but could not survive in the society where many essential skills are needed just as I mentioned before. There used to be some excellent scientists working hard on their experiments and researches but failed to publish their discoveries for lacking the essential skills to express ideas clearly and logically .（此处如果给出一个具体的实例会更有说服力，哪个杰出的科学家）Perhaps that is why the ETS adds the analytical writing to GRE Test and testify every student taking the exam despite of their different majors. So feeding the students with the knowledge and skills they are interested in can only be effective on the ground of（on the ground of是指”以…为理由”,可以用on the premise of 表示”以…为前提”）the master of indispensable essential knowledge and skills.      Moreover, we all know that an infant is not born with some particular interests; they develop a specific one after receiving an all-rounded but relatively simple education.(这个观点不错) For children at this age, it is ridiculous to give them the education covering their specific interests or needs. What the education should cover is some commonsense and basic skills which help them to know more about the wonderful world, communicate with others, build up some good habits and develop an interest benefiting both themselves and the society. Even for students in middle school or high school, who have obtained essential knowledge and ready to embark on the further study of expertise, education should still cover some life-long skills like cooperation as long as knowledge designed on the interests or needs.    From all the discussion above, we can conclude that education only designed on individual needs and interests is not a feasible nor effective way to adopt. So is there a better way of education? The most famous teacher Confuse（孔夫子应该是Confucius）, living in the ancient China about 2000 years ago, had given us a clue for that. One of Confucius’s students, who was brave but petulant, asked him: “Whenever I come up with an idea should I put it into practice immediately?”  “No, you should ask your father and elder brothers for advice and think it over and over again before implement,” answered Confucius.  Another student who was modest and discreet but always reluctant to make a decision asked the same question.  “Yes, you should put it into practice right away,” Confucius answered. Different answers were given on the same question for different students, Confucius provided different solutions to help his students develop a reasonable decision-making process based on their unique characters rather than blindly offering the relative knowledge about what they was about to do.（这段孔夫子的例证我个人挺喜欢的，用在中文写作里绝对好，只是不知道老外怎么想。。我在群里发问了，看看大家怎么说吧） The concept of education based on character is more comprehensive and effective than that designed for needs or interests. It sets higher requirements for teachers to look into individual students’ characters and then come up with unique solution to guide the students to find out what they are lack to survive or succeed in the society.

小结：

结构：首段态度明确(反对)，二三段具体阐述反对的理由,非常好! 最后一段提出独到的见解—-基于学生性格差异的教育更有效,这一段有点仓促,例证也不够多。另外最后最好有一段对全文的总结。
语言：整篇文章表达清晰，从你长句的组织与表达可以看出你的语言功底不错，再接再厉
逻辑：你的中文写作底子应该很好，很有前途，建议再多看看北美范文。
由于本人水平有限，只能给与这些修改，请多多包涵。本人最近在看北美范文，所以自己的模仿痕迹比较重，很欣赏你有独到的见解，希望可以多多交流，我们可以互补，希望可以既有比较native的思维，又有属于自己的思考！~
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[ 本帖最后由 gloriaguo1986 于 2007-10-28 10:41 编辑 ]