issue51 Spring-第１次作业

林周孟UID: 2341714

issu51
“Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.”
Words:544   Times:2 hours
      I agree with the speaker that education will be effective if it can be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.However,I disagree with the speaker that Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.I believe that we should always notice the harmful interests of students for society and what is the overall goal of education.In short ,I think the speaker’s claim cann’t be realized.
To begin with,I concede that education will be truly effective if it can be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students.As we know,we youth feel like doing something that we are interested with no matter whether it is allowed by moralith and ethic of society.However,we are lazy,sometimes even hatred, with something that contradicts our needs and interests.Thus,perhaps we will learn more positively and education may be more effective if we students can learn the subjects that cater to our interests and needs,which requires that education should be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
However, we should notice that some needs and interests of students may be harmful for society.in my view,every individual has needs and interests of his or her own which may be beneficial or baleful for society,sometimes even contradict with moralith and ethic of society.Take drinking and smoking of youth,for example, in contemporary society the number of students who participate in ,or addict to, drinking and smoking increase so rapidly that almost every parent,educator and officer become confused when it comes to this problem.Thus,can educator designs a specific subject that allows and even encourage students to drink and smoke due to the interests of drinking and smoking of students,which obviously not only impede the progress of education but also destroy the stability of society.If this is the case,the educational system may become nonsensical.
In addition,the goal of education is to cultivate knowledgabe and competent person who can make contribution to the society in the future.Take into account that some of the students’interests may disaccord with the goal of education,thus,a healthy educational system should help students construct healthy interests that suit the progress of society and get rid of unhealthy interests which impede the development of society,rather than be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student which may be harmful.
Moreover ,perhaps the speaker’s claim can never be realized.For the sake that interests of students are various and the number of interests may be numerous while the educational resource is limited.If education is designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student,perhaps we can only meet the interests of  the minority of the students.And then,what about the other majority?Do we ignore the overall goal of education?Do the society allows us to do so.
To sum up, I think it is impossible to design education to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. However,I believe in some extent educators should design subjects based on the majority interests and needs of students in order to enhance the quality of education.And educators should design educational system that can help students build healthy interests and get rid of unhealthy interests for the purpose of developing knowledgabe and competent person.

lifeng_913UID: 2397925

issue51 Spring-第１次作业

issu51“Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.”Words:544   Times:2 hours      I agree with the speaker that education will be effective if it can be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. However, I disagree with the speaker that Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. (不应该在首段就提出论据和分论点，概述即可I believe that we should always notice the harmful interests of students for society and what is the overall goal of education.In short ,I think the speaker’s claim cannot be realized.)（首段的方式可以不用however，直接说generally agree with the speaker即可，然后在后面的段落中提出反对意见，这是部分赞同的方法）从第2段可以看出，你是完全否定作者的说法，那么直接在开头就可以说不很赞同就可以了。To begin with,I concede that education will be truly effective if it can be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students.As we know,we youth feel like doing something that we are interested in with no matter whether it is allowed by moralith and ethic of society(帽子扣的有点大，年轻人的兴趣和社会道德关系并不是那么密切，可以直接说whether it is helpful就可以了).However,(不是转折关系不要用however)we are lazy,sometimes even hatred, with something that contradicts our needs and interests.Thus,perhaps we will learn more positively and education may be more effective if we students can learn the subjects that cater to our interests and needs,which requires that education should be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.Moreover, we should notice that some needs and interests of students may be harmful for society.(和上一段谈的是一个问题，都是whether the interests are suitable,可以合并为一个段落)in my view,each individual has needs and interests of his or her own which may be beneficial or baleful for society,sometimes even contradict with moralith and ethic of society.（重复）Take drinking and smoking of youth,for example, in contemporary society the number of students who participate in ,or addict to, drinking and smoking increase so rapidly that almost every parent,educator and officer become confused when it comes to this problem.Thus,can educator designs a specific subject that allows and even encourage students to drink and smoke due to the interests of drinking and smoking of students,which obviously not only impede the progress of education but also destroy the stability of society.If this is the case,the educational system may become nonsensical.（smoking&drinking are not interests,are bad habits,且与教育无关，因为教育显然是不能引导学生酗酒、吸烟的）In addition,the goal of education is to cultivate knowledgable and competent person who can make contribution to the society in the future.(感觉给教育下的定义不够准确，有些狭隘，可能在阅卷中会被扣分)Take into account that some of the students’ interests may disaccord with the goal of education,thus,a healthy educational system should help students construct healthy interests that suit the progress of society and get rid of unhealthy interests which impede the development of society,rather than be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student which may be harmful.（有些空泛，感觉适当的举个例子能起到较好的效果，前后有些不一致，前面说的是教育目标，后面变成教育体系的探讨，且在段首句没有明确的指出要谈论的问题，建议在in addition后面写上While before concluding that the education system mentioned above is the only effective one, we should know that how we should define the effectivity of education?也就是引出关于教育的“efficacy”的探讨。）Finally ,perhaps(the word “perhaps” use too many times that would make the issue seems to be unconvincing.) the speaker’s claim can never(never用的不是很好，可以用hardly,也可以说the speaker’s claim is a far more complicated issue)be realized.For the sake that interests of students are various and the number of interests may be numerous while the educational resource is limited.If education is designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student,perhaps we can only meet the interests of  the minority of the students.And then,what about the other majority?Do we ignore the overall goal of education?Do the society allows us to do so.To sum up, I think it is impossible to design education to meet the individual needs and interests of each student. However（！又用）,I believe in some extent educators should design subjects based on the majority interests and needs of students in order to enhance the quality of education.And educators should design educational system that can help students build healthy interests and get rid of unhealthy interests for the purpose of developing knowledgabe and competent person.

觉得稍微有点跑题，ISSUE翻译过来应该是“教育只有在考虑到每个学生的兴趣和需要时才真正有效”，而你在头几个段落中主要在谈与兴趣有关的内容，其实兴趣本身并不是很重要的，作为一个直线论据提一下即可，而并不是关于这条教育路线的论述。

通读了你的这篇ＩＳＳＵＥ以后，感觉你好象没有理解题目的意思，建议重新看一下关于这篇文章的讲解吧，而且你的开头用的是部分赞同部分否定，而结尾却完全否定，这显然是不能呼应的，在论述过程中存在差异概念的问题，而且个人认为关于此ＩＳＳＵＥ更适宜写成部分肯定的形式，因为合理的“考虑学生的兴趣和需求”是好的。这个我也是第１次改作文，很多地方都不太会弄，且是一家之言。姑且算是他山之石，可以攻玉吧！


ＰＳ：我的作文修改在哪里啊？怎么还没看到啊。。。。。

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