Issue38 spring-第二次作业

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Issue38: In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.

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麻烦各位好心的同学狂拍啦！！很久没写作文啦，自己都觉得惨不忍睹，:funk:

It is admitted that there are more and more excellent TV programs of various kinds to watch from what people can learn as much as reading books. Would reading books become less important than it before just for the reason that we can study from television as well? Maybe not. Reading books is still one of main ways to gain knowledge and as important as it once was.

The television programs cover almost all fields of one's life and even the outer space, what provide people a comprehensive horizon just like books. Take National Geographic for an example what has versions of both television program and magazines which two has nearly uniform quantity of information. The television has not only characterizations, photograph just like books have, has sound which is hardly provided by books as well. In the level, television programs are some kind as equal as books or even better. Reading books, therefore, is a little less attractive for what some people may prefer watching television to reading books. When reading become a alternate choice instead of the only way before, it is not unreasonable that its importance is reduced.

In fact, though people can learn as much by television as they can by reading books, reading still has many advantages that watching television lacks of, for what reason it is importance just like it was.

Firstly, books are books that if a person has, he can read it and gain the knowledge. But what if a person would like to watch television? There must be at least a television set, supply of electricity and signal. So what if the person is in Africa? He may does not have enough food , no mention of television set and so on. They still should have the right to study, in what condition reading is more or less a best and viable choice.

Secondly, television programs are mostly made by television stations which are commercial organizations and intend to obtain profit, which decides that they are in a popular style but hardly be in a professional and profound one that would difficultly be received by the general. When one would like to study get some information about a academic subject, such as archeology, astronomy and so on, watching television is not so advisable in fact.

In addition, books are available to people almost any time when they would like to read, because  they are portable. When people are in open space, such as be blocked in the heavy traffic, be waiting somebody, on the plane and so on, in what condition television can hardly be taken advantage of.

To sum up, under many circumstances, reading books is still of importance as before. Though people can learn by watching television, books can difficultly be taken place of and be of importance just like the old days before in many conditions.

[ 本帖最后由 mcdoby 于 2007-11-1 23:36 编辑 ]

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It is admitted that thereare more and more excellent TV programs of various kinds to watch fromwhat people can learn as much as reading books（第一句读起来感觉不是很通顺，建议用两个句子来表达）. Would reading booksbecome less important than it before just for the reason that（for the reason that 建议换为 because ）we canstudy from television as well? Maybe not. Reading books is still one ofmain ways to gain knowledge and as important as it once was.

The television programs cover almost allfields of one's（one's 似乎多余了） life and even the outer space, what provide people acomprehensive horizon just like books. Take National Geographic for anexample what has versions of both television program and magazineswhich two has nearly uniform quantity of information. （National Geographic,which  has the same version in television program and magazine, that provide nearly uniform quantity of information is a notable example.）The televisionhas not only characterizations, photograph just like books have（have改为get，这样显得不重复）, （but掉了）hassound which is hardly provided by books as well. In the（this） level,television programs are some kind as equal as books or even better.（这句这样写好像有些问题，但是我不知道怎么改）Reading books, therefore, is a little less attractive for what somepeople may prefer watching television to reading books. When readingbecome a（an） alternate choice instead of the only way before, it is notunreasonable that its importance is reduced（its importance has be weakened）.

In fact, though people can learn as muchby(from) television as they can by reading books, reading still has many advantages that watching(稍显累赘，宜去掉) television lacks of, for what reason（for 与 what reason重复了） it isimportance just like it was.

Firstly, books are books that if a personhas, he can read it and gain the knowledge. But what if a person wouldlike to watch television? There must be at least a television set,supplyof （supply  of换为which need表达更清晰）electricity and signal. So what if the person is in Africa?He may does not have enough food , no mention of television set and soon. They still should  have the right to study, in what conditionreading is more or less a best and viable choice.

Secondly, television programs are mostlymade by television stations which are commercial organizations（organizations这个词太大了，建议换为 enterprises） andintend to obtain profit, which decides that they are in a popular stylebut hardly be in a professional and profound one that would difficultlybe received by the general. When one would like to study（study多余了） get someinformation about a academic subject, such as archeology, astronomy andso on, watching television is not so（an） advisable in fact.

In addition, books are available to peoplealmost any time when they would like to read, because  they areportable. When people are in  open space, such as be blocked in theheavy traffic（traffic jam）, be waiting somebody,（or） on the plane and so on, in whatcondition（where） television can hardly be taken advantage of（useful）.

To sum up, under many circumstances,reading books is still of importance as before. Though people can learnby watching television, books can difficultly be taken place of （books can easy be carried）and beof（be of 宜换为keep） importance just like the old days（s去掉） before（before去掉） in many conditions.

就内容而言，应该尝试多从其他的角度攻击，那个国家地理的例子举得非常好:loveliness:，但是没有深入论述。不过，firstly and In addition 这两段所写的内容好像差不多，可以考虑换个角度来写~

我的水平也十分有限，改的不知道对不对
建议楼主多用短语与简单句，尽量少用定从套定从的句型~~
另外，楼主如果有时间的话，可以仔细分析一下范文的写作~



[ 本帖最后由 bralant 于 2007-11-2 22:19 编辑 ]