ARGUMENT99 [5f 11-28]求砖

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ARGUMENT99 - 限时失败……
The following appeared in a memo from the economic minister of the small country Paucia.

"Using a newly developed variety of seed, farmers in our neighboring country Abundia produced 80 percent more rice last year than in any previous year. To increase the income of farmers in our own country, we should encourage them to cultivate this new variety of rice rather than some of their traditional crops. Such high yields of rice will also improve our country's balance of trade by enabling us to begin exporting it."


In the memo, the economic minister of Paucia recommends that the farmers should cultivate a new variety of rice instead of the traditional one, which is supported by the successful practice of the neighboring country. And the minister continues to predict that the harvest of rice will enhance importation and improve the balance of trade. However, via careful review of the reasoning procedure, I cast doubt on the validity of the recommendation.

To begin with, the minister fails to take other possible factors leading to the high yield of rice in Abundia into consideration. Entirely possible is that last year witnessed a boom of the population of the farmers in Abundia thus the increase in manpower rather than the improvement of the seeds contributed greater to the amount of products. Besides, the advanced applications, recently synthesized insecticide or the development agricultural management pattern may play vital role in the output of rice cultivation as well. Moreover, the climatic factors including the sufficient rainfall, suitable length of daytime and declines of insects population could act as interrupting factors that affect the assess of the quality of the new variety of seeds. Perhaps the weather conditions of last year happened to fit the rice growth while the new variety actually arouses equal or even less amount of products than the traditional one. Therefore, without ruling out the series of confusing factors, the author could hardly convince me of the quality of the seed.

Furthermore, it is unlikely for Paucia to replicate the success of Abundia due to a series of dissimilarities between the two countries. Firstly, the climatic conditions of the two countries may differ remarkably, resulting in contradicting outcomes of cultivating the same variety of seed. For instance, it is highly possible that Paucia locates in landlocked area with little rainfall yearly favorable for the traditional crops while Abundia sits along the sea whose wet winds bring about abundant rain essential to the growth of rice. Secondly, the two countries might distinguish with each other in the soils. Possibly, the new variety of seed fits the quality of soil of Abundia while the soil of Paucia might be suitable for the traditional crops. For that matter, change to cultivate rice instead of traditional crops may be counterproductive to enhance the agriculture of Paucia. In a word, the difference between the two countries diminishes the soundness of the assumption that the new variety of rice could prosper in the Paucia as it did in Abundia.

Finally, the increase in rice production could hardly result in the inception of exportation and improvement in trade balance. One the one hand, the percentages of agricultural products, or rice, concretely, in the trade has been left out of consideration thus high yield of rice could contribute little to the increase of trade with comparatively minor proportion. On the other hand, the exportation could be determined by the balance between the supply and demand. Even if Paucia manage to multiply the rice production, the low demand in the international market may inhibit the increase in exportation as well.

In sum, the recommendation of the economic minister seems unsound to me due to a series of flaws in the reasoning. To bolster the recommendation, the minister should at a minimum ensure that the new variety of seed can prevail in Pausia and could even arouse more promising outcomes than the traditional crops. And further investigation into the trade and market should be performed before prediction on the exportation and the trade balance.

兰子UID: 2404184

ARGUMENT99 - 限时失败……
The following appeared in a memo from the economic minister of the small country Paucia.

"Using a newly developed variety of seed, farmers in our neighboring country Abundia produced 80 percent more rice last year than in any previous year. To increase the income of farmers in our own country, we should encourage them to cultivate this new variety of rice rather than some of their traditional crops. Such high yields of rice will also improve our country's balance of trade by enabling us to begin exporting it."


In the memo, the economic minister of Paucia recommends that the farmers should cultivate a new variety of rice instead of the traditional one, which is supported by the successful practice of the neighboring country. And the minister continues to predict that the harvest of rice will enhance importation and improve the balance of trade. However, via careful review of the reasoning procedure, I cast doubt on the validity of the recommendation.

To begin with, the minister fails to take other possible factors leading to the high yield of rice in Abundia into consideration. Entirely possible is that last year witnessed a boom of the population of the farmers in Abundia thus the increase in manpower rather than the improvement of the seeds contributed greater to the amount of products.(个人意见,我觉得这个原因找得不是很好,不能说劳动力有所增加就会带来作物产量的上升!) Besides, the advanced applications, recently synthesized insecticide or the development agricultural management pattern may play vital role in the output of rice cultivation as well. Moreover, the climatic factors including the sufficient rainfall, suitable length of daytime and declines of insects population could act as interrupting factors that affect the assess of the quality of the new variety of seeds. Perhaps the weather conditions of last year happened to fit the rice growth while the new variety actually arouses equal or even less amount of products than the traditional one. Therefore, without ruling out the series of confusing factors, the author could hardly convince me of the quality of the seed.

Furthermore, it is unlikely for Paucia to replicate the success of Abundia due to a series of dissimilarities between the two countries. Firstly, the climatic conditions of the two countries may differ remarkably, resulting in contradicting outcomes of cultivating the same variety of seed. For instance, it is highly possible that Paucia locates in landlocked area with little rainfall yearly favorable for the traditional crops while Abundia sits along the sea whose wet winds bring about abundant rain essential to the growth of rice. Secondly, the two countries might distinguish with each other in the soils. Possibly, the new variety of seed fits the quality of soil of Abundia while the soil of Paucia might be suitable for the traditional crops. For that matter, change to cultivate rice instead of traditional crops may be counterproductive to enhance the agriculture of Paucia. In a word, the difference between the two countries diminishes the soundness of the assumption that the new variety of rice could prosper in the Paucia as it did in Abundia.

Finally, the increase in rice production could hardly result in the inception of exportation and improvement in trade balance. One the one hand, the percentages of agricultural products, or rice, concretely, in the trade has been left out of consideration thus high yield of rice could contribute little to the increase of trade with comparatively minor proportion. On the other hand, the exportation could be determined by the balance between the supply and demand. Even if Paucia manage to multiply the rice production, the low demand in the international market may inhibit the increase in exportation as well.

In sum, the recommendation of the economic minister seems unsound to me due to a series of flaws in the reasoning. To bolster the recommendation, the minister should at a minimum ensure that the new variety of seed can prevail in Pausia and could even arouse more promising outcomes than the traditional crops. And further investigation into the trade and market should be performed before prediction on the exportation and the trade balance.

我觉得写得很好了,因为能用上变化丰富的词语和句式!
但有一点疑惑的是,作文里一些起承转合的句子感觉都是在范文里见过的,如果将这些句子用在作文里的话,应该不算是论坛前辈们所说的抄袭吧!