argument140[Jet小组]第十二次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.

"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."
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The report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University said that they should raise Professor Thomas 's annual salary for two reasons which are her popularity among students and her brilliant teaching and research abilities or she might leave for another college. However, it is full of logical flaws and far from being convincing and persuasive during the process of making the decision.

Firstly, no accurate evidences are provided by the author which could demonstrating Professor Thomas's popularity among students and the only evidence is that her classes are among the largest at the university, which cannot prove her popularity. It is possible that student choose Professor Thomas's classes just because she is so-call kind, especially in giving good scores to most students. Also, perhaps her classes are among those basic classes that students of different majors are ordered to choose. Thus, the amount of students taking her classes is not an adequate evidence to show her popularity.

Secondly, according to the report, Professor Thomas has bought money to the university in research grants, the amount of which has exceed her salary in each of the last two years, which demonstrating her teaching and research abilities, however, the process of demonstration itself lacks logical connections. We cannot believe the statistical materials of single two years since it is possible that Professor Thomas has no contribution in bringing money to the university in research grants years before last two years and it is just because of good luck for last two years. Moreover, it has no business with the abilities of Professor Thomas's teaching and research work.

Furthermore, assuming that Professor Thomas is a extraordinary teacher and researcher, no further evidences are provided to show that she would leave Elm City University for another college without such a raise to her annual salary of $50,000 and promotion. It is possible that Professor Thomas works contently at Elm City University and she is satisfied with her annual salary now. Moreover, assuming that she also wants a raise of her annual salary, there is no accurate measure of whether the raise to $50,000 annually is enough for Professor Thomas to stay.

In sum, the report is full of logical flaws and has no use of solving the problem of Professor Thomas's annual salary. In order to figure out her popularity among students as well as her teaching and research abilities, some further survey among students and peer faculty are required. Also, we can judge her research ability from the achievements she gained in her career such as papers on core journals etc..

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The report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University said that they should raise Professor Thomas 's annual salary for two reasons which are her popularity among students and her brilliant teaching and research abilities or she might leave for another college.--popularity应该是用来说明他的taching ability,而后面的担心他会离开和abilities是并列的 感觉这句有点混乱 However, it is full of logical flaws and far from being convincing and persuasive during the process of making the decision.
Firstly, no accurate evidences are provided by the author which could demonstrating--去掉 Professor Thomas's popularity among students and the这里可以断句在起一句了 only evidence is that her classes are among the largest at the university, which cannot prove her popularity. It is possible that student choose Professor Thomas's classes just because she is so-called kind, especially in giving good scores to most students. Also, perhaps her classes are among those basic classes that students of different majors are ordered to choose. Thus, the amount of students taking her classes is not an adequate evidence to show her popularity.--应该再继续推到teaching ability上
Secondly, according to the report, Professor Thomas has bought money to the university in research grants, the amount of which has exceed her salary in each of the last two years, which demonstrating her teaching and research abilities, however, the process of demonstration itself lacks logical connections. We cannot believe the statistical materials of single two years since it is possible that Professor Thomas has no contribution in bringing money to the university in research grants years before last two years and it is just because of good luck for last two years. Moreover, it has no business with the abilities of Professor Thomas's teaching and research work.

Furthermore, 可以加上 even assuming that Professor Thomas is a extraordinary teacher and researcher, no further evidences are provided to show that she would leave Elm City University for another college without such a raise to her annual salary of $50,000 and promotion. It is possible that Professor Thomas works contently at Elm City University and she is satisfied with her annual salary now. Moreover, assuming that she also wants a raise of her annual salary, there is no accurate measure of whether the raise to $50,000 annually is enough for Professor Thomas to stay.

In sum, the report is full of logical flaws and has no use of solving the problem of Professor Thomas's annual salary. 跟第一段一样的 感觉有些重复 In order to figure out her popularity among students as well as her teaching and research abilities, some further survey among students and peer faculty are required. Also, we can judge her research ability from the achievements she gained in her career such as papers on core journals etc..这里可以另成一段。结尾段有些空洞~

觉得有些省题不清所以逻辑上有个别漏洞
语言的表达需要再加强一些~

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