"为我所用"小组第四次作业argument51

usayaUID: 2374023

TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appearedin a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected thatsecondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severemuscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of astudy of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treatedfor muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sportsmedicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Theirrecuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected.Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a generalphysician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they weretaking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantlyreduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would bewell advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
WORDS:           TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2008-3-26 21:21:09

To begin with, to support therecommendation, the author supposed that patients suffered from muscle strainmay be kept from healing quickly because of the secondary infections. However,the author overlooks the sufficient correlation between the secondary infectionand muscle strain. Perhaps the secondaryinfection might not occur to the light musclestrain injuries. Or perhaps patients those who had completelyrecovered from the muscle strain would not be infected any more. In short,without considering these, the base of theassumption is problemable.

The argument also assumes unfairly that theresults of thetwo groups ofpatients can be strongly proved the favorable effect of antibiotics that the author provides no evidence to substantiatethat all conditions potentially affecting theresults remains homogeneity in the two groups. First, the author provides nodetailed data of patients. It is entirely possible that the first grouppatients are younger and healthier than the second group, which lead to longerrecovery time. Secondly, the two groups are treated by two different doctors:Dr. Newland who is specialized in sports medicine while Dr. Alton is a generalphysician. We cannot ignore the possibility that the first group patientsrecovery in shorter time might be due to the reason that Dr. Newland is moreskilled in muscle strain than Dr. Alton. Without ruling out these potentiallyaffecting factors, the author misleads me to understandthe study.

Even assuming that the study can truly represent that the antibiotics do indeed effecton secondary infection, the author concludes too hastily that all patients whoare diagnosed with muscle strain should be taken antibiotics. It is obvious thatthe antibiotics can cause some side effects, particular in allergy. Thereforethe author cannot justifiably rely on theeffectiveness on some patients to draw such a conclusion from a part.


因为这两天我时间上比较紧迫,所以只写了当中的,头尾两段来不及写了额

flair1031UID: 2314987

Doctors have long suspected thatsecondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severemuscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of astudy of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treatedfor muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sportsmedicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Theirrecuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected.Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a generalphysician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they weretaking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantlyreduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would bewell advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
WORDS:           TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2008-3-26 21:21:09

To begin with, to support the recommendation, the author supposed that patients suffered from muscle strainmay be kept from healing quickly because of the secondary infections. However,the author overlooks the sufficient correlation between the secondary infection and muscle strain. Perhaps the secondary infection might not occur to the light musclestrain injuries. Or perhaps patients those who had completely recovered from the muscle strain would not be infected any more. In short,without considering these, the base of theassumption is problemable.

The argument also assumes unfairly that the results of the two groups of patients can be strongly proved the favorable effect of antibiotics that the author provides no evidence to substantiate that all conditions potentially affecting theresults remains homogeneity in the two groups. First, the author provides no detailed data of patients. It is entirely possible that the first grouppatients are younger and healthier than the second group, which lead to longer recovery time. Secondly, the two groups are treated by two different doctors:Dr. Newland who is specialized in sports medicine while Dr. Alton is a generalphysician. We cannot ignore the possibility that the first group patientsrecovery in shorter time might be due to the reason that Dr. Newland is moreskilled in muscle strain than Dr. Alton. Without ruling out these potentiallyaffecting factors, the author misleads me to understandthe study.

Even assuming that the study can truly represent that the antibiotics do indeed effecton secondary infection, the author concludes too hastily that all patients whoare diagnosed with muscle strain should be taken antibiotics. It is obvious thatthe antibiotics can cause some side effects, particular in allergy. Thereforethe author cannot justifiably rely on theeffectiveness on some patients to draw such a conclusion from a part.

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条理清晰，逻辑合理
不过语言可以再丰富些
顺带一提，很多地方空格没打，看着不方便

bitdxcUID: 2465290

To begin with, to support the recommendation, the author supposed that patients suffered from muscle strain may be kept from healing quickly because of the secondary infections. However, the author overlooks the sufficient correlation between the secondary infection and muscle strain. Perhaps the secondary infection might not occur to the light muscle strain injuries. Or perhaps patients those who had completely recovered from the muscle strain would not be infected any more. In short, without considering these (possibilities), the base of the assumption is problematic.

The argument also assumes unfairly that the results of the two groups of patients can be strongly proved the favorable effect of antibiotics that the author provides no evidence to substantiate that all conditions potentially affecting the results remains homogeneity in the two groups. First, the author provides no detailed data of patients. It is entirely possible that the first group patients are younger and healthier than (that in)the second group, which lead to longer recovery time. Secondly, the two groups are treated by two different doctors. Newland who is specialized in sports medicine while Dr. Alton is a general physician. We cannot ignore the possibility that the first group patients recovery in shorter time might be due to the reason that Dr. Newland is more skilled in muscle strain than Dr. Alton. Without ruling out these potentially affecting factors, the author misleads me to understand the study.

Even assuming that the study can truly represent that the antibiotics do indeed effect on secondary infection, the author concludes too hastily that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain should be taken antibiotics. It is obvious that the antibiotics can cause some side effects, particular in allergy. Therefore the author cannot justifiably rely on the effectiveness on some patients to draw such a (插入general) conclusion from a part.


评价：
很不错，如果丰富一下句式会更好。

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