issue221 April作文互助小组第二周作业

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221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."（42）
结论肤浅且片面
1、        暂且赞同历史可以纠正我们那个错误想法：举例感情是本能不会随历史而改变
2、        但是历史除此之外还可以让历史中的不同和相同作为我们行为的指导
1)        相同：感情可以指导人工智能领域的发展；使不同国家的人交流更容易
2)        不同：选举中注意群众需求上的变化才可以取胜

People who lack of history knowledge could probably suppose people in different period are significantly different. I concede, as the speaker asserts, that they will abandon such an illusion after the study of history and else, if careful enough they will realize that contemporary people actually share much in common with their ancestors. However, this claim is superficial and one-sided for the chief benefit of the study of history is far to this: we get not only excitement about the similarities but also the short-cut and tips which avoid mistakes and tremendous disaster after we identify the similarities and differences.

Admittedly, through the earnest study of history, it is not difficult to find that we derived many respects from our ancestors. One needs look no further than some basic and higher cognitive emotion, such as joy, anger, fear and love. It is history that inform us emotion is innate in any time. For instance, today we are happy with the taste of win as any general in the past like triumph in the battle. Alike, romantic love, which once was regarded as a big difference between contemporary and past human being by famous writer c.s.lewis, proved to have been expressed in a book over predating the medieval poetry a thousand years. Another respect can involve some culture which have formed since a long time ago. Such as we give the respect to the elder people. So, history really provide great evidence to indicate we are not totally different from our ancestors.

However, the significance of study of history can hardly be concluded in a few word as the speaker asserts. The more important thing is that it might be beneficial to appreciate the unchanging and changing traits of humankind because history just function as a veteran who can guide us to develop and succeed.

On the one hand, we can infer some theory based on some constant characters human own and further apply the theory to the science research or socialization with the others. For instance, as I refer to, humankind have innate and universal emotion which is not influenced by any other changes such as in culture, space and time range. Given such a theory, the research in artificial intelligence can make further progress, and the communication between people from different race and country become easy through the facial expression even without a word.

On the other hand, it is equally beneficial to realize the differences between people from different time period. A simple evidence is the lecture and debate of the candidates during the election. Only one who realize the different needs of the populace now comparing with the past can obtain the most supports from the people and get final victory. While one who can not figure out the chang of people’s minds will suffer the attacks from the opponents.

In sum, by studying history, our illusion about great significant difference exist between people from different period will be corrected. However, such a simple influence can not be defined as the chief benefit of the study of history. Because history lead us to think profoundly more than the superficial fact of the existing of similarities and differences.

[ 本帖最后由 rita_moyo 于 2008-3-28 00:16 编辑 ]

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People who lack of history knowledge could probably suppose people in different period are significantly different. I concede, as the speaker asserts, that they will abandon such an illusion after the study of history and else, if careful enough they will realize that contemporary people actually share much in common with their ancestors. However, this claim is superficial and one-sided for the chief benefit of the study of history is far to this: we get not only excitement about the similarities but also the short-cut and tips which avoid mistakes and tremendous disaster after we identify the similarities and differences.

Admittedly, through the earnest study of history, it is not difficult to find that we derived many respects from our ancestors. One needs look no further than some basic and higher cognitive emotion, such as joy, anger, fear and love. It is history that informs us emotion is innate in any time. For instance, today we are happy with the taste of win as any general in the past like triumph in the battle. Alike, romantic love, which once was regarded as a big difference between contemporary and past human being by famous writer c.s.lewis, proved to have been expressed in a book over predating the medieval poetry a thousand years. Another respect can involve some culture which have[has] formed since a long time ago. Such as we give the respect to the elder people.[such as 不能单独引导一个句子吧？] So, history really provides great evidence to indicate we are not totally different from our ancestors.

However, the significance of study of history can hardly be concluded in a few words as the speaker asserts. The more important thing is that it might be beneficial to appreciate the unchanging and changing traits of humankind because history just function as a veteran who can guide us to develop and succeed.

On the one hand, we can infer some theory based on some constant characters human own and further apply the theory to the science research or socialization with the others. For instance, as I refer to, humankind have[has] innate and universal emotion which is not influenced by any other changes such as in culture, space and time range. Given such a theory, the research in artificial intelligence can make further progress, and the communication between people from different race and country become easy through the facial expression even without a word.

On the other hand, it is equally beneficial to realize the differences between people from different time period. A simple evidence is the lecture and debate of the candidates during the election. Only one who realizes the different needs of the populace now comparing with the past can obtain the most supports from the people and get final victory. While one who can not figure out the change of people’s minds will suffer the attacks from the opponents.

In sum, by studying history, our illusion about great significant difference exist between people from different period will be corrected. However, such a simple influence can not be defined as the chief benefit of the study of history. Because history lead us to think profoundly more than the superficial fact of the existing of similarities and differences.[because 不能单独引导一个句子吧？]

小结：

语言上，除了少数语法和拼写错误外，行文上比上次的issue50好多了，不知你是如何这么短期就提高这么多的？
不过还是建议你下次上传前用word先检查一遍语法和拼写错误；）
  
结构上，
1）首段提到we get “the short-cut and tips which avoid mistakes and tremendous disaster after we identify the similarities and differences”是更大的benefit，但
2段讲不同历史时期人们的相同之处，3-5段分别讲可从学习相同和不同中获得的益处，似乎与这个中心论点不呼应？
或许你想表达的观点是“历史告诉我们不同时期的人们相同之处更多（2段）；深入学习这些相同与不同均能受益（3-5段），而不是仅仅停留在表面，只是知道这些相同和不同”？
2）3-5段这样的结构似乎没见过。。。我比较熟悉的是：3、4段合为一段，5段保留独立
3）5段的论述似乎不够充分，如果再加一句话简单说明为什么了解变化就能获胜、相反则会失败就更好了

个人意见，仅供参考^_^



[ 本帖最后由 ruben 于 2008-3-28 17:58 编辑 ]