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deerprinceUID: 2394244

ISSUE50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required
to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
1 开头
2 可以为学生进入社会准备，教育的一个重要目的就是prepare students for society.
3 其它的advantage, 诸如毕业后更多的工作机会，更新鲜的学习环境，更深刻的了解书本的知识
4 不要太极端，balance一下
5 结论

Education has beacome more and more important all through the past centuries, people never stop making efforts to find
scientific and practical ways to improve the quality of education.Among various opinions and methods nowadays, there is one
which suggests that all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant
to the courses they teach. This suggestion is highty valued, especially effective in nowadays society, though may be too
absolute and excessive in some degrees.
The idea is practical and apreciated for that it is based on one of most important aims of the education: not to be only the
education itself but to prepare the students for the future participating in the society. Since most students step into the
society and get a definite profession instead of continuing research works in the laboratory, it's a wise dicision to ensure
them to be more adaptive and competitive for the future life.To work outside the academic world in relevant professions can
not only get the students's familiar with society from where what is most needed and what can be put into the second place
in their studying field can be determined, but also improve their expierence and ability to solve a specific problem in
practic ways. There is a lesson from one on my classmates, he really did well in the university and often got the highest
score, however he was too concerned with the knowledge in books, this concern made him reluctant to pay attention to common
field affairs, he was always thinking like this:"since i can hardle them in paper, i can in a real world also" ,with this
belief he entered a high-tech company after graduation and were surprised to see that there were so many devices he'd never
seen, on the contrary ,some other guy with normal test score but more expierence in practical courses did the job with ease.
Had he spend more time working outside the academic world, things would be much better.
There were also some other advatages of such activities, for one thing, one can learn with more interest, working in
factories or companies can bring us a new world, incite our creativity and inspiration,compired with,to stick before the
table turning over the thick book is more or less boresome. For another, one can get more opportunities and job offer after
school,since he/she contact and communicate the soiety more often. Moreover, such activities can act as a catalyst to master
our knowledge by thouching the lively examples:How theories serve for everyday life? What are flaws in some theories and how
to improve them?
On the whole,the idea is provident,but we should not go too extreme,without the support of the acdemic knowledge, we could
not understand the world precisely and thoroughly. The fundermatal of the acdemic knowledge is the basis of the further
professions, when catching up real world trains, we should not ignore the construction of rails, as one rail can run many
trains,a usefull theory can provide many practical solutions,therefore, we should not give up our acdemic learning and
indulge ourselfs in a pure practical world.
In conclusion, the work outside the academic world is highly encoraged, it can bring students practical minds and
skills,provide interactive studying atmosphere and more chances to know ,get to be known,the only thing we must pay
attention is to not go too far away from theory, acdemic knowlegde generates practical usage, and practice value helps to
improve the acdemic world, we should always make the scale balanced.

rita_moyoUID: 2274069

1 开头
2 可以为学生进入社会准备，教育的一个重要目的就是prepare students for society.
3 其它的advantage, 诸如毕业后更多的工作机会，更新鲜的学习环境，更深刻的了解书本的知识
4 不要太极端，balance一下
5 结论

Education has beacome more and more important all through the past centuries, people never stop making efforts to find
scientific and practical ways to improve the quality of education.Among various opinions and methods nowadays, （to be honest, 我觉得前面的话显得多余）there is one which suggests that all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. This suggestion is highty valued, especially（觉得这个用在这里别扭，可能是我没有见过这么用的） effective in nowadays society, though may be too absolute and excessive in some degrees.

The idea is practical and apreciated for that it is based on one of most important aims of the education（因为基于教育的目的，所以可行？）: not to be only（not only to be) the education itself (啥意思呢?)but to prepare the students for the future participating in the society. Since most students step into the society and get a definite profession instead of continuing research works in the laboratory, it's a wise dicision to ensure them to be more adaptive and competitive for the future life.To work outside the academic world(题目是讲建议老师去外面工作而不是学生哦~）in relevant professions can not only get the students's(get students familiar) familiar with  society (and) from where what is most needed and what can be put into the second place in their studying field can be determined(从意思看这个似乎是familiar with的宾语,加and), but also improve their expierence and ability to solve a specific problem in practic ways. There is a lesson from one on my classmates,(两句话中间用句号） he really did well in the university and often got the highest score, however he was too concerned with the knowledge in books, this concern（which） made him reluctant to pay attention to common field affairs,(两句话中间用句号）he was always thinking like this:"since(if) i can hardle them in paper, i can (handle them)  in a real world also(either)" ,with this belief he entered a high-tech company after graduation and were surprised to see that there were so many devices he'd never seen, on the contrary ,some other guy with normal test score but more expierence in practical courses did the job with ease.

Had he spend more time working outside the academic world, things would be much better.（？） There were also some other advatages of such activities, for one thing, one can learn with more interest, working in factories or companies can bring us a new world, incite (inciting) our creativity and inspiration,compired with,to stick before the table turning over the thick book is more or less boresome. (不懂）For another, one can get more opportunities and job offer after school,since he/she contact and communicate the soiety more often. Moreover, such activities can act as a catalyst to master our knowledge by thouching the lively examples:How theories serve for everyday life? What are flaws in some theories and how to improve them?

On the whole,(像总结）the idea is provident,but we should not go too extreme,without the support of the acdemic knowledge, we could not understand the world precisely and thoroughly. The fundermatal of the acdemic knowledge is the basis of the further
professions, when catching up real world trains, we should not ignore the construction of rails, as one rail can run many
trains,a usefull theory can provide many practical solutions,therefore, we should not give up our acdemic learning and
indulge ourselfs in a pure practical world.（举例不恰）

In conclusion, the work outside the academic world is highly encoraged, it can bring students practical minds and
skills,provide interactive studying atmosphere and more chances to know ,get to be known,the only thing we must pay
attention is to not go too far away from theory, acdemic knowlegde generates practical usage, and practice value helps to
improve the acdemic world, we should always make the scale balanced.

首先强烈建议你注意标点符号的使用。两句话要用句号或连接词。
其次十分不幸的告诉你，你又跑题了呢。。。:)
最后语重心长地建议你，检查下拼写和语法~ 有些句子显得口语化和重复化

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