Argument195 April作文小组第二周第四次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT195 - The following is a letter from an editor at Liber Publishing Company to the company's president.

"In recent years, Liber has unfortunately moved away from its original mission: to publish the works of regional small-town authors instead of those of big-city authors. Just last year, 90 percent of the novels we published were written by authors who maintain a residence in a big city. Although this change must have been intended to increase profits, it has obviously backfired, because Liber is now in serious financial trouble. The only way to address this problem is to return to our original mission. If we return to publishing only the works of regional small-town authors, our financial troubles will soon be resolved."
WORDS:456          TIME: 00:65:00          DATE: 2008-4-2 23:30:29

In the argument, the editor has drawn the conclusion that the only way to solve Liber's financial problem is to return to their original mission, which is publish the works of regional small-town authors. To support this, the editor points out that according to the last year statistic, 90 percent of the novels Liber published were written by those who live in a big city. And also, the editor states that this leads Liber to financial difficulties. However, the argument has several problems, which render unconvincing as it states.

First of all, the editor assumes unfairly that 90 percent of the novels Liber published were the works written by authors who lead a life in urban areas.  It's entirely possible that besides novels, there are other kinds of articles such as fiction, comics, news report and so forth, in Liber. Additionally, perhaps novels only account for a small portion of works in Liber, such as, only 10 percent. Obviously, from the formation that the total number of works multiply 10% and multiply90%, it's easy to figure out that  authors from a big city writing novels represent a small number of authors in Liber. What's more, the cited statistic involves only "just last year", which might be unrepresentative next several years. Thus, lacking evidence of the real problem causing financial problem is difficult to accept the conclusion that moving away from Liber's original mission leads to trouble.

Secondly, the argument assumes that publishing novels by authors in small-town will make profits and resolve financial problem. Yet, the author fails to provide evidence to support this assumption. There's the possibility that the subscribers of Liber prefer the novels written by authors in big city to novels by those in small-town. Or perhaps at the same time, another competitive publishing company appears at same time and attracts the readers with high quality and striking novels. Without considering and ruling out these and other factors that might have served to financial trouble, the editor cannot justifiably conclude that it is better to go back to the original mission.

Furthermore, even assuming that  returning to the original mission result in financial trouble, it fails to convince me that only this way can solve financial problem. Common senses in form me that if a company want to make profits, a well-running management is necessarily important. However, the argument doesn't take this and other factors into consideration.

In conclusion, the editor fails to convince me that the other reasons may cause the financial problem, such as the possibility of other competitors and a reasonable and overall statistic of the author from big city. To strengthen the argument the editor must account for all other factors that might influence the results of the returning mission.

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In the argument, the editor has drawn the conclusion that the only way to solve Liber's financial problem is to return to their original mission, which isto publish the works of regional small-town authors. To support this, the editor points out that according to the last year statistic, 90 percent of the novels Liber published were written by those who live in a big city. And also, the editor states that this leads Liber to financial difficulties. However, the argument has several problems, which render it unconvincing as it states.

First of all, the editor assumes unfairly that 90 percent of the novels Liber published were the works written by authors who lead a life in urban areas. （这是作者引用的事实，不应该说作者不公的假设，可以说the editor assumes unfairly that the sales record of novel reflects the whole record of Liber. ）It's entirely possible that besides novels, there are other kinds of articles such as fiction, comics, news report and so forth, in Liber. Additionally, perhaps novels only account for a small portion of works in Liber, such as, only 10 percent. Obviously, from the formation that the total number of works multiply 10% and multiply90%(啥意思呢?), it's easy to figure out that  authors from a big city writing novels represent a small number of authors in Liber. What's more, the cited statistic involves only "just last year", which might be unrepresentative of the next several years. Thus, lacking evidence of the real problem causing financial problem is difficult to accept the conclusion that moving away from Liber's original mission leads to trouble.(is difficult的主语是to accept...,但是现在的句子主语是lacking evidence.)


Secondly, the argument assumes that publishing novels by authors in small-town will make profits and resolve financial problem(作者结论似乎是改回原来的任务）. Yet, the author fails to provide evidence to support this assumption. There's the possibility that the subscribers of Liber prefer the novels written by authors in big city to novels by those in small-town. Or perhaps at the same time, another competitive publishing company appears at same time and attracts the readers with high quality and striking novels. Without considering and ruling out these and other factors that might have served to(inducement of) financial trouble, the editor cannot justifiably conclude that it is better to go back to the original mission.

Furthermore, even assuming that returning to the original mission result in financial trouble(说反了？), it fails to convince me that only this way can solve financial problem. Common senses inform me that if a company want to make profits, a well-running management is necessarily important. However, the argument doesn't take this and other factors into consideration.

In conclusion, the editor fails to convince me that (fails to convince me后面应该接作者认为正确的观点，后面的内容是作者缺乏的）the other reasons may cause the financial problem, such as the possibility of other competitors and a reasonable and overall statistic of the author from big city. To strengthen the argument the editor must account for all other factors that might influence the results of the returning mission.

我觉得比上一篇argu进步很多。要注意一些固定句式的用法，不如说assume/fail to convince me后面应该接作者的错误结论。红色是语法问题，绿色是建议，紫色是我要学的~