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What's socialization? Whether  how children are socialized are socialized today determines the destiny of society? How to define" a better society"? Is it true that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society? Are there  some tangible nexus between it and the socialization of children, or further, the destiny of society?
It is true that the development of children determines the destiny of society for the reasons that they are the futrue leaders of it. It is often mentioned that children are bones of our society whenever some leaders have a speech in public. Meanwhile, some idividual personages  also often refer to the fact that children is our hope of society.
However, the socialization of children is only one of the respects tht determine the development of children, and yet it may not the most important one. The fitting example of which is Martin Luther King, he was primary the result of religious upbring, which had more to do with his parent rathan than his socialization. When he was a boy, he always saw a discrimation between the while and the black, his parants often instucted that it should be equal between our human beings. At the same time, religious also told him person who are born. As his ever-growing and increasing knowlege, he approched there are sever discrimation between different nations step by step and a dream of fairness came to his mind that the while children and the black children could go to the same school and stayed the classroom and they could take a same bus. It was an impetu to push him to make progress.Finally, he became a black reader that contribute to the society.Another best example is Beethoven, whose music talent were  sprang primary by his lift-threating infirmities .Yet, desipte of  deafness and dummy he became a precedence in music history by means of his strong will to overcome the obstacle along the way, his voracious appetite for knowlege and special talents. Two examples above illustrated that sociazation was not the most important aspects that were benificial to the growing of children, other factors  operated more---in terms of sedulity,acuity,adversity and interest.
Then what is the most important, consider the item" better society" as equality, prosperity, stabilization, then we do have experienced great improvement and progress during the last decades.As we known,  technology is an enginee that serve to make the world a better and more interesting place in which to live such as emergence of computer, development of airplane.
And actually, we could not even know whether the upbringing is successful until we could perceive the result, and adequate evidence reveals that it is the case. In a logical and common sense, we  expect our children grow with all sorts of skills----playing  basketball well, excelling in playing pianio, being gooding at liberal arts, more importantly being preeminent in  mathmetical calculation.In fact, Not every child can reach this accomplish and we can only foster by our own approach. Moreover, we don't know whether this avenue is fit for our children,we also probe to go down untill he or she get a prize which shows you success in fostering a child to an extent. In the final analysis, the way of  bringing up a child is not exclusive, we should consider most aspects that influce child  to grow up.

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What's socialization? Whether  how children are socialized are socialized today determines the destiny of society?(看不明白，不知道楼主要说什么) How to define" a better society"? Is it true that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society? Are there  some tangible nexus between it and the socialization of children, or further, the destiny of society?

It is true that the development of children determines the destiny of society for the reasons that they are the futrue(future)leaders of it（that they are the future of our society 这样说好点）. It is often mentioned that children are bones of our society whenever（by）some leaders（when

they）have a speech in public. Meanwhile, some idividual (individual) personages  also often refer to the fact that children is our hope of society.

However, the socialization of children is only one of the respects tht (that) determine the development of children, and(去掉) yet it may not（be） the most important one. The fitting example of which （去掉）is Martin Luther King, he was primary the result of religious upbring（不知道楼主要表达什么意思）, which had more to do with his parent rathan (rather)than his socialization. When he was a boy, he always saw a discrimation between the while and the black, his parants(parents) often instucted (instruct)that it should be equal between our human beings. At the same time, religious（改为religion）also told him person who are born. As his ever-growing and increasing knowlege, he approched(approached) there are sever discrimation between different nations step by step and a dream of fairness came to his mind that the while (white)children and the black children could go to the same school and stayed the classroom and they could take a (the) same bus. It was an impetu (impetus) to push him to make progress. Finally, he became a black reader(leader) that contribute to the society. Another best example is Beethoven, whose music talent were  sprang primary by his lift-threating infirmities. Yet, desipte (despite)of  deafness and dummy he became a precedence in music history by means of his strong will to overcome the obstacle along the way, his voracious appetite for knowlege（knowledge） and special talents. Two examples above illustrated that sociazation（socialization）was not the most important aspects that were beneficial to the growing of children, other factors  operated more---in terms of sedulity, acuity, adversity and interest.

Then what is the most important, consider the item" better society" as equality, prosperity, stabilization, then we do have experienced great improvement and progress during the last decades. As we known,  technology is an enginee（engineer）that serve to make the world a better and more interesting place in which to live such as emergence of computer, development of airplane. （这一段还可以，可是与上面没什么关系）

And actually, we could not even know whether the upbringing is successful until we could perceive the result, and adequate evidence reveals that it is the case. In a logical and common sense, we  expect our children grow with all sorts of skills----playing  basketball well, excelling in playing pianio（piano）, being gooding（good）at liberal arts, more importantly being preeminent in  mathmetical （mathematical） calculation. In fact, Not every child can reach this accomplish and we can only foster by our own approach. Moreover, we don't know whether this avenue is fit for our children, we also probe to go down untill（until）he or she gets a prize which shows you success in fostering a child to an extent. In the final analysis, the way of  bringing up a child is not exclusive, we should consider most aspects that influce（influence） child  to grow up.

呵呵，建议楼主发帖之前用world纠错功能改改错字，错字不少！感觉楼主有点跑题了，这篇文章的主要目的是说的孩子的社会化对社会的影响，可是楼主却在说孩子的社会化对孩子发展的影响。还有，楼主文章的整体结构和语言结构都需要加强。

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