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The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. In this argument, the author concludes that in the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff, we at Pierce University should offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire. At the first glance, the author's reasoning seems to be appealing. While clearly examining the author's reasoning, we may find that it is unconvincing. The argument contains several facets that are questionable.

At the first place, the studies that conducted by Bronston College can not persuade us that the professors are happier living when their spouses are living with them together. The author just says that both male and female professors are happier living when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area, but he does not compare the two conditions about living together and not. So we do not know whether the professors like their spouses living together with them or living alone. It is possible that professors like living alone because many of them do not want to be interrupted during their research.

At the secondly place, we do not know whether offering employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire will attract the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improve the morale of our entire staff. The most gifted teachers and researchers may not put much attention to the happier living and they may take the research seriously. So they may not interest in the more developed university. Besides this, there are many other alternatives to improve the morale of our entire staff such as the salary, work and so on. In addition, we only make this measure to the new and the professors who are hired before may not satisfy with it. They may have a prejudice of the university and do not do their best in teaching. So this measure may have the opposite affect.

At the thirdly place, we can not make sure that the money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent. The author just tell us that if their spouses have a chance of employment, new professors will be more like to accept our offers, but we do not know how much money will be put in this effort. If the number is huge, this measure's value should be doubted. What's more, we do not know how the professors look the chance of employment about their spouses and they maybe do not take it into account. From above, we know the conclusion is too arbitrary.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks of credibility. Regardless of who the author is, he or she has overlooked or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the conclusion, the author should give more evidences about the above-mentioned possibilities.

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The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. In this argument, the author concludes that in the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff, we at Pierce University should offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire. At the first glance, the author's reasoning seems to be appealing. While clearly examining the author's reasoning, we may find that it is unconvincing. The argument contains several facets(facts?) that are questionable.

At(In) the first place, the studies that conducted by Bronston College can not persuade us that the professors are happier living when their spouses are living with them together. The author just says that both male and female professors are happier living when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area, but he does not compare the two conditions about living together and not. So we do not know whether the professors like their spouses living together with them or living alone. It is possible that professors like living alone because many of them do not want to be interrupted during their research.(很囧这条观点, 如果考试时候时间允许且有其他更好的观点的话这条就算了吧...)

At the secondly(adv.) place, we do not know whether offering employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire will attract the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improve the morale of our entire staff.(这个分论点我觉得有点和作者的最终总论点重合) The most gifted teachers and researchers may not put(pay?) much attention to the happier living and they may take the research seriously. So they may not interest in the more developed university. Besides this, there are many other alternatives to improve the morale of our entire staff such as the salary, work and so on. In addition, we only make this measure to the new and the professors who are hired before may not satisfy with it. They may have a prejudice of the university and do not do their best in teaching. So this measure may have the opposite affect.

At the thirdly place, we can not make sure that the money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent. The author just tell(tells) us that if their spouses have a chance of employment, new professors will be more like to accept our offers, but we do not know how much money will be put in this effort. If the number is huge, this measure's value should be doubted. What's more, we do not know how the professors look(?) the chance of employment about their spouses and they maybe do not take it into account. From above, we know the conclusion is too arbitrary.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks of credibility. Regardless of who the author is, he or she has overlooked or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the conclusion, the author should give more evidences about the above-mentioned possibilities.(结尾再详细点比较好, 这样完全是模板啦)