Argument7 第2篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

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Argument7  第2篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.
'In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example, during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved.'
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In this analysis the arguer claims that we should vote Ann Green (AG) as our mayor and predict if we elect AG, our environmental problems in Clearview will be solved. To support this conclusion, the arguer points out that AG is a member of the Good Earth Coalition. In addition, the arguer reasons that his competitor-Frank Braun(FB)-and Clearview town council do not protect the environment.However, this argument is problematic for several reasons.

Firstly, the mere fact that number of factories in Clearview has double, air pollution levels have increased and local hospital has treated more patients with respiratory illnesses does not necessarily imply that FB don't protect our environment. Perhaps there should have been even more factories in Clearview, but don't happened because FB objected it. What's more, it may be wasting air released by more private car rather than that released by factories cause the air pollution. Outbreak(ing) of respiratory illness which can probably be heavier when the weather get colder cannot imply worse level of air. Even assuming that our environment has getting worse, we still cannot suggest that is because that FB don't try to protect our environment, since he may has tried him best to protect it but still failed.

Secondly, the arguer fails to establish a causal relationship between a member of the Good Earth Coalition and protecting the environment. It is very likely that AG just add this organization but don't rise any useful suggestion or even don't do anything to protect the environment. Without ruling out how AG have done to protect our environment, the arguer cannot convince me that AG can solve the environmental problem effectively.

Even if AG will protect our environment, solving environmental problems have still a long way to go. Whether AG can persuade all the members in Council to help solving the environmental problems Whether AG can make sure that all the residents are willing to try their best to protect environment. There are so many aspects that can influence this problems, so the arguer's claim that the environmental problems in Clearview will surely be solved is unwarranted.
Last but not lease, the arguer ignores other mayor candidates who may finish this job better than AG and FB. Without information about these people, the assumption presents a false dilemma, since AG is not necessarily mutually exclusive alternatives.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strength the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence concerning FB supporting to build more factories, its the air released by these factories which cause the residents to have respiratory illness and AG have done a good job to protect our environment.

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-----题目------
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.
'In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example, during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be solved.'
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In this analysis the arguer claims that we should vote Ann Green (AG) as our mayor and predicts if we elect AG, our environmental problems in Clearview will be solved. To support this conclusion, the arguer points out that AG is a member of the Good Earth Coalition. In addition, the arguer reasons that his competitor-Frank Braun(FB)-and Clearview town council do not protect the environment.However, this argument is problematic for several reasons.

Firstly, the mere fact that number of factories in Clearview has double, air pollution levels have increased and local hospital has treated more patients with respiratory illnesses does not necessarily imply that FB don't protect our environment. Perhaps there should have been even more factories in Clearview, but don't happened because FB objected it. What's more, it may be wasting air released by more private car rather than that released by factories cause the air pollution. Outbreak(ing) of respiratory illness which can probably be heavier when the weather gets colder cannot imply worse level of air. Even assuming that our environment has getting worse, we still cannot suggest that is because that FB don't try to protect our environment, since he may has tried him best to protect it but still failed.(论证的好）

Secondly, the arguer fails to establish a causal relationship between a member of the Good Earth Coalition and protecting the environment. It is very likely that AG just add this organization but don't rise any useful suggestion or even don't do anything to protect the environment. Without ruling out how AG have done to protect our environment, the arguer cannot convince me that AG can solve the environmental problem effectively.

Even if AG will protect our environment, solving environmental problems have still a long way to go. Whether AG can persuade all the members in Council to help solving the environmental problems Whether AG can make sure that all the residents are willing to try their best to protect environment. There are so many aspects that can influence this problems, so the arguer's claim that the environmental problems in Clearview will surely be solved is unwarranted.
Last but not lease, the arguer ignores other mayor candidates who may finish this job better than AG and FB. Without information about these people, the assumption presents a false dilemma, since AG is not necessarily mutually exclusive alternatives.

To sum up, the conclusion lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strength the argument, the arguer would have to provide more evidence concerning FB supporting to build more factories, its the air released by these factories which cause the residents to have respiratory illness and AG have done a good job to protect our environment.
整篇作文思路非常清晰，语言也很流畅，基本上没有错误，写的好！