issue99 【today is the day小组】第四次作业 by ooowr1

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TOPIC: ISSUE99 - "In any realm of life-whether academic, social, business, or political-the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options."

  I agree with the speaker's broad assertion that pragmatic approach toward our endeavors can help us reach short-term goals. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends this broad assertion to embrace that an idealistic one is of no use to us to succeed, while ignoring the certain functions and significance of ideals, as discussed below.
  I concede that the speaker is on the correct philosophical side of this issue. After all, the easier way to succeed is to take a practical and immediate method. Because ideal means the best destination we wish to approach, irrespective of whether we can achieve it or not. Ideal is also the chief means by which we human attempt to pursue aims for satisfying our insatiable appetites. Generally, one who wishes to his dreams come true will do everything to achieve it, even if it may cost a long time even his whole life. But, obviously, pragmatic approaches won't cost such exorbitant expense. So, people always choose the immediate way of success and the practical style of life or career. For example, students who we would regard as pragmatic tend to pursue an education for scholarships and prefer to choose the major subjects which will help them to easily get jobs with good salary. To the contrary, confronted with the pressure of life, few people will choose the direction of archaeology, geographic, oceanography and other researchable subjects. Why?  Some may complain that those subjects are so boring. But, in my opinion, the most important reason lies in that these subjects can not provide them with a good job in their career, even if those fields are their original ideals.
  However, is ideal of little use for the development of our society? Of course not. Just as the Russian writer Leo Tolstoy has said:" ideal is the beacon. Without ideal, there is no secure direction; without direction, there is no life." ideal is a compass when we sailing. So many events seem impossible before it have been done. Such apt illustrations are walking on the moon, the equality of man and woman, and so forth, which are beyond the widest dreams of our ancestors. If people are lack of ideals or imagination, our society would not be what it looks like today. Tony Blair has said: if we have courage to change, then we do it and we get it. That is the functions of ideals which light people's way, and time after time give people new courage to change the world to be better off.
  While we should endeavor to realize our ideals, irrespective of whether we could get the destination, at the same time we should be circumspect about ideals whose potential benefits are too speculative and whose objectives are not worth our hard work. For example, when it comes to business, it might be more tempting to agree with the speaker. Although business men have their own ideals, they should know exactly what their goals are, or they will be losers in the end if they excessively pursue idealistic aims. So, in the competitive business world, they are well-advised to choose the predicable and immediate way.
  In sum, it is a complex issue about whether we should choose the practical way to succeed. Judging from what I have discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that it is sensible of us to take practical methods, while continuing pursue our ideals. Because no ideal, no motivation of develop to the world.

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TOPIC: ISSUE99 - "In any realm of life-whether academic, social, business, or political-the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options."

  I agree with the speaker's broad assertion that pragmatic approach toward our endeavors can help us reach short-term goals. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends this broad assertion to embrace that an idealistic one is of no use to us to succeed, while ignoring the certain functions and significance of ideals, as discussed below.

  I concede that the speaker is on the correct philosophical side of this issue. After all, the easier way to succeed is to take a practical and immediate method. Because ideal means the best destination we wish to approach, irrespective of whether we can achieve it or not. Ideal is also the chief means by which we human attempt to pursue aims for satisfying our insatiable appetites. Generally, one who wishes to his dreams come true will do everything to achieve it, even if it may cost a long time even his whole life. But, obviously, pragmatic approaches won't cost such exorbitant expense. So, people always choose the immediate way of success and the practical style of life or career. For example, students who we would regard as pragmatic tend to pursue an education for scholarships and prefer to choose the major subjects which will help them to easily get jobs with good salary. To the contrary, confronted with the pressure of life, few people will choose the direction of archaeology, geographic, oceanography and other researchable subjects. Why?  Some may complain that those subjects are so boring. But, in my opinion, the most important reason lies in that these subjects can not provide them with a good job in their career, even if those fields are their original ideals.
感觉这段写的挺好的，学生自身的例子，比较有说服力。不过，感觉那个例子和你的主题不太match。我感觉你想说的是实用主义让人获得短期成功，也就是说实用主义的好处；不过例子没有侧重这一点，反而到最后让我读出一点讽刺大家太过功利的意思……可以换一种表达吧，例子还挺好的。当然，这只是我的感觉，仅供参考。

  However, is ideal of little use for the development of our society? Of course not. Just as the Russian writer Leo Tolstoy has said:" ideal is the beacon. Without ideal, there is no secure direction; without direction, there is no life." ideal is a compass when we sailing. So many events seem impossible before it have been done. Such apt illustrations are walking on the moon, the equality of man and woman, and so forth, which are beyond the widest dreams of our ancestors. If people are lack of ideals or imagination, our society would not be what it looks like today. Tony Blair has said: if we have courage to change, then we do it and we get it. That is the functions of ideals which light people's way, and time after time give people new courage to change the world to be better off.感觉可以再加强一些论证，再写一个Martin Luther King的I have a dream吧。反正就是觉得理想鼓舞人心没有充分体现。

  While we should endeavor to realize our ideals, irrespective of whether we could get the destination, at the same time we should be circumspect about ideals whose potential benefits are too speculative and whose objectives are not worth our hard work. For example, when it comes to business, it might be more tempting to agree with the speaker. Although business men have their own ideals, they should know exactly what their goals are, or they will be losers in the end if they excessively pursue idealistic aims. So, in the competitive business world, they are well-advised to choose the predicable and immediate way.

  In sum, it is a complex issue about whether we should choose the practical way to succeed. Judging from what I have discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that it is sensible of us to take practical methods, while continuing pursue our ideals. Because no ideal, no motivation of develop to the world.

总的来说，写的挺好的。我觉得语言上没什么大毛病，长短句结合。而且思路清晰，论证也不错。我就是觉得差了一些论据（我比较喜欢论据……），或者说后两段显得太短了（与第一段相比），可以再丰富一下。唉，我就是摆了一堆论据，不会论证。
还有就是三段的顺序是不是变一下？第一、三说现实主义的好处，第二说理想主义的好处，我一般见的范文和提纲都是先好再坏或先坏再好。
另外，我看过一个和你这个有点类似的范文，它是按照不同realm说的，其中就有study和business。其实他那样的分类也不错，毕竟共同点都是短期的profit和benefit。
只是个人意见，说的不对的地方还请多包含。:)