COMEON作文小组------macross 8月31日作业

macross_36UID: 2306285

新能源（sun, wind, water）will be soon replace 旧能源fossil fuels (oil, gas)， agree or disagree? 2006 年10 月28日技术进步类

When it comes to whether the new energy resource will soon replace the traditional one, the discussion of this issue among individual and in society as a whole has come into vague during the last decade. I agree with the assertion that new kind of energy resource will take the place of the old one.

The main reason for my propensity to the new energy is that the traditional energy cannot be renewed. Take fossil oil as an instance, it is formulated from the animals’ bodies buried underground thousands of years ago. Such procedure cannot be regenerated nowadays. Furthermore, oil is limited, according to a recent report, if we continue using oil as quickly as nowadays, oil will vanish in at most 30 years. Fortunately, the new energy can be regenerated. In other words, people have to depend on exploring new energy to serve as the substitute of traditional one.

Another essential factor why I advocate new energy is that traditional energy brings pollution. As known to us, when we use fuel and gas, it is inevitable to make dirty smoke and residual because we have to burn the resource to make energy. A research shows that pollution caused by burning fuel and gas plays a crucial role in deteriorating the environment. Also, it contributes a lot to the Global Warming which may bring disaster to humans. On the other hand, new energy gained from wind, water and sun makes little waste and pollution. With the fast development of people’s awareness about protecting environment, new energy will take the place of the old one without doubt.

Last but not least, when comes to the political realm, the trend of such replacement is also obvious. This trend is especially apparent on fossil oil. Most of the biggest oil fields located in the Middle East. Thus, it is said that Middle East has controlled lifeline of the world’s oil energy. Countries that do not want to depend on the Middle East have to find way to change such situation. And, not surprisingly they have turned their attention to the development of the new energy.

To sum up, it goes without saying that new energy will take the place of the traditional one, not only because it is renewable, but also because its political value and its character of bringing little pollution.

本来计时写的，只写了290多字，只好再改，咋办啊，9月底就考了～

devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

When it comes to whether the new energy resource will soon replace the traditional one, the discussion of this issue among individual and in society as a whole has come into vague (vogue?) during the last decade. （quite familiar sentence structure.）I agree with the assertion that new kind of energy resource will take the place of the old one.

The main reason for my propensity to the new energy is that the traditional energy cannot be renewed. Take fossil oil as an instance, it is formulated from the animals’ bodies buried underground thousands of years ago. Such procedure cannot be regenerated nowadays. Furthermore, oil is limited, according to a recent report, if we continue using oil as quickly as nowadays, oil will vanish in at most 30 years. Fortunately, the new energy can be regenerated. In other words, people have to depend on exploring new energy to serve as the substitute of traditional one.

Another essential factor why I advocate new energy is that traditional energy brings pollution. As is known to us, when we use fuel and gas, it is inevitable to make dirty smoke and residual because we have to burn the resource to make energy. A research shows that pollution caused by burning fuel and gas plays a crucial role in deteriorating the environment. Also, it contributes a lot to the Global Warming which may bring disaster to humans. On the other hand, new energy gained from wind, water and sun makes little waste and pollution. With the fast development of people’s awareness about protecting environment, new energy will take the place of the old one without doubt.(very good. This sentence shows explicitly the relation between causing pollution and being replaced.)

Last but not least, when it comes to the political realm, the trend of such replacement is also obvious. This trend is especially apparent on fossil oil. Most of the biggest oil fields located in the Middle East. Thus, it is said that Middle East has controlled lifeline of the world’s oil energy. Countries that do not want to depend on the Middle East have to find way to change such situation. And, not surprisingly they have turned their attention to the development of the new energy. (good point.)

To sum up, it goes without saying that new energy will take the place of the traditional one, not only because it is renewable, but also because its political value and its character of bringing little pollution.

I don't see there's any reason for you to worry about composition part. Though it takes you more than half an hour to finish writing, this problem is quite likely to be solved in one-month training. Supporting points are clear with transitional words, "the main reason, another essential factor, last but not least, to sum up".  Besides, usage of language is precise and, I should say, idiomatic. Few gramatical mistakes were found. Believe it or not. I am very good at spotting gramatical errors, but few can I find in this article.

macross_36UID: 2306285

Thanks for your encourage!
I will try my best.

devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

Thanks for your encourage!(encouragement):loveliness: