COMEON 作文小组9.5号作业－yangkeli22

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

今天在规定时间内第一次写了超过320字的作文，感觉有点头重脚轻，请大家提出意见！
但自己感觉对小家庭的优点描述太少，说服力度不够。
For quite a long time, in China, extended family is the symbol of thriveness. Amount of people bring more money to support the family and there are more stories or anecdotes happened there. You can easily feel the hilarious ambience in the extended family, in particular in the Spring Festival. Traditional planton hold the opinion that extended family is important at any time, for they believe that parents are the one who give birth to them, they have duity to let them enjoy the rest of their lives. While, on the contrary, some other people maintain that small family is better than the extended family. From my peraonal angle alone, the small family will take place of the extended family.
In the extended family, there exists conflits. Some of which are fatel to couples that it may result from divorce. For example, if your wife have conflit with your aunt because of different point of veiws or varied customs, how can you deal with it well? Blame to each side is not the good choice, in this way, you only can suffer anger from both side. You wife will blame you not to help her, not to solve the problem for her. While, your aunt will also rebuke you not teach your wife rightly to follow the rule made by the ancient. That is quite a tough problem to solve. If the conflits continued, it later may result big quarrel which may lead you divorce. Especially nowadays, youth have strong individualality. But in the small family, there exists no such complex problems.
Further more, if you want to go out for the travel, you had better take a second look at it if you are in the extended family. For the simple reason that the money you spend may cost the whole year's salary and you can not travel alone without your family members.
From the reasons I mentioned above, I can easily come to a conclusion that the extended family will give up to the emergence of small family.

duoluUID: 2536206

恭喜楼主不超时，我至今未实现。
拼写有些问题，已经比我好了。根据我的总结，这个要多打字来提高。
结构好像没有标准的5段式好看，但是也是有理有据。
另外，这个题目我很疑惑，中西方文化差异很大，那些思想是大家都能理解的？这个题目感觉不是很好写

For quite along time, in China, extended family is the symbol of thriveness（没查到这个词，是不是用thrive就成了，这本身就是名次）.Amount of people bring more money to support the family and there aremore stories or anecdotes happened there. You can easily feel thehilarious ambience in the extended family, in particular in the SpringFestival. Traditional planton（这个词也没有查到） hold the opinion that extended family isimportant at any time, for they believe that parents are the one（s） whogive birth to them, they have duity to let them enjoy the rest of theirlives. While, on the contrary, some other people maintain that smallfamily is better than the extended family. From my （peraonal）personal anglealone, the small family will take place of the extended family.7Og)^B2k,M3xB
In theextended family, there exists conflits, some of which are fatal to handle and may result in divorce. 是这个意思吗？原本没看出来是什么结构(. Some of which are fatel tocouples that it may result from divorce). For example, if your wife haveconflit with your aunt because of different point of veiws or variedcustoms, how can you deal with it well? Blame to each side is not thegood choice, in this way, you only can suffer anger from both side. Youwife will blame you not to help her, not to solve the problem for her.While, your aunt will also rebuke you not teach your wife rightly tofollow the rule made by the ancient. That is quite a tough problem tosolve. If the conflits continued, it later may result big quarrel whichmay lead you divorce. Especially nowadays, youth have strongindividuality（individualality）. But in the small family, there exists no such complexproblems.寄托家园%X7c4wl.Ll0]O
Furthermore, if you want to go out for the travel, you had better take asecond look at it if you are in the extended family. For the simplereason that the money you spend may cost the whole year's salary and（感觉这好像不是并列关系，如果是的话，前一句有看不懂了）you can not travel alone without your family members. bbs.gter.net2E7\(@M;CPpI
From the reasons I mentioned above, Ican easily come to a conclusion that the extended family will give upto the emergence of small family.

[ 本帖最后由 duolu 于 2008-9-6 00:04 编辑 ]

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

感谢duolu的修改，可能打字比较急而且有些单词想用突然就记不得拼写了，你说没查到的是populace,原来和别人学的，没学会，献丑啦！
论述的第一段我是想说有些矛盾对于夫妻来说可能是致命的，弄不好就会离婚……
第三段是想说原因是你可能会用掉你一年的工资并且你也不能自己去旅游而不顾家人。

ourtransUID: 2241441

是不是理解错题意了？？英文原题的意思应该是，现在的extended family在人们的生活中是不是没有以前那么重要了。
LZ是不是直接根据后面中文的理解了？

duoluUID: 2536206

第三段是想说原因是你可能会用掉你一年的工资并且你也不能自己去旅游而不顾家人。
中文也没理解，为什么会用掉一年的工资呢？

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

就是说大家庭人太多，如果全都一起去花销肯定比小家庭大得多，说用掉一年工资稍微夸张了点。

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

说的有道理，确实是有受中文意思的影响，写的有点偏了，谢谢提醒！