【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】12月18日作文

xiaojing1115UID: 2578357

With the evolution of the society, people spend more time on the work than ever to make more money. Although the technology has developed speedily, so many things need to be done by people’s hands. A majority of people, including me, maintain that people are busy doing different things that they can do few things well. The reasons are as followings.
Firstly, doing one thing well need enough time, nothing can get along well with only a little time when many things are done at the same moment. Before doing well, so many steps we need to do, such as distributing time, preparing material and contemplating the detail. These steps need only energy but also much time. For instance, before a big party, we need to elect the location, and then prepare the decorating material, also need to inform the guest. Sometimes, we even need to prepare another plan preventing from some suddenness. So, people can do few thing well when they are busy doing different things in that they have no enough energy and time to prepare.
Secondly, almost every people have a little disadvantage. It is true that they are good at some fields, but not all the fields do they have interests. At a first glance, they are busy doing different things orderly, however, only looking into the things deeply will you found that few thing are done well. For example, we study so many subjects at school when we only express interest in a few, although we spend much time studying, there are always some subjects we can’t learn well. Thus it can be seen, although people are busying doing different things, only few things can be done well.
In conclusion, for me, before starting, we need delicate plan, such as daily plan, time plan and solving accident plan. sometimes we also need to ask people for some advice that exerts a positive impact on the thing. People can do few things well when they are busy doing different things at the same time.

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

全篇好像强调了很多次：People can do few things well when they are busy doing different things at the same time.
但理由好像不够充分哦。

chineseladyUID: 2403976

With the evolution of the society, people spend more time on the work than ever to make more money. Although the technology has been developed(被动态) speedily, so many things need to be done by people’s hands. A majority of people, including me, maintain that people are busy doing different things that they can do few things well. The reasons are as followings.

Firstly, doing one thing well need enough time, nothing can get along well with only a little time when many things are done at the same moment. Before doing well, so many steps we need to do, such as distributing time, preparing material and contemplating the detail. These steps need 这里是不是少个(not) only energy but also much time. For instance, before (having or holding)可任选 a big party, we need to elect the location, and then prepare the decorating material, also need to inform the guest. Sometimes, we even need to prepare another plan preventing from some suddenness. So, people can do few thing well when they are busy doing different things in that they have no enough energy and time to prepare.

Secondly, almost every people (every people好像不常用吧可以说most people) have a little disadvantage. It is true that they are good at some fields, but not all the fields do they have interests. At a first glance, they are busy doing different things orderly, however, only looking into the things deeply will you found that few thing are done well. For example, we study so many subjects at school when we only express interest in a few, although we spend much time studying, there are always some subjects we can’t learn well. Thus it can be seen, although people are busying doing different things, only few things can be done well.寄托家园5e

In conclusion, for me, before starting, we need delicate plan, such as daily plan, time plan (schedule)  and solving accident plan. sometimes we also need to ask people for some advice that exerts a positive impact on the thing. People can do few things well when they are busy doing different things at the same time.

语言很简洁,观点有点单一哦.

ningstoryUID: 2548108

With the evolution of the society, people spend more time on the work than ever to make （改为earn） more money. Although the technology has developed speedily, (+ there are) so many things need to be done by people’s hands. A majority of people, including me, maintain (+ the statement) that people are busy doing different things that they can do few things well. The reasons are as followings.
Firstly, doing one thing well need enough time, nothing can get along well with only a little time when many things are done at the same moment. Before doing well, so many steps we need to do, such as distributing time, preparing material and contemplating the detail. These steps need （+ not）only energy but also much time. For instance, before a big party, we need to elect the location, and then prepare the decorating material, also need to inform the guest. Sometimes, we even need to prepare another plan preventing from some suddenness. So, people can do few thing well when they are busy doing different things in that they have no enough energy and time to prepare.
Secondly, almost every people have a little (改为some) disadvantage (+s). It is true that they are good at some fields, but not all the fields do they have interests（改为done好些）. At a first glance, they are busy doing different things orderly, however, only looking into the things deeply （改为peripheral）will you found that few thing are done well. For example, we study so many subjects at school when we only express interest in a few, although we spend much time studying, there are always some subjects we can’t learn well. Thus it can be seen, although people are busying doing different things, only few things can be done well.
In conclusion, for me, before starting, we need delicate plan（+s）, such as daily plan, time plan and solving accident plan. Sometimes we also need to ask people for some advice that exerts a positive impact on the thing.（+So 好些，否则感觉太突然了） People can do few things well when they are busy doing different things at the same time

写的不错，条理清晰。
遗憾的是里面有很多小错误。
以上谨是我的看法，呵呵，抛砖引玉。祝你成功！