【12月-1月IBT综合备考大帖】之【TWE作文】12.22号作业

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In the animal world, cooperation is always a good way for the weak to survive, especially in the human beings. With the development of the globalization, never in the history when the times calls the sense of cooperation like today. The ability to cooperate with others well is more important today than in the past.

First, every corner of today's world is full filled with cooperation, from agriculture to the service department, from industy to the commerce. The new saying "efficiency is monye, and efficiency is life" means that if a entity, either an enterprise or a person, need to improve his efficiency in his work, or else, he will be driven out in the competition. The most important way to improve the efficiency is cooperation. Thinking about the software company Microsoft, when they are plannin the operation system Windows Vista, it is so complex a project with millions of lines of code. So they must budget at least hundreds of work force to cooperate to accomplish it, or else, how can we imagine that a single person can finish it? Not like in the past, today's society is full filled with cooperation, so the ability is a must in this modern society.

Second, today's society requires a much higher standard in the ability in cooperation. With the development of the society, the projects are becoming much huger than ever before. If the any of the participant has a relatively weak ability in cooperation, the project will fail and the damage would be tremendous. For example, the huge "Apollo Program", which aimed at landing in the moon and sending an astronaut on to it. This program involved tens of thousands of parts and concerned thousands of workers. If any of the participants couldn't work well in the team, it would lead to the failure, and we couldn't count the loss in money, as it will discourage humans confidence in exploring the universe. So the importance of the ability of cooperation in modern society can never be overweighed, and is becoming more and more important.

Take into account of all the factors, we can safely draw the conclusion that the ability to cooperate is more important than in the past.

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In the animal world, cooperation is always a good way for the weak to survive, especially in the human beings.（animal ~~human beings 跨度大了点吧）With the development of the globalization, never in the history when the times calls the sense of cooperation like today. The ability to cooperate with others well is more important today than in the past.

First, every corner of today's world is full filled with cooperation, from agriculture to the service department, from industry to the commerce. The new saying "efficiency is money, and efficiency is life" means that if an entity, either an enterprise or a person, need to improve his efficiency in his work, or else, he will be driven out in the competition. The most important way to improve the efficiency is cooperation. Thinking about the software company Microsoft, when they are planning the operation system Windows Vista, it is so complex a project with millions of lines of code. So they must budget at least hundreds of work force to cooperate to accomplish it, or else, how can we imagine that a single person can finish it? Not like in the past, today's society is full filled with cooperation, so the ability is a must in this modern society.
效率的重要性比以前大 合作提高效率 eg ：Microsoft

Second, today's society requires a much higher standard in the ability in cooperation. With the development of the society, the projects are becoming much huger than ever before. If the any of the participant has a relatively weak ability in cooperation, the project will fail and the damage would be tremendous. For example, the huge "Apollo Program", which aimed at landing in the moon and sending an astronaut on to it. This program involved tens of thousands of parts and concerned thousands of workers. If any of the participants couldn't work well in the team, it would lead to the failure, and we couldn't count the loss in money, as it will discourage human’s confidence in exploring the universe. So the importance of the ability of cooperation in modern society can never be overweighed, and is becoming more and more important.
现在的project比以前大 合作更重要 eg Apollo Program

Take into account of all the factors; we can safely draw the conclusion that the ability to cooperate is more important than in the past.
总结 全文很流畅~~一口气能读完~~很喜欢这种明显带理工风格的文体 结尾再加一句吧~什么以前需要合作现在更需要的话~感觉有点蛇尾

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In the animal world, cooperation is always a good way for the weak to survive, especially in the human beings. With the development of the globalization, never in the history when the times calls the sense of cooperation like today. The ability to cooperate with others well is more important today than in the past.

First, every corner of today's world is full filled with cooperation, from agriculture to the service department, from industy to the commerce. The new saying "efficiency is money, and efficiency is life" means that if a entity, either an enterprise or a person, need to improve his efficiency in his work, or else, he will be driven out in the competition. The most important way to improve the efficiency is cooperation. Thinking about the software company Microsoft, when they are planning the operation system Windows Vista, it is so complex a project with millions of lines of code. So they must budget at least hundreds of work force to cooperate to accomplish it, or else, how can we imagine that a single person can finish it? Not like in the past, today's society is full filled with cooperation, so the ability is a must in this modern society.(例子可以，但不够详细)

Second, today's society requires a much higher standard in the ability in cooperation. With the development of the society, the projects are becoming much huger than ever before. If the any of the participant has a relatively weak ability（查过没这样用法的） in cooperation, the project will fail and the damage would be tremendous. For example, the huge "Apollo Program", which aimed at landing in the moon and sending an astronaut on to it. This program involved tens of thousands of parts and concerned thousands of workers. If any of the participants couldn't work well in the team, it would lead to the failure, and we couldn't count the loss in money, as it will discourage humans confidence in exploring the universe. So the importance of the ability of cooperation in modern society can never be overweighed, and is becoming more and more important.（评论同上）

Take into account of all the factors, we can safely draw the conclusion that the ability to cooperate is more important than in the past.（太简单了）

例子太不详细，只是泛泛而谈。
注意个别搭配和基本句式语法。

[ 本帖最后由 xlwxxy 于 2008-12-23 22:36 编辑 ]

hustly0415UID: 2407456

原帖由 xlwxxy 于 2008-12-23 08:25 发表
In the animal world, cooperation is always a good way for the weak to survive, especially in the human beings. With the development of the globalization, never in the history when the times calls ...

MS的例子，个人感觉不好再详细了，再详细了跟这个cooperation不好扯上关系，个人感觉

apollo的那个，到是扯了点闲话，介绍apollo，但是也不怎么好再往深里写了。

感谢你的评价

[ 本帖最后由 hustly0415 于 2008-12-23 21:52 编辑 ]