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说的不好的地方别打偶~~~
:cool::cool::cool:
The author claims that important discoveries are more likely accomplished by beginner rather than expert regardless of the field of inquiry. It is true that beginner is more creativity [adj. creative] and [while]sometimes expert in one particular area could [may, could太肯定了] impede the progress of science. However, the author seem overlooked [seems to overlook]the importance of knowledge to achieve great discoveries in certain field. As far as I can see, both beginner and expert play a considerable part[role] in the way to great discoveries.
To begin with, few would deny that beginner is more activity and creativity[…] than experts[前后单复数要统一] in the most field of inquiry. It is true[开头段用过it is true咯] that freshman in any field could bring [in] some new[fresh好不好?] ideas. Without the restrain of estimated[established的吧?] principles and conception, it is better and easier for beginner to spire[inspire] some new particular ideas since they know nothing about the field which they will emerge[devote] in. In fact, sometimes it is the new idea advanced by beginner lead to significant discovery or at least serves as an activator to inspire other researchers. To illustrate this point clearly, one need to look no further than the foundation of principle of relativity: Albert Einstein, before his foundation of the theory, is just a beginner in the Physic[physical] field who never done one achievement before[without significant achievement before]. But it is the strong desire to make some contribution and the creativity bring by neophyte surge him [这个用法么?]to accomplish such a great discovery. [总体感觉这段有点头重脚轻,前面说理说的有点多咯。例子太靠后,关键的是例子后面还是缺了一点分析,以及对本段内容的一句总结。例子还是不错的:)]
In addition, history tells us[用history witnesses numerous examples that ..就漂亮啦~~] that sometimes it is the so-called authority does impede the outcome of great discoveries and the progress of the science itself [itself多了~~]. Many of great discoveries are considered as crazy theories which have no value at all by those contemporary experts [这里分成两个句子,太长了]since the new theory or discovery threaten their authorities in one particular field[in one particular field在这边意义不大,用to some extent吧~~]. For example, consider about the restrain of heliocentric theory by the contemporary authorities, such as churches. [写到这儿,这段没有了?~~晕倒。。这段也太少了亚,是不是没有写完,还是没有贴上来?让步不写也要充实这一段的阿]
However, the author's claim has[去掉has] overlooked[overlook] the fact that knowledge plays a key role in the process of pursue for discoveries[简洁起见,用in pursuing discoveries]. Without correspondent[corresponding] knowledge of his/her [certain] major area, it is hard even impossible [hard, even impossible, 要用逗号分开]for a beginner to achieve great discoveries. Both common sense and life experience tell us[tell us有点不正式的感觉,可以用prove代替] that important scientific breakthrough or invitation require solid theory basis, diligent spirit, hard work, and sometimes a little fortune. The absence of any of these factors come along with the fail in the scientific research. History is replete of example[replete不错,学习:)] to substantiate my[this] viewpoint: the discovery of universal gravitation, the foundation of heliocentric theory, and the evolution, all of these important discoveries were done[done太普通了,用made or achieved] by scientists who have insightful comprehension and adequate acknowledge in their major field and that comprehension and acknowledge rarely be[are rarely] found in the beginner of one particular inquiry field. [例子还是要分析分析的好:)]
To sum up, beginners are more creative[对了,赫赫,前面的要注意阿] and active than experts, even sometime experts may impede the outcome of new discoveries, but they have their merits when it comes to the foundation of discoveries--knowledge of particular inquiry area. In fact, both beginner and expert are crucial in the way to achieve success in any inquiry[inquiry不是形容词吧,inquiring] field.
[B2是不是写漏了?语法错误比较多,这个要特别注意,丢分特别可惜的。论证上你偏重于例子之前的说理了,对例子的分析有点不足。提纲上不错的。+U+U]
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