ISSUE185 ［加州阳光］第四次作业 ＦＲＯＭ ７２８ＡＷ

728AWUID: 2216408

这个真是难死我了，光去网上查韩国那人的丑闻和找个没被用烂的政治丑闻就找好久。不过终于学会了用ＧＯＯＧＬＥ找英文资料了～～但是在学校上国外网真是无比的慢啊……比我写ＩＳＳＵＥ还要慢……期待放假回家５５５５５５５５５５５
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这个就没限时，大伙儿帮看看吧，拍完留链啊～ＹＹ好去回拍～～:D:hug:

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OUTLINE
1.        丑闻在学术领域的作用，例子韩国黄禹锡
2.        丑闻在政治领域的作用，例子WATERGATE
3.        丑闻不是绝对地可以USEFUL的，它可能被媒介利用，而且观众应该不仅注意到，关注到丑闻，该做出举措防止该类事情发生来促进社会进步。
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I agree with the speaker’s broad assertion that scandals can be useful no matter it is in politics, academic, or other areas. Thanks to its special attributes so that they play an important part in focusing our attention on problems by the ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. My points of contention with the speaker involve the aspects of academic in Biology in Korea and the most compelling scandal in USA, the
Watergate scandal, as discussed below.

On one hand, scandals in academic field can focus all the attention on a very problem so that it can be examined by all the people to check out whether it is appropriate. Furthermore, through that, the society will put emphasis on the around areas to make sure that there is no where have the similar scandals which will drive the area, including the related areas, to a better atmosphere. A case that can be presented to develop my point is the great stem-cell scandal in Korea. After determined that the development of stem cells from a cloned human embryo by Hwang Woo-suk and his team documented in a 2004 research paper published in Science was fraudulent by a panel at Seoul National University. Koreans are mourning the fall of their hero. Korea's scientists, however, take a different view. They are confident that long after the scandal is forgotten, Korea's biotech industry will have made up the ground it lost in the past few weeks, and more. While Hwang's sensational claims were drawing the attention of the world's media, behind the scenes researchers were making significant progress in other aspects of stem-cell research. "Dr. Hwang was not the only stem-cell scientist Korea had," says Dr. Oh Il Hoan, director of Catholic University Hospital's cell-research center in Seoul. "We still have the technology, manpower and infrastructure to lead global stem-cell research."

On the other hand, when it comes to political field, perhaps one of the most compelling scandals in USA's history is the Watergate scandal. The president Nixon was involved in this event and impeached by public for his behaviors concerning for himself rather than public’s interest and a whole judicial system.
However, when this scandal was published to the public and was shocked by the public, what rising in our mind is the arousal of flaws of our normal social system from a lateral facet. It is fairly clear that the Watergate scandal produces a far reaching effect on the USA’s politic field and presses even a whole world. This scandal can not be simply regarded but should be considered as a stimulus which can arouse public’s enthusiasm to focus on intricate politic system and consequently create a much more just politic atmosphere.

However, although I admit that scandals can be emphasized to focus our attention in certain areas, it is no denying the fact that among the scandals which are digged out by the press there are some made-up ones just to meet the public's appetites of curiosity and jealousness. Furthermore, most of the readers are just keep themselves outside and keep an eye on what is going on instead of doing something from the scandals to purify our society.

In sum, I would paraphrase the issue that scandals can be emphasized by the public media so that it has a better chance to be focused by the public. However, unless it is used to get some experiences and to impede our surrounding society, we can not say that it can be useful.

[ 本帖最后由 728AW 于 2006-6-23 20:52 编辑 ]

stone_lueUID: 2154056

I agree with the speaker’s broad assertion that scandals can be useful no matter it is in politics, academic, or other areas. Thanks to its special attributes so that they play an important part in focusing our attention on problems by the ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. My points of contention with the speaker involve the aspects of academic in Biology in Korea and the most compelling scandal in USA, the
Watergate scandal, as discussed below.

On (the) one hand, scandals in academic field can focus all the attention on a very problem so that it can be examined by all the people to check out whether it is appropriate. Furthermore, through that, the society will put emphasis on the around areas to make sure that there is no where have the similar scandals which will drive the area, including the related areas, to a better atmosphere. A case that can be presented to develop my point is the great stem-cell scandal in Korea. After determined that the development of stem cells from a cloned human embryo by Hwang Woo-suk and his team documented in a 2004 research paper published in Science was fraudulent by a panel at Seoul National University. Koreans are mourning the fall of their hero. Korea's scientists, however, take a different view. They are confident that long after the scandal is forgotten, Korea's biotech industry will have made up the ground it lost in the past few weeks, and more. While Hwang's sensational claims were drawing the attention of the world's media, behind the scenes researchers were making significant progress in other aspects of stem-cell research. "Dr. Hwang was not the only stem-cell scientist Korea had," says Dr. Oh Il Hoan, director of Catholic University Hospital's cell-research center in Seoul. "We still have the technology, manpower and infrastructure to lead global stem-cell research." （虽然用了大量篇幅举例子，但对事件的分析却很少）

On the other hand, when it comes to political field, perhaps one of the most compelling scandals in USA's history is the Watergate scandal. The president Nixon was involved in this event and impeached by public for his behaviors concerning for himself rather than public’s interest and a whole judicial system.
However, when this scandal was published to the public and was shocked by the public（感觉不好）, what rising in our mind is the arousal of flaws of our normal social system from a lateral facet. It is fairly clear that the Watergate scandal produces a far reaching effect on the USA’s politic field and presses even a whole world. （应该用过去时吧）This scandal can not be simply regarded but should be considered as a stimulus which can arouse public’s enthusiasm to focus on intricate politic system and consequently create a much more just politic atmosphere.

However, although I admit that scandals can be emphasized to focus our attention in certain areas, it is no denying the fact that among the scandals which are digged out by the press there are some made-up ones just to meet the public's appetites of curiosity and jealousness. Furthermore, most of the readers are just keep themselves outside and keep an eye on what is going on instead of doing something from the scandals to purify our society.（观点很好，可惜没有接着展开）
In sum, I would paraphrase the issue that scandals can be emphasized by the public media so that it has a better chance to be focused by the public. However, unless it is used to get some experiences and to impede our surrounding society, we can not say that it can be useful.
（整个文章的结构清晰明了，从正反两方面进行分析。例子举的也很有代表性，可惜倒数第二段没有充分展开。总的来说，还是相当不错的


请拍
Issue185 https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D3

[ 本帖最后由 stone_lue 于 2006-6-24 12:14 编辑 ]

joey.liuUID: 2207101

我基本同意楼上的观点，728AW正文第一段例子有些累赘（我也用的这个例子），第三段又没有充分展开

也帮拍一下
http://www.gter.edu.cn/bbs/viewt ... &extra=page%3D1

benniUID: 2166321

I agree with the speaker’s broad assertion that scandals can be useful no matter it is(可去掉) in politics, academic, or other areas. Thanks to its（指代谁？前面的scandal是复数形式） special attributes so that they play an important part in focusing our attention on problems by the ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. My points of contention with the speaker involve the aspects of academic in Biology in Korea and the most compelling scandal in USA, the Watergate scandal, as discussed below.

On one hand, scandals in academic field can focus all the attention on a very problem so that it(it指代不明，注意一下统一单复数) can be examined by all the people to check out whether it is appropriate. Furthermore, through that, the society will put emphasis on the around areas to make sure that there is no where have the similar scandals which will drive the area, including the related areas, to a better atmosphere. (这句子表达得有点乱，可以说，furthermore, the public’s supervision would ensure the reduction or even extinction of similar scandals, which contributes to a better academic atmosphere.) A case that can be presented to develop my point is the great stem-cell scandal in Korea. After determined that the development of stem cells from a cloned human embryo by Hwang Woo-suk and his team documented in a 2004 research paper published in Science was fraudulent by a panel at Seoul National University. Koreans are mourning the fall of their hero. Korea's scientists, however, take a different view. They are confident that long after the scandal is forgotten, Korea's biotech industry will have made up the ground it lost in the past few weeks, and more. While Hwang's sensational claims were drawing the attention of the world's media, behind the scenes researchers were making significant progress in other aspects of stem-cell research. "Dr. Hwang was not the only stem-cell scientist Korea had," says Dr. Oh Il Hoan, director of Catholic University Hospital's cell-research center in Seoul. "We still have the technology, manpower and infrastructure to lead global stem-cell research." (例子很新颖，不过个人感觉写得太详细了，何况这么多专有名词，考试的时候未必都能记得住)

On the other hand, when it comes to political field, perhaps one of the most compelling scandals in USA's history is the Watergate scandal. The president Nixon was involved in this event and impeached by public for his behaviors concerning for himself rather than public’s interest and a whole judicial system. However, when this scandal was published(disclosed) to the public and was shocked by the public(shock的逻辑主语应该是scandal, the scandal shocked public or public was shocked by the scandal), what rising in our mind is the arousal of flaws of our normal social system from a lateral facet. It is fairly clear that the Watergate scandal produces a far reaching effect on the USA’s politic field and presses even a(the) whole world. This scandal can not be simply regarded(这句有点chinenglish) but should be considered as a stimulus which can arouse public’s enthusiasm to focus on intricate politic system and consequently create a much more just politic atmosphere.

However, although I admit that scandals can be emphasized to focus our attention in certain areas, it is no denying the fact that among the scandals which are digged out by the press there are some made-up ones just to meet the public's appetites of curiosity and jealousness. Furthermore, most of the readers are(去掉) just keep themselves outside and keep an eye on what is going on instead of doing something from the scandals(taking lessons from scandals ) to purify our society.

In sum, I would paraphrase the issue that scandals can be emphasized by the public media so that it has a better chance to be focused by the public. However, unless it is used to get some experiences and to impede our surrounding society(impede是阻碍吧，逻辑不通，应该是改善才对), we can not say that it can be useful.

感觉YY其实很关注语言，不过比较大的问题也在语言，不够简明，有的话说得很绕。

很典型的就是结尾句——we can not say that it can be useful.

这样用从句不会给人有层次的感觉，反而是不够简练。

可以直接说we can hardly consider it useful.

我的语言也有待提高，一起努力