ISSUE185 ［加州阳光］第四次作业 想拍就拍~

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谢谢帮助我提高的各路好汉！


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Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.


------提纲------
1、的确有助于让人们关注一些问题
2、然而可能淡化绯闻主角对社会的贡献
3、在绯闻面前，公众通常一味听信媒体，以致丧失判断力
4、绯闻让人们忽略了很多更重要的社会问题


首先说一下，我今天改完觉得有点跑题，因为没有提到reformer & speaker，应该删一个攻击段，再补一段赞扬reformer...martin luther king & mahatma ganhdi...等jj帮我看完语言，我在一起修改吧


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Do the scandals focus people's attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, as the speaker asserts? While I concede that scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas, in some extend, indeed focus our attention on certain issue, however, I think that the speaker illogically ignores the adverse influence of scandals on society

It is true that scandals sometimes raise issues or problems overlooked by the society. With respect to politics, the scandals serve to warn people that do not naively believe in all the leaders. Several years ago, the news that the vice president of a charity institution in China appropriated the financial aid on his own business shocked the nation, since then donators strongly requires the government to intensify the supervision of all the national charity institutions. Another telling example is as for academia. A professor in a famous university in China published a book which is purely the translated vision of a book written by a British professor. This academic scandal evoked people to be suspicious of the so-called "authority" and also raise the related educational issues among public. In a word, the speaker's claim finds support from some empirical experience.

Conceding that this assertion is of some merits, I find that the speaker overemphasizes the positive effect of scandals while unjustifiably ignores the threat of scandals. First, purely focusing on scandals potentially renders public overlook the contribution of the main role of the scandal. Consider, for example, John Nash. As the inventor of Game Theory and winner of Noble Prize, the man who should win the honor of the whole society is always bothered by the unproved big scandals that he involves in some homosexual harassment which certainly weaken his contribution to the economic and mathematical field and his fame.

In the second place, the scandals tend to render people lose their own judgment. One telling example has to do with the king of music——Michel Jackson. Considering apart the known fact about what he has done, several years ago, while his illegal behavior was just exposed by media, there was no any solid evidence. In spite of insufficient evidence, public have started to blame him and fans have started to abandon him. As I see, all these behavior is unreasonable because without solid evidence a scandal just can be called “rumor” rather than “fact”. Unluckily, public sometimes leave their judgment and self-thinking to the mass medias which enable the scandals become the weapon of them.

Moreover, public has focus too much on the scandals instead of some more immediate human suffering. Nowadays, a scandal always easily becomes the head line news of magazines or newspapers and people usually pay more attention to them, especially the political and entertainment scandals, rather than some enduring problems, such as pollution, education and sustainable development. Actually, all of these problems have tight relation to our life and our descendants, which undoubtedly deserve more attention.

In conclusion, while people recognize the positive effect of scandals, we should avoid to overemphasize scandals. Not only because could the scandals render public unjustifiably overlooks the related people's contributions to the society but also because the scandals have deleterious influence people's capability of judging. And importantly, frequent scandals have occupied too much attention of public, which should be paid on some more immediate human problems.

[ 本帖最后由 benni 于 2006-6-23 23:31 编辑 ]

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------题目------
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.


------提纲------
1、的确有助于让人们关注一些问题
2、然而可能淡化绯闻主角对社会的贡献
3、在绯闻面前，公众通常一味听信媒体，以致丧失判断力
4、绯闻让人们忽略了很多更重要的社会问题


首先说一下，我今天改完觉得有点跑题，因为没有提到reformer & speaker，应该删一个攻击段，再补一段赞扬reformer...martin luther king & mahatma ganhdi...等jj帮我看完语言，我在一起修改吧


------正文------
Do the scandals focus people's attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, as the speaker asserts? While I concede that scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas, in some extend, indeed focus our attention on certain issue, however, I think that the speaker illogically ignores the adverse influence of scandals on society （我认为题目中只是申明丑闻的对公众注意力的吸引，并未声称这种吸引是好是坏。）

It is true that scandals sometimes raise issues or problems overlooked by the society. With respect to politics, the scandals serve to warn people that do not naively believe in all the leaders. Several years ago, the news that the vice president of a charity institution in China appropriated the financial aid on his own business shocked the nation, since then donators strongly requires（require） the government to intensify the supervision of all the national charity institutions. Another telling example is as for academia. A professor in a famous university in China published a book which is purely the translated vision（version）of a book written by a British professor. This academic scandal evoked people to be suspicious of the so-called "authority" and also raise the related educational issues among public. In a word, the speaker's claim finds（考虑下换成reveives？） support from some empirical experience.

Conceding that this assertion is of some merits, I find that the speaker overemphasizes the positive effect of scandals while unjustifiably ignores the threat of scandals. First, purely focusing on scandals potentially renders public overlook the contribution of the main role of the scandal. Consider, for example, John Nash. As the inventor of Game Theory and winner of Noble Prize, the man who should win the honor of the whole society is always bothered by the unproved big scandals that he involves in some homosexual harassment which certainly weaken his contribution to the economic and mathematical field and his （建议加一点修饰，不然和and前面相比显得太单薄了，比如honorable academic）fame.

In the second place, the scandals tend to render people lose their own judgment. One telling example has to do with the king of music——Michel Jackson. Considering apart the known fact about what he has done, several years ago, while his illegal behavior was just exposed by media, there was no any solid evidence. In spite of insufficient evidence, public have started to blame him and fans have started to abandon him. As I see, all these behavior is unreasonable because without solid evidence a scandal just can be called “rumor” rather than “fact”. Unluckily, public sometimes leave their judgment and self-thinking to the mass medias which enable the scandals become the weapon of them.（这里又不太懂了，让丑闻变成谁的武器？公众or传媒？感觉这一段观点没有阐述清楚。）

Moreover, public has focus（have focused） too much on the scandals instead of some more immediate human suffering. Nowadays, a scandal always easily becomes the head line news of magazines or newspapers and people usually pay more attention to them, especially the political and entertainment scandals, rather than some enduring problems, such as pollution, education and sustainable development. Actually, all of these problems have tight relation to our life and our descendants, which undoubtedly deserve more attention.

In conclusion, while people recognize the positive effect of scandals, we should avoid to overemphasize scandals. Not only because could the scandals render public unjustifiably overlooks the related people's contributions to the society but also because the scandals have deleterious influence（缺介词on） people's capability of judging. And （more）importantly, frequent scandals have occupied too much attention of public, which should be paid on some more immediate human problems.


个人感觉题目的意义benni理解得有点不对，关于useful也不知道是不是个中性词汇。整体来说，没有issue4写的好，benni要好好修改下哦！

benniUID: 2166321

谢咯~

这篇写得很蹩脚，主要感觉有点无话可说...修改中...