issue97【0710G 五一互助小组】第三次作业 by Ian

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======================Issue 97======================
【题目】"It is unforunate but true that political decisions and activities affect all aspects of people's lives."


The speaker claims that all aspects of people's lives are influenced by the political decisions and activities which is unfortune but true. I agree with the speaker it is true that we are being affected in all aspects, however, considering the complex of the issue, there are no easy or certain answers to claim whether or not we are unfortunate. On the balance, I hold the view that we should see it in more objective and positive way.

Admittedly, political decisions and activities do have a significant on us, such as culture, economy and our lives. Considering a country intending to develop its culture, it, by all means, implements a lot of measures and policies to protect and bolster its cultural resource. And in order to fulfill this aim, it may build museums, libraries, and other cultural intuition. Then, its people, in effect, surrounded by this cultural atmosphere, will become more civilized and know culture better. Indeed, compulsory induction, birth control, tax revenue, the effect of such policies has penetrated our lives ubiquitously.

One has to also admit that most of time, the political decisions and actives being taken are base on the level of economic development and practical situation of the nation. Take compulsory education for example, even the most muddle-headed leaders may know the significance of the education. In addition, as we known, a twelve year compulsory education is definitely better than a nine year one in heightening its educational level. However, the former require more educational resource and stronger economic level. And that is the case. We can not blame the political decisions and actives all the time. Because, inherently, the foundation of superstructure is practical situation we are in.

In fact, rather than regard this effects as unfortune, we should take a positive and objective attitude on them. Although some improper political decisions and actives, such as wrong economic implement, thoughtless diplomacy policy, will do harm to our lives. We do benefit a lot from many kinds of those the political decisions and actives. Medical treatment system, various subsidy such those policy which is the result of political decisions and actives, grantee our better lives.

Also, if we take a more positive respond to them, demonstrate our real willing. Then the government and political leaders may know better about what the people want, and what should do next. Suppose, some short sighted leaders take out numerous ridiculer and improper decisions, and its people, who merely keep the negative attitude and hold the view that they are unfortune,  taking no action may become even more unfortune because, definitely, more improper decision and actives will ensue.                  

Finally, government and political leaders, before making decisions and carrying out policies, should take the people's willing in consider, be circumspect and take the entire situation into account, and then serve to the people's lives and serve to the nation's culture, economy, and environment. Otherwise, a goverment which is incapable to govern its people will be overthrown without a doubt.

In sum, both people and political leaders should be more positive and sensible to the political decisions and activities.

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[ 本帖最后由 Tidusnake 于 2007-6-3 01:47 编辑 ]

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The speaker claims that all aspects of people's lives are influenced by the political decisions and activities which is unfortune but true. I agree with the speaker it is true that we are being affected in all aspects, however, considering the complex of the issue, there are no easy or certain answers to claim whether or not we are unfortunate. On the balance, I hold the view that we should see it in more objective and positive way.

Admittedly, political decisions and activities do have a significant effect on us(our lives), such as culture, economy and our lives. Considering a country intending to develop its culture, it, by all means, (这里怎么3个逗号，it这代什么)implements a lot of measures and policies to protect and bolster its cultural resource. And in order to fulfill this aim, it may build museums, libraries, and other cultural intuition. Then, its people, in effect, surrounded by this cultural atmosphere, will become more civilized and know culture better. Indeed, compulsory induction, birth control, tax revenue, the effect of such policies has penetrated our lives ubiquitously.

One has to also admit that most of time, the political decisions and actives being taken are base on the level of economic development and practical situation of the nation（这句作为TS不恰当，题目是要论证political decisions 对我们生活的影响，而不是…………）. Take compulsory education for example, even the most muddle-headed leaders may know the significance of the education. In addition, as we known, a twelve year compulsory education is definitely better than a nine year one in heightening its educational level. However, the former require more educational resource and stronger economic level. And that is the case. We can not blame the political decisions and actives all the time. Because, inherently, the foundation of superstructure is practical situation we are in.

In fact, rather than regard this effects as unfortune, we should take a positive and objective attitude on them. Although some improper political decisions and actives, such as wrong economic implement, thoughtless diplomacy policy, will do harm to our lives. We do benefit a lot from many kinds of those the political decisions and actives. Medical treatment system, various subsidy such those policy which is the result of political decisions and actives, grantee our better lives.（感觉展开一点比较好）

Also, if we take a more positive respond to them, demonstrate our real willing. Then the government and political leaders may know better about what the people want,（这句作提示感觉不恰当，论证这个论点有意义吗？） and what should do next. Suppose, some short sighted leaders take out numerous ridiculer and improper decisions, and its people, who merely keep the negative attitude and hold the view that they are unfortune,  taking no action may become even more unfortune because, definitely, more improper decision and actives will ensue.                  

Finally, government and political leaders, before making decisions and carrying out policies, should take the people's willing in consider, be circumspect and take the entire situation into account, and then serve to the people's lives and serve to the nation's culture, economy, and environment. Otherwise, a goverment which is incapable to govern its people will be overthrown without a doubt.（感觉这段可以作为结尾，与题目关系不大）

In sum, both people and political leaders should be more positive and sensible to the political decisions and activities.
感觉作者对题目的理解不太对，几个分论点都没有靠题目的意思，而且在每段的论证上说服力不够，很少的几句话，感觉应该展开

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The speaker claims that all aspects of people's lives are influenced by the political decisions and activities which is unfortune but true. I agree with the speaker it is true that we are being affected in all aspects, however, considering the complex of the issue, there are no easy or certain answers to claim whether or not we are unfortunate. On the balance, I hold the view that we should see it in more objective and positive way.

Admittedly, political decisions and activities do have a significant on us, such as culture, economy and our lives.TS很模糊,而且感觉这句话很别扭. Considering a country intending to develop its culture, it, by all means, implements a lot of measures and policies to protect and bolster its cultural resource. And in order to fulfill this aim, it may build museums, libraries, and other cultural intuition. Then, its people, in effect, surrounded by this cultural atmosphere, will become more civilized and know culture better. Indeed, compulsory induction, birth control, tax revenue, the effect of such policies has penetrated our lives ubiquitously.TS说的几方面都要论证一下吧.现在感觉这一段很单薄,很没有力度.


One has to also admit that most of time, the political decisions and actives being taken are base on the level of economic development and practical situation of the nation. 似乎没有和日常生活联系起来啊Take compulsory education for example, even the most muddle-headed leaders may know the significance of the education.这句又和TS联系不上了...而且这句又是那种套话,没有自己深入的想法In addition, as we known, a twelve year compulsory education is definitely better than a nine year one in heightening its educational level. However, the former require more educational resource and stronger economic level. And that is the case. We can not blame the political decisions and actives all the time. Because, inherently, the foundation of superstructure is practical situation we are in.这一段问题很大,大部分篇幅都在说和主题没有关系,甚至是和TS没有关系的话.

这里和前面联系的不是很紧密,但是我这里做的也不好,在思考解决的方法.In fact, rather than regard this effects as unfortune, we should take a positive and objective attitude on them. Although some improper political decisions and actives, such as wrong economic implement, thoughtless diplomacy policy, will do harm to our lives. 有什么坏处?We do benefit a lot from many kinds of those the political decisions and actives. Medical treatment system, various subsidy such those policy which is the result of political decisions and actives, grantee our better lives.还是很单薄...不要总说一些结论,要把理由说清楚再说结论.

Also, if we take a more positive respond to them, demonstrate our real willing. Then the government and political leaders may know better about what the people want, and what should do next. Suppose, some short sighted leaders take out numerous ridiculer and improper decisions, and its people, who merely keep the negative attitude and hold the view that they are unfortune,  taking no action may become even more unfortune because, definitely, more improper decision and actives will ensue.                  

Finally, government and political leaders, before making decisions and carrying out policies, should take the people's willing in consider, be circumspect and take the entire situation into account, and then serve to the people's lives and serve to the nation's culture, economy, and environment. Otherwise, a goverment which is incapable to govern its people will be overthrown without a doubt.这一段想法是不错的,不过展开一下就好了


In sum, both people and political leaders should be more positive and sensible to the political decisions and activities.