Issue152 互拍才能进步!:)

zmmaryUID: 2105117

“The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies.”

提纲:不同意
1.profit maximization is the cheif responsibility of the corporate executives
2.need be constrained, while law is insufficient in doing that
3.moreover, the corporate executives owe their weathy lives to the society
4.the restraints should not go too far

The corporate executives are inherently required to take every strategy to make as much money as possible for their companies by their particular positions in the companies. However, these strategies should be constrained by certain social responsibilities, which do not merely amount to compliance to the law.

No one can deny that executives should make utmost efforts to ensure the profit maximization of their companies, and the reason for doing this can chiefly be stated as: they are corporate executives. Profit maximization is the occupational responsibility of corporate executives, so once people become corporate executives, they are assigned such a responsibility.  This is especially true when executives are employed, which is the most common situation in today's society, because the employers who paid the money have the right to get rewarded.

Yet, because their companies depend on the society to survive and they are social members themselves, the corporate executives should not act without certain social considerations, which do not only mean the law, for the law is insufficient in guiding the behaviors of the corporate executives. It is common sense that the law always lags behind the development of the society. The most common situation is that it is only when the social problems become severe enough to catch the attention of the public that relative laws will be established. One apt example is pollution. Only when the pollution problems become so severe that they show the potential to threat the very existence of human beings, certain laws are established to prohibit certain industrial behaviors that might lead to pollution of the environment. So if the corporate executives merely act by the law, they might do harm to the society whose results are undesirable even to themselves.

Moreover, although not required by the law, the corporate executives are obliged to take certain approaches to make the world a better place, because of their particular identities and financial abilities. Corporate executives are generally well-paid if they are successful ones. Where do their accomplishments come from? Apparently, it's because of their efficient management of the companies, which can only be achieved with the support of the mass. Thus it is reasonable that the corporate executives owe their wealthy lives to the society, to which they should do something to pay their debts. Some people are astonished when the heard that Bill Gates donate a large sum of money to the disadvantaged children each year. To the contrary, I am not surprised at all, because in my mind, he is just doing what he should do.

However, we should never go too far to assert that corporate executives should show moral standards as high as that of the communists, who always claim to put the public and the others in a superior situation. Such high moral standards might lead to disastrous results both to the companies and to the public. For example, if one company pays too much attention to the reduction of pollution, it may find it hard to keep its products and services at low prices. The high prices of its products and services can put the customers showing strong desire for its products into great dilemma. Meanwhile, the high prices will lead to a decreasing of the company' customers, which might put the company into financial trouble or even lead to the bankruptcy of that company in the long run.

In sum, though profit maximization is the chief responsibility of the corporate executives, such a responsibility should be restrained by certain social considerations other than the law. However, such restraints should not go too far to do harm to both the customers and the companies.

11yvetteUID: 2102418

先占个座哈
^_^

jeffu-uh-ohUID: 205335

也先占个位置哈~

11yvetteUID: 2102418

“The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies.”

提纲:不同意
1.profit maximization is the cheif responsibility of the corporate executives
2.need be constrained, while law is insufficient in doing that
3.moreover, the corporate executives owe their weathy lives to the society
4.the restraints should not go too far

The corporate executives are inherently required to take every strategy to make as much money as possible for their companies by their particular positions in the companies. However, these strategies should be constrained by certain social responsibilities, which do not merely amount to compliance to the law. 这个开头简单明了,而且将自己的立场给出得很明确,这是我需要学习的地方

No one can deny that executives should make utmost efforts to ensure the profit maximization of their companies, and the reason for doing this can chiefly be stated as: they are corporate executives. Profit maximization is the occupational responsibility of corporate executives, so once people become corporate executives, they are assigned such a responsibility.  This is especially true 因为全文的遣词都挺活挺好的,这里的'true'显得不太生动,可以再斟酌 when executives are employed, which is the most common situation in today's society, because the employers who paid the money have the right to get rewarded 这句的解释没怎么看明白,"雇主有得到报赏的权力"?感觉不很能说明问题.

Yet, because their companies depend on the society to survive and they are social members themselves, the corporate executives should not act without certain social considerations, which do not only mean the law, for the law is insufficient in guiding the behaviors of the corporate executives. 嗯,这一点提得很在理,因为law只是最低道德标准而已 It is common sense that the law always lags behind the development of the society. The most common situation 如果能将common替换成prevalence 或general或其他亦可,就不会显得过于重复"common"这个词了 is that it is only when the social problems become severe enough to catch the attention of the public that relative laws will be established. One apt example is pollution. Only when the pollution problems become so severe that they show the potential to threat the very existence of human beings, certain laws are established to prohibit certain industrial behaviors that might lead to pollution of the environment. So if the corporate executives merely act by the law, they might do harm to the society whose results are undesirable even to themselves.

Moreover, although not required by the law, the corporate executives are obliged to take certain approaches to make the world a better place, because of their particular identities and financial abilities. Corporate executives are generally well-paid if they are successful ones. Where do their accomplishments come from? Apparently, it's because of their efficient management of the companies, which can only be achieved with the support of the mass. Thus it is reasonable that the corporate executives owe their wealthy lives to the society, to which they should do something to pay their debts. Some people are astonished when the they heard that Bill Gates donate a large sum of money to the disadvantaged children each year. To the contrary, I am not surprised at all, because in my mind, he is just doing what he should do.

However, we should never go too far to assert that corporate executives should show moral standards as high as that of the communists, who always claim to put the public and the others in a superior situation. Such high moral standards might lead to disastrous results both to the companies and to the public. For example,这个example和先前在B2中提到的例子有点自相矛盾的意味 if one company pays too much attention to the reduction of pollution, it may find it hard to keep its products and services at low prices. The high prices of its products and services can put the customers showing strong desire for its products into great dilemma. Meanwhile, the high prices will lead to a decreasing of the company' customers, which might put the company into financial trouble or even lead to the bankruptcy of that company in the long run.这段的让步显得有点牵强啊~

In sum, though profit maximization is the chief responsibility of the corporate executives, such a responsibility should be restrained by certain social considerations other than the law. However, such restraints should not go too far to do harm to both the customers and the companies.

文章的水平比我高多了,尤其是词句的变换,太值得我学习了,真赞!
而且句与句之间的关系也让人明了;只是在however段中的这个让步还是值得商榷的,毕竟我们都知道,既然是商人,那他们的道德意识就不会达到所谓的communist的境界,其实不单商人,communist基本就是utopia,大众也不是人人都能想到做到的啊
呵呵,只是一些个人看法,欢迎置疑,一起讨论,一起前进:)

zmmaryUID: 2105117

非常感谢!!!!
不要谦虚啦,说得很好啦--指批评的部分.再自己夸自己就要被捧上天了.
:lol我看看你的去.

11yvetteUID: 2102418

如果还有什么可以探讨的,咱们继续啊~~:)

zmmaryUID: 2105117

呵呵,说老实话.这是我写的Issue中思路上比较满意的一篇啦.
大家互相学习,共同进步吧.
有什么想法再交流噢.
现在在看你的,一会儿要上自习,可能晚上才能贴给你.

11yvetteUID: 2102418

看了你给我作修改的帖了
太感谢了啊(还冒着可能打不到水的危险;))~~~
我在语言方面真是太弱了
对于句式的变换也没什么概念
sigh……

zmmaryUID: 2105117

呵呵,大家一起加油吧.:)

jeffu-uh-ohUID: 205335

首先对Zmmary MM 的高效率和高成效投以仰慕的眼光。

老实说我拿到这个题目，一点也不知道也写什么。看到MM写的，才恍然大悟，原来这样写啊。所以没什么好改， 我在学习呢。

The corporate executives are inherently required to take every strategy to make as much money as possible for their companies by their particular positions in the companies. However, these strategies should be constrained by certain social responsibilities, which do not merely amount to compliance to the law.

No one can deny that executives should make utmost efforts to ensure the profit maximization of their companies, and the reason for doing this can chiefly be stated as: they are corporate executives. Profit maximization is the occupational responsibility of corporate executives, so once people become corporate executives, they are assigned such a responsibility.  This is especially true when executives are employed, which is the most common situation in today's society, because the employers who paid the 去掉 money have the right to get rewarded. 感觉这段的表达方式不是那么地好。不过不影响全文 ：-）

Yet, because their companies depend on the society to survive and they are social members themselves, the corporate executives should not act without certain social considerations, which do not only mean 口语话了，refer to怎么样？ the law, for the law is insufficient in guiding the behaviors of the corporate executives. It is common sense that the law always lags behind the development of the society. The most common situation is that it is only when the social problems become severe enough to catch the attention of the public that relative 一般用relevant laws will be established. 赞一个！而且强调句也用的很好！One apt example is pollution. Only when the pollution problems become so severe that they show the potential to threat the very existence of human beings, certain laws are established to prohibit certain industrial behaviors that might lead to pollution of the environment. So if the corporate executives merely act by the law, they might do harm to the society whose results are undesirable even to themselves. 哇，我想不到这个社会问题

Moreover, although not required by the law, the corporate executives are obliged to take certain approaches to make the world a better place, because of their particular identities and financial abilities. Corporate executives are generally well-paid if they are successful ones. Where do their accomplishments come from? Apparently, it's because of their efficient management of the companies, which can only be achieved with the support of the mass. 不大懂这个是指什么？ Thus it is reasonable that the corporate executives owe their wealthy lives to the society, to which they should do something to pay their debts. Some people are astonished when the heard that Bill Gates donate a large sum of money to the disadvantaged children each year. To the contrary, I am not surprised at all, because in my mind, he is just doing what he should do. 如果讲到executives should set a good example for society that other people will follow 怎么样？不仅仅是募捐

However, we should never go too far to assert that corporate executives should show moral standards as high as that of the communists, who always claim to put the public and the others in a superior situation. Such high moral standards might lead to disastrous results both to the companies and to the public. For example, if one company pays too much attention to the reduction of pollution, it may find it hard to keep its products and services at low prices. The high prices of its products and services can put the customers showing strong desire for its products into great dilemma. Meanwhile, the high prices will lead to a decreasing of the company' customers, which might put the company into financial trouble or even lead to the bankruptcy of that company in the long run. 其实这段不让人信服。怎么可能会说到公司太关心到工业污染，会导致它的产品价格高于它人，以至于公司破产。虽然有点现实，但不是违背了当今政府的说法吗？其实你前两段的反驳很不错了，一说到对社会的responsibilities; 二说到对社会的contributions。但是扯到这里，对文章有作用吗？只是个人建议，呵呵

In sum, though profit maximization is the chief responsibility of the corporate executives, such a responsibility should be restrained by certain social considerations other than the law. However, such restraints should not go too far to do harm to both the customers and the companies.

zmmaryUID: 2105117

谢谢,我写这篇的时候对语言很有点失去知觉了,那几句是要改改
(如果讲到executives should set a good example for society that other people will follow 怎么样？不仅仅是募捐)不错的建议.其实写完这段的时候有些觉得应该写成:The higher the capacity is, the greater the responsibility is.
最后那个是很有问题,打算倒戈了,改成反面的,拉到前面去.

[ Last edited by zmmary on 2005-7-2 at 17:48 ]