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georgiayzhUID: 2225237

Issue 7
"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
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部分否定。
论据：1，摄像机的优势：客观，真实。
      2，但是纸笔纪录能够加入主观的描述，
      3，两者之间需要平衡。图文并茂。
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  Has the video camera as a form of documentation been superior to written records, as the speaker claims? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that, in today’s digital age, the video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life; however, I argument that to some extent written records cannot be replaced in documenting abstract and subjective information.

  The video camera, as a product of the advanced digital technology, do provide an objective and convincing record of our contemporary life. Unlike the written records, the video camera can gain moving pictures in the 100 percent accuracy to record every detail of whatever an happening accident, a significant ceremony, a family party and so forth. For one compelling example, in the legal proceeding, it is indispensable for the judge to make decisions from the empirical evidences recorded by the video camera, otherwise, if recorded by written words, the evidences cannot be totally objective for some subjective depicting and inadvertent spelling mistakes. It is said that we human-beings can capture only 75 percent of what we are watching, thus we can convey the general information of the circumstance, yet when it comes to the video camera, with its high accuracy as we know, we can capture every hard-to-notice detail to reflect the truth of the events. Especially for the journey’s work, camera’s detailed pictures will add to the reliability of their conveying. The video camera, as a result of its high accuracy, brings more and more convenience and positive effect to our daily lives as well as entertainment.

  However, it is a bit rash to say this new way of recording will take place of the written records. Written records, in my view, is a somewhat well-rounded way in recoding not only the objective event happening under some certain circumstances but the subjective perspectives of the event itself , which is equally important for the readers insofar as we can gain some far-reaching meanings as well as the ostensible depiction of the happenings. In addition, sometimes it seems a waste to use such an accurate equipment to record the meaningless procedures. For one supporting example, when we recall what we did yesterday, we may see from the written diary that “I have a happy chat with my best friends”, while is it necessary for us to record every exciting action of our bantering, every complex expression of our feeling, or even every trivial word of our conversation with the video camera? Every coin has two sides; we should clearly recognize the foibles of the video camera as well as its convenient advantages in contemporary life.

  Both of the above ways of recording have advantages and disadvantages, while associating them we may gain all attractive aspects of one proceeding. On the one hand, on needs look no more than the chemical procedure, in which as know that we need to record not only the optical results which may be gained from the accurate cameras but also the odor of the chemicals which is to some extent crucial traits not to be neglect and seems to be beyond the capability of the cameras. On the other hand, while under some circumstance the two ways of recording can compensate with each other, the video camera captures objective pictures with high accuracy to tell people the truth of one event at the same time written records write down the comments of the critics to reflect the meaningful perspectives which may be instructive for the public to evaluate the event. Accordingly , we should strike a balance between them to record more useful information for our later generations.

  In sum, I broadly agree with the speaker that the video camera plays a more and more significant role in contemporary insofar as it has a high-accuracy and objective view; however, written records cannot be replayed by this new way for the reason that it provides us with something subjective and instructive. As a result, in my view we should place balanced emphasis on them to make well-rounded benefits.

queeniezUID: 2203712

Has the video camera as a form of documentation been superior to written records, as the speaker claims? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that, in today’s digital age, the video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life; however, I argument （arguer） that to some extent written records cannot be replaced in documenting abstract and subjective information.  

  The video camera, as a product of the advanced digital technology, do （dose） provide an objective and convincing record of our contemporary life. Unlike the written records, the video camera can gain moving pictures in the 100 percent accuracy to record every detail of whatever an (a) happening accident, a significant ceremony, a family party and so forth. For one compelling (用在这里是指“令人信服的”吗) example, in the legal proceeding, it is indispensable for the judge to make decisions from the empirical evidences recorded by the video camera, otherwise, if recorded by written words, the evidences cannot be totally objective for some subjective depicting and inadvertent spelling mistakes. It is said that we human-beings can capture only 75 percent of what we are watching, thus we can convey the general information of the circumstance, yet when it comes to the video camera, with its high accuracy as we know, we can capture every hard-to-notice detail to reflect the truth of the events. Especially for the journey’s work, camera’s detailed pictures will add to the reliability of their conveying. The video camera, as a result of its high accuracy, brings more and more convenience and positive effect to our daily lives as well as entertainment. （既然你强调了video camera 比人眼精确，可以举个“运动会赛跑冲刺图像记录”的例子,拙见）

  However, it is a bit rash to say this new way of recording will take place of the written records. Written records, in my view, is a somewhat well-rounded way in recoding not only the objective event happening under some certain circumstances but the subjective perspectives of the event itself , which is equally important for the readers insofar as we can gain some far-reaching meanings as well as the ostensible depiction of the happenings. In addition, sometimes it seems a waste to use such an accurate equipment to record the meaningless procedures. For one supporting example, when we recall what we did yesterday, we may see from the written diary that “I have a happy chat with my best friends”, while is it necessary for us to record every exciting action of our bantering, every complex expression of our feeling, or even every trivial word of our conversation with the video camera? Every coin has two sides; we should clearly recognize the foibles of the video camera as well as its convenient advantages in contemporary life.（这段跟我对document的理解有点出入， 我觉的记录document 就应该是纯客观的，不需要加入主管因素，欢迎讨论。）

  Both of the above ways of recording have advantages and disadvantages, while associating them we may gain all attractive aspects of one proceeding. On the one hand, on needs look no more than the chemical procedure （这句没看懂，逗号之间的部分）, in which as know that we need to record not only the optical results which may be gained from the accurate cameras but also the odor of the chemicals which is to some extent crucial traits not to be neglect and seems to be beyond the capability of the cameras. （这个例子举的好） On the other hand, while under some circumstance the two ways of recording can compensate with each other, the video camera captures objective pictures with high accuracy to tell people the truth of one event at the same time written records write down the comments of the critics to reflect the meaningful perspectives which may be instructive for the public to evaluate the event. Accordingly, we should strike a balance between them to record more useful information for our later generations.

  In sum, I broadly（可以这么说否？） agree with the speaker that the video camera plays a more and more significant role in contemporary insofar as it has a high-accuracy and objective view; however, written records cannot be replayed by this new way for the reason that it provides us with something subjective and instructive. As a result, in my view we should place balanced emphasis on them to make well-rounded benefits.

（整体都很好，逻辑结构和用词都值得学习！）

sly60321UID: 2228803

Has the video camera as a form of documentation been superior to written records, as the speaker claims? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that, in today’s digital age, the video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life; however, I argument[argue] that to some extent written records cannot be replaced in documenting abstract and subjective information.

  The video camera, as a product of the advanced digital technology, do[does] provide an objective and convincing record of our contemporary life. Unlike the written records, the video camera can gain moving pictures in the 100 percent accuracy to record every detail of whatever[such as] an happening accident, a significant ceremony, a family party and so forth. For one compelling example, in the legal proceeding, it is indispensable for the judge to make decisions from the empirical evidences recorded by the video camera, otherwise, if recorded by written words, the evidences cannot be totally objective for some subjective depicting and inadvertent spelling mistakes. It is said that we human-beings can capture only 75 percent of what we are watching, thus we can convey the general information of the circumstance, yet when it comes to the video camera, with its high accuracy as we know, we can capture every hard-to-notice detail to reflect the truth of the events. Especially for the journey’s work, camera’s detailed pictures will add to the reliability of their conveying. The video camera, as a result of its high accuracy, brings more and more convenience and positive effect to our daily lives as well as entertainment.

  However, it is a bit rash to say this new way of recording will take place of the written records. Written records, in my view, is a somewhat well-rounded way in recoding not only the objective event happening under some certain circumstances but the subjective perspectives of the event itself , which is equally important for the readers insofar as we can gain some far-reaching meanings as well as the ostensible depiction of the happenings. In addition, sometimes it seems a waste to use such an accurate equipment to record the meaningless procedures. For one supporting example, when we recall what we did yesterday, we may see from the written diary that “I have a happy chat with my best friends”, while is it necessary for us to record every exciting action of our bantering, every complex expression of our feeling, or even every trivial word of our conversation with the video camera? [记录谈话细节不是不需要应该是不可能吧]Every coin has two sides; we should clearly recognize the foibles of the video camera as well as its convenient advantages in contemporary life.

  Both of the above ways of recording have advantages and disadvantages, while associating them we may gain all attractive aspects of one proceeding. On the one hand, on[one] needs look no more than the chemical procedure, in which as know that we need to record not only the optical results[据我所知，经验数据的采集和照相没有太大关系] which may be gained from the accurate cameras but also the odor of the chemicals which is to some extent crucial traits not to be neglect and seems to be beyond the capability of the cameras. On the other hand, while under some circumstance the two ways of recording can compensate with each other, the video camera captures objective pictures with high accuracy to tell people the truth of one event at the same time written records write down the comments of the critics to reflect the meaningful perspectives which may be instructive for the public to evaluate the event. Accordingly , we should strike a balance between them to record more useful information for our later generations.

  In sum, I broadly agree with the speaker that the video camera plays a more and more significant role in contemporary insofar as it has a high-accuracy and objective view; however, written records cannot be replayed by this new way for the reason that it provides us with something subjective and instructive. As a result, in my view we should place balanced[equal, balanced是和谐的意思] emphasis on them to make well-rounded benefits.
[不用每次写6、7百字，500字最合适，这样才有希望在规定时间内写完]

fenghua9801UID: 2191885

Has the video camera as a form of documentation been superior to written records, as the speaker claims? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that, in today’s digital age, the video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life; however, I argument that to some extent written records cannot be replaced in documenting abstract and subjective information.

The video camera, as a product of the advanced digital technology, do[是不是does啊？] provide an objective and convincing record of our contemporary life. Unlike the written records, the video camera can gain moving pictures in the 100 percent accuracy to record every detail of whatever an[a] happening accident, a significant ceremony, a family party and so forth. For one compelling example, in the legal proceeding, it is indispensable for the judge to make decisions from the empirical evidences recorded by the video camera,[逗号换成分号] otherwise, if recorded by written words, the evidences cannot be totally objective for some subjective depicting and inadvertent spelling mistakes. It is said that we human-beings can capture only 75 percent of what we are watching, thus we can convey the general information of the circumstance, yet when it comes to the video camera, with its high accuracy as we know, we can capture every hard-to-notice detail to reflect the truth of the events. Especially for the journey’s work, camera’s detailed pictures will add to the reliability of their conveying. The video camera, as a result of its high accuracy, brings more and more convenience and positive effect to our daily lives as well as entertainment.
[例子举的满好啊～！]

However, it is a bit rash to say this new way of recording will take place of the written records. Written records, in my view, is a somewhat well-rounded way in recoding not only the objective event happening under some certain circumstances but[是不是该加上also?] the subjective perspectives of the event itself , which is equally important for the readers insofar as we can gain some far-reaching meanings as well as the ostensible depiction of the happenings. In addition, sometimes it seems a waste to use such an accurate equipment to record the meaningless procedures. For one supporting example, when we recall what we did yesterday, we may see from the written diary that “I have a happy chat with my best friends”, while is it necessary for us to record every exciting action of our bantering, every complex expression of our feeling, or even every trivial word of our conversation with the video camera? Every coin has two sides; we should clearly recognize the foibles[这个词一般指的是性格上的缺点吧，用在这里合试吗？] of the video camera as well as its convenient advantages in contemporary life.


Both of the above ways of recording have advantages and disadvantages, while associating them we may gain all attractive aspects of one proceeding. On the one hand, on[one] needs look no more than the chemical procedure, in which as know that we need to record not only the optical results which may be gained from the accurate cameras but also the odor of the chemicals which is to some extent crucial traits not to be neglect[ed] and seems to be[to be 去掉] beyond the capability of the cameras. On the other hand, while under some circumstance the two ways of recording can compensate with each other, the video camera captures objective pictures with high accuracy to tell people the truth of one event at the same time written records write down[records可以发出这个动作吗？我觉得应该删掉][ written records of the comments……] the comments of the critics to reflect the meaningful perspectives which may be instructive for the public to evaluate the event. Accordingly, we should strike a balance between them to record more useful information for our later generations[换成descendants是不是好点？].

  In sum, I broadly agree with the speaker that the video camera plays a more and more significant role in contemporary insofar as it has a high-accuracy and objective view; however, written records cannot be replayed[replaced] by this new way for the reason that it provides us with something subjective and instructive. As a result, in my view we should place balanced emphasis on them to make well-rounded benefits

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