我的issue144，求拍

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我的第一篇，希望大家使劲拍。
谢谢
提纲如下：
1. 当内在价值不能为人们所利用和欣赏时，我们不能将其称为具有社会价值。艺术家创造出的作品具有内在价值，但是如果没有评论家的解读和评论，它的内在价值并不能为社会所承认，从这个意义上，我们可以说it is the critic,not the artist, who gives society something of lasting value.
2. 如果没有评论家，人民大众就无从理解和认识作品中的深刻含义。真正优秀的作品也会被埋没。
3. 我们必须承认艺术家原创性的工作为艺术的不断向前发展作出了贡献，但是评论家却使艺术风格和作品更加繁荣与多元化，使好的艺术形态得以传承和发展。
4. 综上，是由于评论家使艺术家创造的价值得以显现，从而为作品带来社会价值。

    Who gives society something of lasting value, the artist or the critic? People may possiblly support the artist because obviously it is the artist who creates the works of value, but I doubt that. What the artist creates can be regarded as the works' intrinsic value but not the social value when it can not possiblly be understood and accepted by the mass. Since only the critic with plenty of knowledge, experience and insights can help analysing and evaluating the works therefore reveal its value and make it understood by the society as a whole, we can say that it is the critic, not the artist, who gives the SOCIETY something of lasting value.

    In the area of art critique, people could be so strongly circumscribed by their limited knowledge and horizon that they can not understand the works with accuracy. Just like without Bole, the man who can tell which is the excellant horse that can run a thousand miles incessantly from many ones in the old famous Chinese story, the excellant horse may not be found and explored, without the critic's insightful comments, many masterpieces today, say Leonardo da Vinci's Mona Lisa Smile and Van Gogh's Sunflower, may be considered as waste papers that no one cares.

    Admittedly, it is the artist who contribute much to the development of art by their original creations. In thousands of years, they create numerous pieces of works of diversity. They are the basis of art progress. But on the other hand, the critic actually made the art accepted by many people thus promote its prosperity and development among people of different vocations.
   
    In sum, the critic makes it possible for the public to understand the intrinsic value of the works which is created by the artist thus give the society its lasting value.Only through the efferts of both the artist and the critic, can art progress and become more prosperous.（319 words）

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Who gives society something of lasting value, the artist or the critic? People may possiblly support the artist because obviously it is the artist who creates the works of value, but I doubt that. What the artist creates can be regarded as the works' intrinsic value but not the social value when it can not possiblly be understood and accepted by the mass. Since only the critic with plenty of knowledge, experience and insights can help analysing and evaluating the works therefore reveal its value and make it understood by the society as a whole, we can say that it is the critic, not the artist, who gives the SOCIETY something of lasting value.（给lasting value加上定义会不会好一点）

    In the area of art critique, people could be so strongly circumscribed by their limited knowledge and horizon that they can not understand the works with accuracy. Just like without Bole, the man who can tell which is the excellant horse that can run a thousand miles incessantly（好像讲的不是特别明白，千里马是强调日行千里而不是一直跑一千里把，） from many ones in the old famous Chinese story, the excellant horse may not be found and explored, without the critic's insightful comments, （前面是句号吧，这里应该加连接词）many masterpieces today, say Leonardo da Vinci's Mona Lisa Smile and Van Gogh's Sunflower, may be considered as waste papers that no one cares.

    Admittedly, it is the artist who contribute much to the development of art by their original creations. In thousands of years, they create numerous pieces of works of diversity. They are the basis of art progress. But on the other hand, the critic actually made the art accepted by many people thus promote its prosperity and development among people of different vocations.（这一段虽然有让步，但是和上一段内容没什么不同，合成一段是不是好一些？）
   
    In sum, the critic makes it possible for the public to understand the intrinsic value of the works which is created by the artist thus give the society its lasting value.Only through the efferts of both the artist and the critic, can art progress and become more prosperous

谢谢c0053帮我批改～
看了一遍，语法我不太行，所以语法方面就不说了～
用词比我好……
不过内容稍微简单了一点，不过也很集中，就是说critic把意义告诉了大众
也许第一段给这个lasting value加上定义，然后把第三段合并到第二段，再加一段（加一个分论点）会丰满一些
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