COMEON作文小组------santong10月14日作业

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8)A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

一所大学计划在你的国内建一个新的研究中心。有人希望建立商业研究中心，有人希望建立农业研究中心，你推荐哪种？(185,建造问题)

In my country, the most problem must be the huge population.  And we are in a developing country where rich people are not the most percent in total. So, I suggest the university to develop a research center for agriculture in my country.

The first reason is that to solve the population problem in my country, we should firstly and necessarily to make sure the foods are enough to take all people far from famine. And one survey in my country indicated that there were more than one out of three people worried about their livelihood indeed. Since people become more and more during the couples of tens of years, one new agriculture research center will help to accelerate to solve the food problem and maybe scientists will invent some sort of new seed which can grow fast and harvest more at one time.

Another important reason is that most farmers in my country still use initial tools to work when many developed country have used high technological machines to work on the farm. If we have a research center for agriculture, scientists there may develop some auto machines instead of human forces to work for farmers. Then farmers would not have to be busy seeding, irrigating, harvesting fruits all day long and have little time to entertain. High technology will raise the efficiency of the farm work and will also bring more spare time to farmers.

All in all, building a new research center for agriculture is better than any other plans in my country. Not only the center will help producing more food supplies to my country and even to the whole world, but also it can bring much happiness to the farmer.

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In my country, the most(biggest, predominant, most substantial...) problem must be the huge population.  And we are in a developing country where rich people are not the most percent in total. So, I suggest the university to develop a research center for agriculture in my country.(如果楼主的意思是人口多就需要更多的粮食，更多的粮食需要农业更好地发展来保证，而建立一个农业研究中心可以帮助农业更好的发展，那么应该讲清楚。老外的思维不像我们这样会拐弯抹角，他们很直接，一定要把话都说道表面上)

The first reason is that to solve the population problem in my country, we should firstly and necessarily to make sure the foods are enough to take all people far from famine. And one survey in my country indicated that there were more than one out of three people worried about their livelihood indeed. Since people become more and more (是不是少了什么词？)during the couples of tens of years, one new agriculture research center will help to accelerate to solve the food problem and maybe scientists will invent some sort of new seed which can grow fast and harvest more at one time. （每段开头最好在第一句话就把分论点讲明，而且一定要跟主题有联系。像这段我猜楼主要表达的意思是农业中心可以帮助粮食增产）

Another important reason is that most farmers in my country still use initial tools to work when many developed country have used high technological machines to work on the farm. If we have a research center for agriculture, scientists there may develop some auto machines instead of human forces to work for farmers. Then farmers would not have to be busy seeding, irrigating, harvesting fruits all day long and have little time to entertain. High technology will raise the efficiency of the farm work and will also bring more spare time to farmers.（这段和上面一样，把“农业中心可以提高农业的科技化水平”这个分论点当头提出）

All in all, building a new research center for agriculture is better than any other plans in my country. Not only the center will help producing more food supplies to my country and even to the whole world, but also it can bring much happiness to the farmer.（结尾不够有力）

楼主估计刚开始写，字数少了点，语言还可以但总觉得有些许生涩。论证方面，建议楼主好好读读OG上对独立写作的要求以及Rater对范文的评语，明确托福写作的一些规范和惯例。继续努力，我还有三天就考试了，不方便帮你多改，你就多参考一下小组里其他写得比较好的同学的吧。