Argument140【LOVEAW小组】第9次作业

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时间不够用，好多东西都没有说清楚的~~
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140The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.

"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

In this report, the author recommends that the university should give Professor Thomas a $10,000 salary raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson. This recommendation bases on a series of unwarranted assumptions, yet it is unpersuasive as it stands.

First of all, the author's conclusion that Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary based on an assumption that all the teaching ability of Professor Thomas is admitted by the students. The mere fact that her classes are among the largest at the university can not conclude to the assumption. It is high possible that her class is much easier than any other class in the department. Maybe students in favor of the class for the reason that they can easy get high mark. The homework Professor Thomas left may be less than other teachers, so students want to choose the course. Any of these scenarios, if true, would serve to undermine this assumption.

Secondly, the author's conclusion also relies on another assumption that her research abilities have also be accepted. To justify this assumption, the author provides an evidence that she brought in research grants which are more than he salary in each of the two years. However, we are told nothing about the research grants she brought in earlier years. There is a possibility that she did not introduce enough grants in those years. Only two year's grants can not contribute to her excellent research abilities. Even if she gets enough grants every year, it does not mean that her research ability is excellent. A teacher's research ability is mainly measured by the accomplishment he/she contribute to the realm of science; the research grants only  can grant that she has sufficient funds to do research. Without ruling out all these possible factors, the author can not confidently conclude that she worth the salary she gets.

Finally, even assuming that all the assumptions above is true, the recommendation that promoting Professor Thomas and raise her salary is unsounded.  As the author claims, Professor Thomas may leave Elm City University for another college. However, there is no evidence to show that this is the case, nor does the author fail to substantiate the assumption. Moreover, even if her teaching and research ability is excellent, these bear no relation to the administration ability. The author do not provide any evidence to convince us that Professor Thomas can manage the department well and she will make a great progress which can promote her salary raise. Lacking all these significant information, the author could not draw any recommendation.

In sum, the report is not persuasive as it stands. To strengthen the recommendation, the author must have to provide evidence to prove the teaching and researching abilities of Professor Thomas. And the author also has to show us she has the ability to administer to whole department.

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In this report, the author recommends that the university should give Professor Thomas a $10,000 salary raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson. This recommendation bases on a series of unwarranted assumptions, yet it is unpersuasive as it stands. (这种简洁开头我喜欢)

First of all, the author's conclusion that Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary based on an assumption that all the teaching ability of Professor Thomas is admitted by the students. The mere fact that her classes are among the largest at the university can not conclude to the assumption. It is high possible that her class is much easier than any other class in the department. Maybe (前面已经有过possible了,这里maybe可以不要) students in favor of the class for the reason that they can easy get high mark. (跟前面之间最好加上连接词) The homework Professor Thomas left may be less than other teachers, so students want to choose the course. Any of these scenarios, if true, would serve to undermine this assumption. (可以了)

Secondly, the author's conclusion also relies on another assumption that her research abilities have also be accepted. To justify this assumption, the author provides an evidence that she brought in research grants which are more than he salary in each of the two years. However, we are told nothing about the research grants she brought in earlier years. There is a possibility that she did not introduce enough grants in those years. Only two year's grants can not contribute to (用prove吧,这里再用贡献不是特别精确) her excellent research abilities. Even if she gets enough grants every year, it does not mean that her research ability is excellent. (漂亮,这一点我写得时候想用的不过没敢呵呵,怕来不及) A teacher's research ability is mainly measured by the accomplishment he/she contribute (s) to the realm of science; the research grants only  can grant (用得太多了呵呵 justify) that she has sufficient funds to do research. Without ruling out all these possible factors, the author can not confidently conclude that she worth the salary she gets. (good,上面两段驳斥了conclusion)

Finally, even assuming that all the assumptions above is true, the recommendation that promoting Professor Thomas and raise her salary is unsounded.  As the author claims, Professor Thomas may leave Elm City University for another college. However, there is no evidence to show that this is the case, nor does the author fail (nor再加上fail就是说作者证明了这个假设了...) to substantiate the assumption. Moreover, even if her teaching and research ability is excellent, these bear no relation to the administration ability. The author do not provide any evidence to convince us that Professor Thomas can manage the department well and she will make a great progress which can promote her salary raise. (这句话画蛇添足了,她工资的上涨并不是根据她在未来职位上面表现的奖励,而是奖励现在的成果或者是挽留.) Lacking all these significant information, the author could not draw any recommendation.

In sum, the report is not persuasive as it stands. To strengthen the recommendation, the author must have to provide evidence to prove the teaching and researching abilities of Professor Thomas. And the author also has to show us she has the ability to administer to whole department.

限时之内写成酱紫的话应该比我强了呵呵
前两个body段落段首的两句我都用紫色标记了
那两句话都是可以缩略为一句话的.前一句可以精简的.
酱紫节约的时间就可以充实后面的段落了

不错 真不错^_^